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One piece: Journey with a system

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Autor: Shaikh_Tohaa

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A Title is nothing but a name without power no title is of any use if you are not able to help yourself and the ones closest to you,


So I will become strong, strong enough that no one can stand against me and my might.

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Golias

Well, come on, the story is not the worst I’ve read, yet it made me quit even when the worst ones didn’t.   "But is the story that bad?" Well, no, but I have a list of my own reasons, which can also be yours. Reason 1- Mc marine I am not saying that being a marine is bad, by no means, I have read many good stories of marines, the problem is that the author skipped all that part and ran from him joining the Garp until he became a reserve admiral in two chapters. (I know this may be for hiding certain things, but this is also my third reason later.) Reason 2- Mc joins Luffy MC joins Luffy's crew when he meets him, I wasn't expecting that, ever, MC says it's for a while and because of a mission, but for me it still doesn't pay to be under someone, even more when you have the strength of an admiral and the luffy in this phase has at most the strength of the crocodile, what will he be doing there? Watching the story go on while having tea and writing your book, not my type, sorry. Reason 3-I hate mystery The author says that the MC has a whole reason to do what he does and a hidden personality, okay, but I hate mystery! When I start a story I think, the MC is me with a different personality, let's see what I'm going to do and see in third person. The problem when the author hides everything is that I can't do this anymore, I'm just a guy listening to someone else's story and the person is still prolonging the events when he tells me to create a “suspense”, it irritates me, knowing that he has hidden reasons irritates me, knowing that he has a hidden personality irritates me. Finally, author, I'm not writing this review to harm you, but for people like me who read the reviews before reading a story, I really wanted to read a review like that before I started reading, anyway ... good luck with your story, I will leave the criticism as a spoiler for only people like me to read.

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4yr
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Chaotic_Winter

I’ll support you till the end if you make it a harem, as it’s a one piece world with lots of hot sexy women so please consider that plus do add some echhi content

6yr
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Heavenlydemon

Fuck... Mc is fucking idiot Why he adventure with straw hat its make me drop it............................. (-__-) (*__*)(%__%) (®__®) (°_°) (¶_¶)

4yr
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GramDemolition

The MC is naive and gives a Naruto vibe,which I particularly hate.I read 20 chapters and all he is doing is whining and getting angry at the things he can't control.Not even training for the three months he was considered a slave and instead of being vengeful and planning to blow Mary jeoise to the high heavens and making escape a priority he is like mix of Naruto and Luffy.My main problem with the MC is his lack of initiative in anything hell he could have directly stored his collar in storage space and quietly staged an escape with the others.I counted 3 times he was saved by luck and sacrifice of others.He wasted three months and in a single moment of anger undo the effort that the other spend on him indicating that he is a pig teammate who pulls others into their troubles.I don't believe any of the current admirals in any country will be as rash and brash as this one.

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Fadhli

The story is well although we can a few mistakes here and there. The reason why it is 2 stars because of the plot. It seems too repetitive. If I wanted to see Luffy's adventure, I just watch the anime. Even his personality seems one dimensional. The writer should not skip the MC formative years because it is important to the character. Then what about Hancock did he just forget all of a sudden because that is stupid. He did spend a lot of time with girls during his time as a slave. Overall, this fanfic is a failure,

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DarthVegito

Found out our MC is a slave to the celestial dragons sooooooooooooooooooooo 1/5 Rating no matter what. just not a good fanfic in general but that was kinda the last straw

4yr
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DearCompanion

☆ special new year's giveaway ☆ I know how frustated it was for you to find something decent to read. Therefore, we come up with a list of pretty good if not better than 95% trash novel litterred everywhere. You can download it here -> bit .ly/haremnovel for free. It's based on our years of experience tasting different novels. I remember that i have unfortunately found something where there's a certain MC who're up to now hasn't killed any one I mean every time he fights someone they run away and he is stronger than them practically all the time. They always come back but he never kills them he says he's going to but he never does. Its been the same people trying to kill him over and over again and the list just keeps getting bigger but he still doesn't kill them. He lets them walk away then when they attack him again he says I will kill you but then just lets them leave. I'm not even kidding he literally lets them walk away and says do not chase after them just let them go? They don't even use treasures to get away they just walk away snort and say I will kill you next time. That type of MC is cringe a.f. Obviously we will not include that type of MC to our list. What are you waiting for? Just go -> bit. ly/haremnovel . Or Do you still want to read something that made your beastmode on There's a fanfic where Meh. Mc can't cultivate what will he do there sightseeing? 🤔 I'm sure this will be like the original that Mc is always getting underestimated then Mc will prove them that they are all wrong!! 👎😅 and author actually says that Mc is not OP!! ****ing hell the original Mc is SO OP but you ****ing say you won't make him op???Seriously? Looks like this author is masochist that likes useless Mc that always gets push around but always getting saved by his cheats or plot armors If I'm only there on your side I already strangle you to death and then let you eat horse p*ss, horse sh*ts ,dog sh*ts and every sh*ts in the world then I will just flush your body on your toilet That type of thing. Haha, anyway we will continue our research so good luck.

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TheDaoOfTheBear

I just read the first chapter though it does feel a little rushed I love it and would recommend it to my friends. I’m not telling you to start out in the womb and tell each day detail by detail I’m just saying after the quick start which I love you should slow it down. I’m

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aborotob

awesome story line so far, the characters are great! can't wait for more development and this has an lot of potential to become a good fan-fin novel. work hard!! and thank you. Well good luck and plz don't drop the novel. View More

6yr
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AaronTaichou

Sucks!!!!!!! Way too slow and boring for my taste! I only read the first three chapters and it already tells me that you are rushing things. As a fellow one piece write I can tell you it really helps if you watch the anime episodes while writting. It will make such a big difference.

5yr
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mr_popo

First a question before the review. There are some old reviews even tho the chapters are new... maybe you deleted the chapters to remake the novel, that i don't know. But i read he joined the straw hats in a review and so, does he join the straw hats in the 'remake'? Story wise: Interesting that he started as a slave and the system is... well a system. Writing: Some mistakes here and there but nothing unreadable. Story: Not enough out there to really say anything. Char design: Same as story World background: Should be good as in OP has a good background. Dont know if it wil be shown in this novel tho... atleast not yet. (not enough chaps)

4yr
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Shaikh_Tohaa

Don't give a review or comment on the reason for Mc joining the Marine because his reason for joining the Marine is the biggest twist of this story. So if you excuse me and continue reading peacefully you will be able to understand the story better and with enough time you will be able to understand every reason for him every action and at the same time, you will start liking the story. Also, those who think that the Protagonist of this story is a warm and loving person with a carefree attitude than I will say that you are too naive my friend and you haven't seen anything dark or more twisted personality than our MC in this story is ....

4yr
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musti48

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FAP_Master_

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George_WEB

THE mc Sun Reo reincarneted in One piece world in the form of a minx human hybrid as a tenryuubito slave With the potential to eat three types of devil fruit Being forced to eat the magnet fruit and slaving together With the boa sisters start to walk the path of a marine and having adventures alongside the strawhats. What will happen NEXT? What will be his NEXT fruits.? My vote is for enel fruit to combine With his magnet fruit bring a new level of power.

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