Chane last part of the last sentence to "... to sit on his lap. "
Raffeale who rests his head back on the plush comfortable chair of the car feels his nostrils flare at Bella's scent,feeling content at having her so close to him the urge to pull her closer and have her seat on his thighs become strong.
Fantasy · Empressking
Change the last part of the last srntene to "...seeing their children's fate..." then the srntence makes more sense.
Angela smiles and tells her brother everything and the other parents start trembbling already seeing the faiths of their children.
Fantasy · Empressking
Change"...more heavy..." to "...heavier..." Then your sentence becomes gramatically correct.
Yu Dong did not pay attention to her second husband, instead, she turned her attention to the women on the ground. She said to them, "You better open your mouth and drink this poison if you do not want to get hit. My husband's blows are even more heavy than mine."
Fantasy · fairytail72
Chagne your first sentence to "There was an assasination attempt on the princess on her way here." This indicates that the attempt on the life of the princess had failed. Your original first sentence implies that the assasination attrmot had succeeded and that the princess had died.
— Princess Rania was assassinated on her way here, ' she said slowly, 'All her knights were killed and the princess was left alone and unaccompanied. We happened to be travelling on the same road at the same time. So I decided to help her get to the mansion.
LGBT+ · Meredit_Yuri
Change the last sentence to "I will bring you downstairs." This means that she will bring him down to where the guest is waiting. Your initial sentence, " I will push you down.", suggests either the wife will push her husband down the stairs; or that she will push him down on the bed as a prelude to possible sexual activity.
He responded, and Qiao Xi quickly straightened his clothes. "I'll push you down."
Urban · Lu Sier
Change "more good" to "better"
"Today is the opening ceremony for the drama TALES OF US, everyone should ask questions related to the drama". Yvette said professionally, the reporters were just as fierce as she could remember but she was even more good at dealing with them.
Urban · Silverash863
It's "...haunt you forever..." not "... hunt you forever..."
Ezekiel took a deep breath and held her shriveling shoulders. " Believe me Yvette, yes I did it for myself at first but mostly for you. I was trying to save you, from making your biggest lifetime mistake. He's not right for you. I can't stand by and watch you make a mistake that'll hunt you forever". He replied earnestly.
Urban · Silverash863
Change"...wearing that sane cloth..." to "...wearing the same clothes..." si that your sentence makes more sense to your reader.
Too many questions would make the kids nervous and anxious, "there are some pieces of clothes in that shopping bag, you can change into them, don't let your momma come back and find you, you are still wearing that sane cloth, she would blame me for not being attentive enough..." He didn't have that close bond with them that he could order them around, so he could only use his wife's name to coerce them into doing things.
Urban · Kim_Li_0078
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Change the last part of her last sentence to "... to sit on his lap becomes stronger." Then Don Raffaelo's need becomes clearer.
Raffeale who rests his head back on the plush comfortable chair of the car feels his nostrils flare at Bella's scent,feeling content at having her so close to him the urge to pull her closer and have her seat on his thighs become strong.
Beauty and her Beast:The Don's obsession
Fantasy · Empressking