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Gabriel is 5 years old. After he was born he was raised in an orphanage. He is what you would call a genius. On a fateful day when he was 5 years old, he started to see memories of another person. He saw them like it was a movie. He saw many things. Gabriel realized that these memories were probably from his past life. Through these memories, Gabriel realized how terribly he was treated in the orphanage. He ran away.
Gabriel saw an abandoned house and lived there for a night. After waking up the next day he suddenly met the neighbors of this house Phil and Claire Dunphy, whom he realized were in the memories of his past life. Phil and Claire were worried after seeing how he lived and decided to adopt him.
The young boy would slowly start to trust people again in the future thanks to his parents.
The description isn't good. I know that. I racked my brain but couldn't find anything better. The world will be a mix of various different TV shows and movies.
The MC will be a genius. Yes, I know it is incredibly hard to portray a genius character not being as smart as him, but I will try my best to narrow the gap with the help of the internet. Due to that, my updates will probably take longer than on my other novels as I need more time to research.
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Meh not bad, atm it's boring and I want to get back to Modern Family. At first my first problem was that things were going too quick like another reviewer said. The second was that he is doing things, but not really interacting with the family. For instance, he has a crush on Haley I believe, but no explanation on why. What makes him like her? We get shown minimal interactions between them two besides him TELLING US he stopped her first kiss, I believe? You could've written a scene of what happened. Another problem is that he's very focused on education and his career instead of creating a story around the family and interacting with them before the canon show starts. Nothing wrong with that, but It could've been more balanced in interacting with them more. Now were in a movie I forget the name of and the only reason I know that is because the events all seem very familiar. There was no explanation on who these people are or even if the mc knows them from his past life. Now the story is just copying whatever happened in the movie. Again, very quickly. Way too fast, slow down. The author could have had the mc interact more with the characters and change things. But from what I can tell it's the same. I believe it all comes down to slowing the story down and integrating the main character into the world you've built rather than him being a side show when things are happening. I have a bad feeling that when Modern Family canon starts it's going to be the same thing where the mc has no impact on the story, and instead we just get a copy of what happens in the show with him just sorta being there or him doing his own thing while canon is happening. At the moment it's boring with the comedy movie part of the story, but I will wait and hope it gets better. Btw, sorry for the word vomit of a review but I wanted to get my thoughts down.
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This fanfic has a lot of potential so long as the author does not ghost us. Highly recommend
it's just plain boring , characters have no depth. they are like robots. first few chaps were ok but later it got worse
It pretty good all around. As modern family is one of my favourite shows I am allways in a lookout for something good. I especially liked adding the Big Bang theory in it. The story feels a little rushed but it’s fine for now as I assume when it gets to the start of modern family it will slow down.
Muy buena historia que te hace esperar los siguientes capítulos con dicha, espero que el autor siga el desarrollo de la historia y no la pause
Positives: 1-the blend of Gabriel's current life with his past memories creates an intriguing atmosphere. 2-phil and Claire represent hope and support, adding depth to the narrative. 3- witnessing Gabriel starting to rebuild his trust in people, giving the story an emotional dimension but it was fast if i was one who love slow pase its would be not good. Negatives: challenge of portraying Gabriel's genius Its hard to present his exceptional intelligence in a believable way and that donse't help the story. rating: ★★★★☆ (4/5) overall its good fic + its in my library i am waiting for that new chap lol if not it was fun short story
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It's just an okay story, stuff goes by way too quickly for it to be good. There's almost no reaction to what he creates with his intelligence. It's sort of like "Oh he made something super amazing cool" That's all the reaction you get from a family member. His adopted family has no reaction to his intelligence, no reaction to the phone he made. So I wish this story was a bit slower and added chapters that included the reaction of his new family when it comes to his intelligence and the businesses he creates. I think it would have been better if he was adopted as a teenager by the family and went to school with the rest of the kids of the Dunphy family. That way it could follow the storyline of modern daily while adding your own with the MC that's a genius. Also, The story after the first few chapters stops feeling like you're in the modern family world.
It's aight. Personally the story is going too fast. In three chapters he has escaped a gang, gotten adopted and met the entire family. Also the writing is mid. Writing in first Person works sometimes but this just isn't it. it's written in a weird mix of past tense and present tense. The plot is intreasting. I don't know how or why MC knows about Modren Family. It's probably because I skimmed it. Keep working author but try to make the ploy a little slower. You could have made him escaping the gang into multiple chapter. Yet you finished it in a couple hundred words. Besy of luck author and keep writing to improve :)
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