To me this chapter doesn't make sense, it came out of absolutely nowhere. This should have been a canon omake.
You are using way to many hyphens. Hyphens are this -. You didn't need to use any hyphens actually in that entire chapter. Finally, its iron bars not iron fences.
If the MC is going to leave then what was the while point of Avril? Also, why is the MC the only one with a non-western name?
This fic is a rare breed. It is a fic that focuses on an "arrogant youngmaster" but he's not actually an arrogant young master. He comes from the highest possible background, and has encountered an MC which he exploits. There has been talk of lower realms that I really want to read about given that the highest cultivation level down there is probably our MCs current cultivation. Other than that the grammar isn't complete trash which is enough for a 5/5 for me. But other than that I would have to tell all of you to give this book a read. It has immense potential and I hope it is chosen.
Okay that makes more sense. I just thought it was a little sudden.
The Godslaying Pharaoh
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