the way you set the scene gives too much detail on other characters. like the waiter in this chapter.there really was no point in explaining how pretty she was since she isn't a main plot character. also, not over explaining character appearance can help readers get a mental image they like more. since not many people have the same "taste". I do think your story has good potential. so I'm not trying to be mean or anything. just an observation.
it's too over the top in detailing.
aww roundy is so eager to learn
Let me try, let me try again!
The General's Pampering Little Foodie Girl
Fantasy · Yan Shi
arghhhh love this story too much now [img=update]
I feel like the story these last few chapters has been dragging a lot and it makes me want to drop the novel
grammar error on the "5o"
He didn't say anything and prepared 5o get off the carriage. Afterwards, he turned towards Zhao Ming and stretched out his hand for her to hold on and get down as well.
ETERNAL LOVE : A LOVE STORY
Fantasy · Kamlyn
realllllllly Gooooooooood story love it i want more chapters a must read very adorable female lead and funny male lead the male leads sidekick is hilarious
I want more soooooooo good i love the story line it is very funny definitely recommend it 100 percent 😄[img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
my heart was in my throat the entire time. the detail is crazy awesome. 1 million stars to this story i want more than more. left me speechless for words to describe this story correctly. so happy i had the chance to encounter such an amazing story. totally recommend 100%
thank you. I appreciate being listened to. I can't wait.
The Reborn Wife Of The Tyrant CEO
Urban · black_flowertrend