Bleach-The Sword God's Wives and Concubines

Warning: NTR and grape warning! One of MC's woman was graped for about 200 years. Read at your own risk! Or if you like that kind of stuff, that's your choice. After posting this review, I am going to drop this fanfic, remove this from my library and delete this from my history.

So... this story is technically well-written. Grammar is basically flawless and the story is coming along fine, still kinda in the beginning period where they're establishing backgrounds and introducing/building conflict. Maybe a little too reliant on flashbacks for my taste, but that's a personal preference. My main issue with this story comes from the interactions between the characters. The relationship with women seem pretty shallow or not currently fleshed out, which I can only attribute to the use of flashback sequences to build background. The relationship may be super deep, but we don't know that because all the development happened offscreen in the past and hasn't been introduced yet. The MC is built up as some legendary figure but his exact powers haven't been full explained. In fact, one of the first things that happens is he's told that he's not allowed to use most of them and then gets scolded like a naughty child. His reaction is pretty dismissive and a little petty, but he seems to be cowed as soon as the Captain-Commander (who definitely won't be winning any grandfather of the year awards) threatens his wife. This continues to happen and he continues to just kinda take it. I, personally, don't like that approach. I feel like constantly threatening your loved ones should be past most people's bottom lines for acceptable behavior. It doesn't really matter if you believe they won't follow through or that it was a family member that said it, that just feels like it's going too far. Nowhere has the MC been shown capable of instantly being by his wife's side in order to protect her, so I can only treat that as a legitimate threat. The MC being repeatedly cowed by those threats, without really pushing back or trying to change the situation, just seems inconsistent with his established character. The guy who tells the ruling body, "Nah, you can deal with your own problems from now on" isn't letting that go. Also, it's a little disorienting for Soi Fon to be accepted as the MC's third wife after being together with the MC for, I believe it said, several decades in one chapter (that also reveals this to be a polyamorous harem, instead of a polygamous one) to turn around and LEAD THE GROUP HOLDING HIS FIRST WIFE HOSTAGE right after. To me, that just shows she shouldn't have been in the harem to begin with, her loyalty obviously lies elsewhere.

went with ntr/grape route and that's an absolute no for me, the writing itself and ideas were interesting tho.

Impressions up to chapter 11: I kind of like the format you've adopted for Bleach, you manage to develop the women and then MC, even characters who appeared little were well represented, while there are good lemons, one criticism would be that you didn't develop katori well enough, unohana had all the screen time (which I liked a lot by the way), unohana seemed like the real wife while katori just a consort.