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Ellyster
Ellyster
8 months ago
Commented

Here -sensei don't apply since Yaza is not the chunin teacher. It should be some military rank such as -taicho.

The chunin nodded, "Understood, Yaza-sensei."

Naruto: Mixed Heritage(Rewrite)

Naruto: Mixed Heritage(Rewrite)

Anime & Comics · Sidecharacter1

Ellyster
Ellyster
8 months ago
Commented

Here the polite is Ryuji-sensei, not -sama. The usage of -sama is only adequate for nobility (daimio, princesses...), high rank officials (kages, clan heads...) and customers. Also in very very traditional families, it can be used instead of the -san in their family 'title', such as Miwa-obasama instead of Miwa-obasan or the more familiar Miwa-oba.

"But what if you have neither of those Ryuji- sama?"

Naruto: Mixed Heritage(Rewrite)

Naruto: Mixed Heritage(Rewrite)

Anime & Comics · Sidecharacter1

Ellyster
Ellyster
9 months ago
Commented

Usually, thoughts use single quotes 'like this' and dialogue uses double quotes "like this". Being consistent makes it easier to read.

Este párrafo ha sido eliminado.
Naruto : Golden Coin

Naruto : Golden Coin

Anime & Comics · MasterR

Ellyster
Ellyster
10 months ago
Commented

The protagonist knows them, so it's really weird to have them as unknown... feels like a very forced cliffhanger.

[Unknown - Hey, What's up....? It's rare for you to call me that too, so early in the morning.]

Playing PokeMMO In Another World

Playing PokeMMO In Another World

Video Games · DevilHanu

Ellyster
Ellyster
10 months ago
Commented

Really!? I would expect planes falling out of the sky, trains crashing, people being teleported in the middle of surgery... not to mention all the deaths among the kids that were left alone for six hours.

The whole world is in great chaos right now, people from age 19 to 50 are the ones who run the world, Suddenly causing a lot of chaos. Thankfully it was only for 6 hours before they came back and no extreme damage was done in their absence.

Playing PokeMMO In Another World

Playing PokeMMO In Another World

Video Games · DevilHanu

Ellyster
Ellyster
11 months ago
Commented

Not good at cooking -> Good, but not professional -> Professional chefWhat a impressive progression for the first 5 chapters, at this pace of leveling the skills he is going to become Hokage by chapter 20.

After thinking about it for a while, Itsuki decided to open a small restaurant, that could be run by him without hiring any additional help.

Minato May Have Been Your Father But He Ain't Your Daddy

Minato May Have Been Your Father But He Ain't Your Daddy

Anime & Comics · Life_sa_Beach_

Ellyster
Ellyster
11 months ago
Commented

Dumbledore would have called her "Minerva" rather than "professor McGonagall"

Ellyster
Ellyster
1 years ago
Commented

The space before the commas and the dashes after each paragraph are killing me.

It was a dreary and stormy evening the day my life changed drastically. Before I get into all that I should introduce myself , Alexander Drake a fairly normal twenty year old guy all things considered. I have short thick messy black hair and job that barely pays for my rundown one bedroom one bathroom house as well as a small amount put into the rainy day funds under the mattress. Sure it wasn't some glorious existence but I lived alone in two thousand and twenty three America which was quite the achievement let me tell you.-

A random pokemon journey

A random pokemon journey

Video Games · loskro

Ellyster
Ellyster
1 years ago
Commented

If you split an A2 in half you get two A3

Ellyster
Ellyster
1 years ago
Commented

I think that Tutankhamen's tomb is not a pyramid :(

Carter Dean was a renowned British archaeologist and adventurer, celebrated for his expeditions to the Pyramid of Tutankhamun in Egypt and the Manchac Ghost Swamp in the United States.

Reincarnated as Draco's Twin To Dominate Hogwarts

Reincarnated as Draco's Twin To Dominate Hogwarts

Anime & Comics · Scaramousse