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[HIATUS]It was 2022 outside. A young guy serving in the Russian Guard, on one of his missions, was hit by grenade fragments that severely grazed his internal organs.
Filled with despair and resigned to his fate, he could only slowly wait for his death.
After the sparkle of life disappeared in his eyes, a quiet ringing with an indistinct voice sounded in his head. - "The Mafia system has been successfully integrated into the host's body. If you accept the terms, click on the [Accept] button.”
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I will leave my shameless 5-star review. And why not, as they say, I do what I want)................................I'm not a native English speaker, so don't scold me.
So far it's very good and personally, I've never read a Peaky Blinders fic before so I am very hopeful for a good fic with this one.
honestly the story has a good idea and a very interesting MC but in my opinion the only thing that spoiled the story was the system i really don't like stories with speechless system that This makes MC ridiculously OP since he is in a normal world with no magic or super powers
Хах, не думал что найду русскоязычного автора на просторах webnovel. Удачи и... "Кто убил марка!?" Это просто мем ничего серьезного... #_# ^_^
The main story is good. The idea of the main character and his surroundings sounds good. But the biggest turn-off for me was the system. It does not suit the era and the story at all. Especially one that sounds more like a human than an ai. Because of the system, I had to skip when mc interacts with the system because all of the sudden, the tone and vibe of the story change from a dark world to a sunny and full of light one. If you want to include a system to that kind of world, take a read at the Unbound (Multiverse: The Walking Dead, Game of Thrones?). The author of this novel implanted a system that suits the current world/theme of the story. It is not interactive, it is not focused. It just exists there and you forget about it unless the mc uses it directly. I'm being harsh here because the story has a lot of potential. If done right, it should explode. Especially since I can't find peaky blinders fanfiction that is, well, stories and not full-on romances that don't make sense.
Please continue, this is the first Peaky Blinders fanfic I ever found. And it looks very interesting. ....................................................................
the story has a good idea and an interesting main character but he has a system and what spoiled the story in my opinion this happens because his system is very OP honestly the MC is in a world where magic and powers don't exist if his system was weaker and didn't give supernatural abilities to the MC the story would be much better since with the MC system and the only person in the world with powers that makes the story very boring
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good story thought giving him powers where no one else has powers is just kinda boring since nothing to challenge him also did anyone notice author is giving the same response to everyone who has Criticised his system like it's literally copy and paste even if the review isn't talking about the same thing
Mini review of the few chapters there are. First "Peaky Blinders" fanfic I've read, I hope I'm not disappointed xd. Writing quality: English is not my main language, I think there were minor errors, nothing to disturb reading. Update Stability: There are only 10 chapters, not much to say. Development of the story: Medium slow, and the chapters are very short for me. And from what I read, it seems that the protagonist does not like the Shelby family. Character design: Very few chapters to comment on the personality of the MC, but with those 10 chapters the personality of the MC seems absurd to me, and he loses his temper easily. World Fund: There is nothing, but apparently it will be the same as the series "Peaky Blinders" Overall Score: 3.6
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the idea is good but the way author writing and the errors make the story confusing. if the author can edit hia work this will be much better
Im just want to see how far this story! We are fooking shelby!! ............................................................................
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This is not a review of the story itself, but to thank the author for writing a Peaky Blinders ff, I was looking for ff of this topic for a long time and couldn't find any, so thanks, I'll write another review. later after reading the chapters. (Google translator)
This novel had been in my saved list for 9 months before that's how interesting it was and still is. Author San if u are still alive can you continue on this novel please Thank you
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