ZiegHart

male LV 13

love to read, read to love

2018-07-07 Se unió Indonesia
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ZiegHart
ZiegHart
1 months ago
Commented

okay, dear author... in this chapter and some chapter before you promoting others' work and your other work, but where should we check on them?? it seems i cant find it here, or here its written in different title

ZiegHart
ZiegHart
1 years ago
Posted

nice and great read actually...from the writing is good, the concept is great, the pace is natural, characters have their development well written..actually to help new reader, or to better imagining the world, you could make a glossary of the world building, what known planet or something...and the power level of the Lord, and summon, what make them different etc.

ZiegHart
ZiegHart
1 years ago
Commented

wait..isn't white feather should have met and know blue sea when raiding wolf guild?

ZiegHart
ZiegHart
2 years ago
Posted

actually this one has a good future, but dont know why but the story is rushed and everything just fall in to Mc's lap out of ñowhere... dont if the raw like this as well or its just the tl on here got the story "cut" so miserably

ZiegHart
ZiegHart
2 years ago
Commented

so here the day 2, and before he log off and just a little nap

ZiegHart
ZiegHart
2 years ago
Commented

so, is it day 2 or day 3?? why he just use the level up on first day, and the description got chance to level up just say 2times a day, and not stack when not used, right?

ZiegHart
ZiegHart
3 years ago
Commented

okay, at this point i think the story is good and have potential to go up... but one thing is please decide to use first person or third person pov, bcz sometimes it confusing

ZiegHart
ZiegHart
3 years ago
Commented

dont say it that was a flag...