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6 days ago
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People are quick to criticize but stay quiet when it's time to give praise. And I have to say it! WHAT AN AWESOME CHAPTER! The fight completely improved. You still kept some things from the previous chapter, but it was the right decision not to discard everything. And Hulk's suit looks way better in this version. Thank you so much for the chapter 🙏

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8 days ago
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But I congratulate you for writing. Overall, your fic is good. Thank you for the chapter.

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8 days ago
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Do you want an honest opinion? The fight wasn't good. Tony talks too much. There wasn't really much action. The fight was basically Tony firing random blasts from his thrusters and going up and down. And Hulk's suit is a strange concept and hard to imagine, let alone in a fight where you mix in nanotechnology tentacles. Honestly, it wasn't terrible, but it wasn't good. My judgment might have been a bit affected as well because I didn't like the concept of Hulk's armor. Besides that, some paragraphs and dialogues seem like they were made by AI

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1 months ago
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Are you writing him to be this foolish on purpose? He already knows everything that’s going to happen, yet he acts surprised. It breaks my immersion in the story. From the start, he knew it was going to be war, yet he acts more timid than Viserys. Viserys seems to have more backbone than him. His every thought is sad and gloomy. The poor prince—rich, heir, with a beautiful wife and children. The characters say he aspired to be king, but where? What actions did he take to avoid the Dance when all he does is brood over everything? If he wanted to avoid the Dance, he could have handed the crown to Rhaenyra and ignored his father’s wishes. Or he could have acted like a man and faced his problems head-on instead of wallowing in self-pity.

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2 months ago
Replied to ImmortalCockroach

I also remember, the protagonist said a few chapters ago

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2 months ago
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Thanks

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  • Reencarnado em The Walking Dead como Carl Grimes original

    Reencarnado em The Walking Dead como Carl Grimes

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