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Just an ordinary girl. That's what Claire Seneth seemed to be. That's what Claire Seneth wants to be. But luck has other plans for her.
What will a girl do when she's forced to live other's happy and sad points again and again, but with slight changes each time?
What will a girl do when she is detached from luck?
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I love the story! The concept is amazing. The author has done a wonderful job of creating a very interesting plot and a very vivid and dynamic MC. Plus her personality is just wonderful. There is also comedy in the story, making it even better. The author knows what he/she is doing. Well done! It is absolutely great you will not regret reading it! Added to my Library.
Amazing concept, and the way the author tackle the backstory of the mc is interesting too. I also like how the mc's personality is directly influenced by her situation. Good job and keep it up author!
Two chapters so far, can't quite judge the story development just yet. The writing quality is great, I was impressed. The chapters are captivating, it was able to hook me from the start. I was able to portray the looks of the characters in a matter of a few paragraphs. If there is anything to fix, that would be the comma misuse, and punctuation errors that I've noticed in some of the dialogues. There were times when periods should be commas, but hey? One proofread and that will fix everything! (I guess) since I noticed they were a few only.
Cool premise. I'd like to see where this goes. Groundhog day is a concept that I'd also like to tackle one day. Review-wise, minimal grammar hiccups here and there, nothing too major. Descriptors are immersive enough and the prose and dialogue flows smoothly. Keep on writing👍
This is an extremely cute story, a great premise. I almost hate that I started reading it so early because I would have liked to have gotten further in before running out of story to read! There are some punctuation errors, but really, very few. Definitely looks like a story worth watching.
Wow, the premise of the story is interesting! I'm looking forward to see the backstory behind her powers! I hope you keep working on this! :)
Nice story! I really like the idea of the novel and can't wait for more! Wonder what will happen to the MC if people find out about her unique condition🤔 Good job!
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Reading both of your books, I can pretty much say that I love the concepts that you create. Though the foundation may not be that unique, the way that you incorporate them in your story is a thing in itself. The setting of this world is still the modern one, but Claire's disposition and how her small world could be strung along with the ability that she could not control was the very point of interest. Claire has the typical vibe of a school girl on the calmer spectrum. I'm anticipating her future wherein she could control her powers, even supposing that it won't come to life. It's just that, I thought that it might be a waste if no development would occur regarding her relationship with her ability to turn back time for a few minutes. Jerry is a good character to partner with Claire. Although they might not have that much difference in personalities, they're overall interactions are the most refreshing to read in this story. I love that Claire's powers activate during normal occurrences, nothing major, and that shows the perks of the ability even more. (Maybe excluding the matter with my favourite character, flufferino) I did some thinking regarding the butterfly effect though. Does it extend to a wider area or just within a close proximity from Claire? Her actions might be insignificant, at the least, but they must have some effect on the future of her surroundings. You have a thing with dialogues, aligning them appropriately with the characteristics of your character. It's very fun to read knowing that the dialogues perfectly describes how the character would react. Most of your characters are school kids, so it shows on the conversations. In terms of mistakes, I just noticed that there were several misuse/absence in punctuation marks and some typos. I know you're on the way to fix that, so go. Also, I just felt that the overall pacing is quite inconsistent. Perchance, it's connected to the scenes that you decide to show. The transitions and expositions are pretty much on the spot. I do have some suggestion. Instead of using === for the transition in between Claire moving back in time, I think that a phrase will work. (i.e. Then, as if time turned back, Claire saw the ice cream on Jerry's hand, still maintaining its shape) Overall, I really adore both of your stories. This might not have been a good review, but the ambience of your stories (probably more of Claire-voyant) is something effervescent. It immerses the reader into a time of lighthearted reading. Hessie, I will always support you, and please believe that you're a better writer than how you painted yourself to be. ILYSM!!! Go go!
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