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"Y-Y-You can see me". Said the mysterious gothic-lolita
Aarick nods at her statement.
"But how is that possible". I'm the pillar of existence how can y-y-you".
Sniff, Sniff finally some-ones is able to comprehend my existence.
Aarick looks at the crying girl with confusion so to cheer her up he pats her head.
For the first time since the dawn of all creation, the pillar of existent has finally felt the touch of one of her creations.
What is your name the gothic-lolita asks Aarick with a beautiful smile?
Then the Pillar of existence watch as the first living being to comprehend her existence took out a notebook and began writing something
"Hi, I am Aarick".
"Cant, you talk". The beautiful grey-blackish hair gothic-lolita asks in concern to the human who now holds a special place in her heart.
Aarick then began to write again but this time he removes his black face mask.
And what the Pillar of existence saw shock her.
Both the page and inside his mouth.
"I bite off my own tongue". The pillar of existence didn't need to ask why he did it she could see it in the child's dead eyes one devoid of all life she knew the person who she has now officially considered an equal was suicidal she was shaking at the very fact.
I have decided I shall make you my...
***PLEASE TAKE NOTE THAT I DO NOT OWN THE RIGHTS TO ANY ANIME COMIC OR GAMES THAT WILL OCCURS DURING THE STORY I ONLY OWN THE CHARACTERS AND ABILITIES THAT I MIGHT CREATE DURING THE STORY P.S THIS IS MY STORY SO I WILL DO WHATEVER THE HELL I PLEASED SO IF DON'T LIKE WELL BE ALL MEANS THE EXIST IS TO YOUR LEFT***
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Hm this is a odd one, have you ever heard a joke and stead of laughing you just thought 'that was funny', like this looks like a good story, but I'm having zero fun. The author is really creative that's for sure, interesting world overall, but the biggest fault here is the storytelling, if I had to guess I would say author is not that used to writting in english, which is not that much of a problem on fanfics, but massive world building + bad storytelling coupled with the non-linear style of explaning will live you confused, the fanfic part of the story didn't even began and I was bored out of my mind. Just my opinion, no hate. Much love.
I will be honest (100%)... I hate the first 6 chapters. It's honestly a headache to understand what's going on. Let's talk about MC, an ugly and fat person, emo and depressive. He is missing his tongue (or so I managed to understand) and attends school to get his daily dose of beating, strangely everyone seems to ignore this fact, or the author didn't bother to think that if one person is killing another in the middle There are other people outside the school who can see what happened and call the authorities/police. In addition there is a clear lack of connection with the MC, the author gives more prominence to other scenes and other people irrelevant to the plot, also MC is rarely mentioned and speaks / writes in a cringe way, which I honestly can't stand. Everything is messy and confusing and there are countless errors and nonsense here that I couldn't ignore because of how grotesque they are. There are many other things that annoy me about this novel but I don't want to continue writing. # So I will say my personal rating: not recommended until complete rewrite where the author removes all the scenes and fights of people who are not MC and if the author cleans up his mess and create a normal or slightly supernatural world. He wanted to create a mega world with powers lvl universe but this is a disaster 😬😬😬 (Google translate)
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the problem i have with this fanfic is mainly the writing quality, because of some typo, weird choice of word, misplacement of (" "), lack of uses of comma in a sentence, and some sentence is so convoluted that i have to read multiple times to make sense of it. for the minor problem of this fanfic is the character design of some antagonist(?) kinda off put for me and the upload schedule is not consistent. for the story and world background i think I will give 5 star(?)
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I like it it's one of the best so far that I've red please continue I like the character development and he's interaction and the perfect combination of the different anime is good
The story is good, the idea for the novel is also interesting. Your characters are also okay in my open. But the huge turnoff of this novel is the writing. Sentences are jumbled and mixed together due to lack of proper periods and marks. This made the story to be hard to read. You can use this (') mark for the MC dialogue and any character thoughts, while you can use (") quotation mark for normal dialogue.
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Just some gammar mistakes so far in the first 5 chapters(what I'm up to so I dont know the rest). It's pretty good so far, no issues except for gammar. please use grammerly, im almost dying from reading this. xD
[OC]Pandora Best WAIFU wooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!! Good stuff btw keep it up ...............................................................................
The author is great and is a great writer in my opinion. Also, the author may incorporate a couple of memes here and there and they are funny af well the way he writes them in. If you don't like yandere's you are a prude lets be honest here.
Not much to say so far but it’s an interesting idea! Yes yup yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yup yes I yes yup yup yes yes yup yup yes yes I
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good good good great great great please dont drop please dont drop i wanna see this to the end i hope it isnt dropped i love how youve incorperated so many anime chracters into this novel and it actually makes sense to
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Im wordless Wednesday so fricking awesome !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! More!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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I am the True-god of creation who created the daughter of nothingness my existence is abstract so picture me however you like but because I made the world of loner I shall shamelessly give myself a 5-star review P.S this project actually has story already planned out as far as volume 1 please do enjoy.