First impressions are everything. That's why authors spend so much effort making them engaging. I haven't read this book, but your attitude (not this review) has told me everything I need to know about what to expect inside. I'll pass.
I haven't gotten all the way through the current backlog of chapters, but I can say one thing. This story is perhaps the only Douluo fanfic I've read that believable heals Bibi Dong. Most either soften her hatred, speed run the healing process, or just make the OC so amazing that she 'gets over it'. This one earns the eventual 'I'm assuming' good Bibi Dong. It respects the trauma itself in a sensitive and compelling way.
You're making the Fatui awfully stupid. This would guarantee a war with Morax and the Adeptus. There's no way to experiment on the 'upcoming archon' without stepping on Liuye's bottom line. You may as well experiment on Rex Lapis himself... biologically, they're the same. Keep in kind, Liyue is CHINA. How would China react if Russia stole the rulers child? I know you're trying to create drama, but I'd recommend you think carefully on how Russia would approach a task as Volatile as this.
Ah, the dramatic irony here is hilarious.
Surprisingly... I wouldn't even call this a power fantasy. The author does a great job - for the medium - of portraying a what if Zhong Li and Paimon were thrown into Douluo Dalu. It feels like an old seasoned deity rather than a young kid going on a power trip. I'd recommend reading.
It's a classic problem with fanfic authors. They have an idea that's cool, but they don't want to take the time to build it out. She doesn't want to reveal she's a dragon slayer? Why not? What consequences could matter enough to be interesting. Dragon slayers are novel, but not particularly pestered in fairy tail. There's a plethora of scenarios that could've been built out but that takes time and patience. Those possibilities are gone now
"I know I haven't been a good member of Fairy Tail, but I would like to rectify that mistake now that Natsu revealed what I am," I told them all, making sure to make my voice carry throughout the guildhall. "My name is Morgana Pendragon and I am a Shadow Dragon Slayer. The kitten on my shoulder is named Lefae, but I call her Fae for short. The dragon that taught me everything I know is Skiadrum, but he is unfortunately dead. My brother killed him."
The Shadow Dragon of Fairy Tail
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There are a myriad of ways you can go about it. Tired old man who's desperate for peace, mental faculties are failing as PTSD and depression kicks in (after his wife died), subtle hits of Kotoamatukami by his most trusted friend who he keeps letting assassinate him... any of these are valid options. My comment was not a joke. Evil Hiruzen is the laziest trope. At best, I'd say a militaristic 'ends justify the means' hiruzen is a more respectful way of approaching that trope. So let me ask you, are you naive enough to believe the World's black and white?
I got up to chapter 4 but had to stop. The grammar doesn't flow well. The author doesn't describe any emotions beyond telling you that they're happening, and what they do describe doesn't make too much sense. It reads like the author has a list of plot points and is just walking through them. It's like the author is just trying to get to the good part and rushing past the back story.
Why are you so concerned with these questions? Just write the story you want to write. If a suggestion sounds intelligent, engage with it. If you believe it's stupid, don't. Remember, the fanfic community is full of people who've seen it all before. If you allow their cynicism to weigh you down, this fic's lifespan will end at 30 chapters.
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original Genshin - The Voracious Vanquisher
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Umbra, a land of eternal night and a dark manifestation of humanity’s dreams. For centuries, pillars of great and terrible power have smothered the flames of conflict, keeping them from erupting into the wars they were always destined to be. But times are changing; a monster has returned to Umbra. He who fell from the Kingdom of Light, now revels unrestrained in the land of eternal night. With his steps, the pillars fall and in his wake the fires rage. New pillars rise to oppose him, but can they compete? Can they challenge the dragon that bested their almighty predecessors? Can they confront the man who created everything they are today with his cold, vile hands? Author’s Note - This is my first official attempt at an original novel. I wanted to try something different. This novel is inspired by and written in the style of anime and light novels. Instead of a conventional isekai, transmigration, or even coming of age novel, I wanted to try my hand at an already established fantasy setting with characters that already live in the world in question. As I want to create the best product I can, feedback is always appreciated and motivating. Updates will be slower in the beginning as I work to establish a firm foundation based on the direction I have planned for this novel and the feedback I receive from the readers.11 Chs 8 Colecciones
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At the edge of death, a fallen divine beast finds herself a successor in Konoha. With a wealth of possibilities at her disposal, a young shinobi will find her place in a world of constant conflict. Follow her journey as she explores the world of shinobi and comes into conflict with the baleful creations born from the world's sins. Alternate Universe.90 Chs 5.2k Colecciones
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A young Rias Gremory decides to leave her family behind after hearing about her pending engagement; her destination, the unexplored continent in the underworld. A decade later, she returns as the hope of the devil race. The Demon Goddess – DxD Universe AU. The world may be similar, but events that occur will be different.41 Chs 1.5k Colecciones
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Genshin - The Voracious Vanquisher
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