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On a night of seeming enchantment, young Tinashe finally meets the love of of his life. She who has remained nameless and faceless until this night of seeming enchantment, the gentle voice who has kept him awake on many a restless night gently be speaking quietly to his heart, when he has lay awake, tossing and turning in bed, thinking of her.
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Although I don't quite understand the concept of this story, probably due to cultural differences, this story is well-written with neat paragraphs and the character development is good. If I have to squeeze out something that need to be improved, it will be some paragraphs with short dialogue mixed with narration, it would be best if dialogues can be separated from narration to prevent some readers from getting confused. But it's not a big deal. Overall, it is a good story.
The second I saw Tinashe and recognized familiar language, I automatically fell for the book. It's nice reading something of your own culture and language for a change. Story is well written and can relate on most things being talked about. Looking forward to more.
The first chap just got me hooked! That's some start btw! Keep it up! I'm gonna read this full today!! Good work and keep it up! Hope that the other one is just as good!
The good description was the first thing that caught my eye... Adequate description, neat grammer. And it is so nice to see a book based on another culture as I'm sure it is. Great job author !!!
It was awesome, I love your description and it was even easier you could know who is talking.
Give a try bro and keep on writing all the time. The story is good and the character is awesome.
Fantastic use of descriptions in the first chapter, I am loving the plot and the characters. The pacing is also well timed. Keep up the great work.
This is a honest review, I need to pick more from your writing style. the story sounds like the usual alien dailogues but the first chapter makes it a more lively discussion. Wow, I am going to read more.
I'll start with the good:The story development is arguably the best part about this novel. By chapter 3, you are hooked after getting the general idea of what's going on. I'm not that into contemporary romance (I'm more into fantasy romance) but I like the realistic feel of the characters actions, especially the predicament that Tinashe himself in.As for my gripes:While the grammar in a manner of sentence construction is good, I think the problem lies in punctuation. I think author should really invest some time into correcting the errors, they affect the flow of reading. I also think giving a greater degree of distinctive characterisation to our characters' likeness is also needed.Overall this book is really good!
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Good reading, clear and precise even for me who is not native English. My only concern, it was short 😓 But man it was good 🤣🤣🤣 and what is this cover?
Author, The story is too short...I need more 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣. Thank for your work. Keep it up and press. Developing worlds is the key in most stories. As you continue publishing you improve on alot in terms of Character and ideas. Cheers
The story is interesting and I like it, but there are a few things to be aware of such as punctuation and most importantly the name of the main character in this novel. At first, I thought Tinashe was a woman, but after reading the next few chapters Tinashe is a man. I feel that her name should be changed to something that presents a male like Michaela, Jacob, or another masculine name. I hope the author will continue to improve, keep up the good work!
This is an interesting story. it gives an insight into some fundamental issue taking over our today's society. Great job author. I am curious to find out how Tinashe would reclaim his rightful inheritance.👍👍👍
"1. Develop your characters to make them relatable and three-dimensional. 2. Avoid cliches and bring fresh perspectives to common tropes. 3. Use descriptive language to create a vivid image of your characters and setting. 4. Create a compelling plot with obstacles and conflicts to keep readers engaged. 5. Edit your writing for clarity to ensure it flows smoothly and is easy to read. 6. Consider the pacing of your story to keep readers invested in the plot. 7. Use dialogue to reveal character and advance the story. 8. Show rather than tell to create a more immersive experience for the reader. 9. Use sensory details to create a vivid and engaging atmosphere. 10. Keep the reader guessing with twists and surprises that subvert their expectations." Keep these main points in mind if you don't want to end up destroying your brain cells after writing half of story. Good luck with your work. 👍
Great choice of words, love your descriptions can definitely learn a thing or two 👍👍
I've read the first chapter and I love it so much so far. The characters and plot is good 😍😍