World Hopping With Gacha

LV 11

Garrick_D

Ugh.. the original version of this story had a much better premise. Not only is the mc here a burgeoning edgelord, he’s incredibly close to just being a villian. You gave a character that’s suppose to have Arthur’s memory’s and powers to a person who isn’t even close to what Arthur encapsulates as a person. Unless the mc was just so evil that it took Arthur to even him out to neutral, then I don’t think the character works at all.

LV 4

MercenaryRollen

mc is stupid 👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎👎

LV 1

Aroa_ala

3 times the charm right? Well the fic starts weird, you dont know the mc motives or anything until that weird chapter, then it keeps being weird because the mc doesnt change anything about the story? There are maybe 3 or 4 interactions with the other characters, and none of them have an impact in the mc, well, apart from Tonks, which is actually an enjoyable character. All in all a 6/10

LV 3

skya7a3

story alright so far . I really hope that the author doesn't make the mc eage lord .mc doesn't have a goal, which is a problem . overall, 6.5 / 10 will see what the author does in the future and which world does he visit

LV 3

Kaal2806

So...... I have been following you work since the first fic. The story had it's ups and downs but was enjoyable. I know you have a stack ready for future updates but the Current story has become too monotonous. If possible just make sure that in his 3rd year he has his first world hop. Please pay attention to gacha too. The gacha must be meaningful and never...... I repeat NEVER ever give out useless rewards. It can be anything from a set of clothes to systems. The gacha must not not give some dirt or rusted nails,etc. It MUST be something useful. Even a dull sword has it's own uses. Again, love the story but it can always be better, so try your best.

LV 4

ChildishSin

So for me right now its decent. The main character at thr start was the mist annoying and incompetent character I've ever read about. but acter like 10 chapters all that whiny talk was gone and well he was still whiny but atleast its not in my face. Also the main characters motivation is still pretty cheap right now. But I think to solidify it just give him some sort of event that can make him truly test himself and just don't rush it you have all the time in the world.

LV 4

Griffin138

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LV 3

DaoistHeartAttack

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LV 11

JustTiredOfPicking

2.8/5 4|4|2|1|2| The writing is decent. || can't say much abt updates for now (rewrite). ||unreasonable badly executed nerfs, edging XD, || unlikeable, dumb rtard of an mc that throws tantrums and whines in every other chap. || meh||

LV 1

Eins_olgon

Слишком тупой главный герой, слишком всё удачно, слишком просто, слишком не реалистично, слишком одно типично и скучно. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой. Тупой главный герой.

LV 4

PrinceOfNothing

Good enough. MC is improving, although he was very passive until a few chapters ago.

LV 12

BlackRaven_

this is for authors to improve, you are using too much Ai, it is ending ur sentences in flowery words that no one would like, for people who have no idea how ai writes it's ok but people who work with ai (most of the people on this platform) to edit / translate novels would be the first ones to point it out. although you did try to cut the access lines even so it looks as though that you are not doing enough, 2nd please don't use such seriousness sentence, and words like it would change his future, the trials to come. sentence like these please stop writing them every 2 chapters. although this too is mostly because of ai. I would suggest you write a chapter on your own and then copy past it to your preferred ai, and just tell it to edit the words and correct the grammar and typos. this would ensure that you create your own writing style and people get something worthwhile. the storyline is good tho. and get ur facts straight. the Veritaserum would put people in daze and most likely the person would effectied would only get precise answers to the question they have not have full blown conversation with the people around them. sniper seriously??? you do realise that you need to look at the eyes to aim right??? that was just dumb man, please fix that. anyhow don't take it to heart, I don't usually write reviews but iIwanted to see your story so I am giving my honest opinion that would help you out. it's batter to improve these things for the long run.

LV 1

Aroa_ala

Yeat 2 makes the story way better, it uses the lack of purpose that Arthur had as a key point in his development and shows content in the world, not just a narration of him trying to not interfere. 7.5/10 The .5 is because y2 is still being developed, its going well, so if it ends well, it would be an 8

LV 14

FAfter

enjoyable, I have no real complaints to make.