Reviews of Harem Streamer System: Every Crime I Broadcast Wins Me a Superheroine by SleazyPen - Webnovel

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SleazyPen

If you have any question, and any question at all, feel free to ask here :) I put the five stars by mistake, but we all make mistakes haha~

2mth
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Prakhar_Baghel

Mc is very much a pushover, always getting pushed around by people, he never takes the initiative , always going with the flow and it's so annoying.

17h
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DT_Apex
LV 11 Badge

Refreshing and fun. Forget the Novels where the level of power is the basis of a coherent continuation for the development of the character's strength and for his comparisons with others (whether they are good or bad). This is a world of superheroes where everyone has their own strengths and weaknesses (although with recent developments I don't see how some say interested in finding Scott can actually be dangerous for his current level). The characters and comments of the streams are the real strength of Novel as well as the humor brought by the madness of the women surrounding the MC. I don't know if the World Building will space or not outside the Earth's orbit but it is secondary since the focus of the whole Novel are the interactions between the MC, the super heroines and the public as well as the truth of the Society and the world of superheroes in general. The only flaw that I found in this certainly different genre is that the MC does not have a real character development even after having better understood how wrong the world of super heroes is ...It also tends to have too weak a side as regards the approach and the relationship with the heroines: SPOILER - - - - - Maya is a bitch who got Scott insulted by her agent right in front of her ... Even if they reconcile since she is redeeming everything she has done, it does not change; Emma falls in love with him because "he is like old heroes" but she does nothing to become one and even when he is declared a terrorist she says nothing just because she would go against the agency that controls her (together with Maya and Lady Fortress) ...Hypocrisy, all three; now there is the story of Rope girl and her team (including the traitor Deathmark) etc in the last chapters and although it is a mission entrusted to them the truth is that they must kill a person who saved the city and is clearly a hero and not a terrorist yet agree to do it ... I'm definitely forgetting something but the point is that MC is someone who hates conforming to the world because he knows how disgusting it is so accepting certain actions both from people who say they love him and from people who go against him just because they have to adapt to the world make him look like a pushover. It is probably this aspect of him that makes interaction with other female characters easier but I believe that in some situations making him firmer in his beliefs and making others adapt to him and not the other way around could create different dynamics and would help develop a another side of him he definitely needs ...

5d
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Big_Hank

The concept of the series is good, but the characters and communication are terrible. Even though it is a harem tag, every female character that MC has a relationship with is good at first and then becomes a bad female character by the author. For example, while MC's girlfriend started off very nice at first, she suddenly turns to the NTR route and lies to MC. Even though she says she wants to be a real hero and doesn't want to be a slave to corporations, she goes and becomes a corporate slave. From where? Why would the author do such a st*pid thing? The second incident is when Elena and Mc are about to have s*x, the bad guy suddenly comes and ruins the show. Then Elena ceases to be a harem member after. The writer shows it and doesn't give it away and it's like this all the time. I think it will take at least 1000 episodes to see that it is a proper harem.

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DaoistLwCnMT

yo this novel is really worth it one chapter is 50 slides Long i have never seen any novel with this much chapter length but I like it I don't even feel it's long the story is very intriguing and The chapters are really worth to buy with coins most of novels has 20 25 slides some are even less than that but this NOVEL has really good chapter length and worth it love the story will write another review [img=update]

7d
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Scape_Goat391

it's trully are rare find, one of those books that has you captivated from the very start. and one that force's the readers to empty their free pass stockpile once you have read all the free chapters. each character has their own flaws and strengths that only help humanise each induvidual character. while the author always seems to put in the extra mile designing characters for our and their own enjoyment. that leaves me with only one question,where do you make your character art.

8d
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Ryomensukuna

This story is exquisitely good Chapter 69 and 70 are my favourite chapters in this app best shit I have ever laid my eyes on

8d
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SadFritos

the story is interesting and all, but lowkey it's either this shit incomprehensible or I'm retarted cause sometimes i get lost. And the story don't even make sense sometimes.

8d
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DaoistLwCnMT

yo brother i really loved this novel finally some good concept rather than reincarnation and being extra,i really loved the charcacter tho and the comments are so relatable and funny right now my favourite is Gwen as I have read it until 18 chapters and I am not even feeling the long chapters are long i am so much immeresed in ith that it's doesn't feel long at all i really loved this novel will make another review and this will happen in reality if there existed superheroes the things you mentioned all things same happened in real life. Author i curse you to complete this novel [img=update][img=update][img=update]

8d
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akorallus

I read this daily it's definitely one of the best reads on this app in my opinion

15d
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PumpkinJack

With as little spoilers as possible please tell me before I read further that Gwen gets a fair shake and the you can have a harem conversation comes soon!? I’m in chapter 73 and need hope.

17d
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Tadano_Ningen

This was a fresh breath of air. .....

20d
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Norvaldo_Roberts_6345

great book but author chould you change the name of the novel to something better please 😢

22d
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SimplyOUTRAGeous

it good. What you want more? fine. well for starters it's the first novel to make me spend money on this app/site, second author has a clear goal and strategy when writing it, and even when he makes some mistakes like when MC and a certain FL would reveal each other's names, author just found a way to cover for it no big deal. it good read it!

23d
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Zelinguissa

The system said that the live streams are 100% safe and no bad guy can watch them and identify who and where MC is, but out of nowhere the system started live streaming his real face and he couldn't stop. You can argue that bc it's "100% safe" no bad guy saw his face, but what if some of his fans dig out his real identity based on his face and share on other social networks or even spred it mouth to mouth in the real world, one way or another it would end up reaching his enemies. Don't get me wrong, the novel is interesting, funny and innovative, but for me I don't like when the system forces actions that could be harmful to the MC for the purpose of the greater good.

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23d
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Leviamon

THIS IS THE PEAKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK😭🙏🏻

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23d
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Norvaldo_Roberts_6345

Hello author good novel but I think you chouhd get more people to read with a simpler name for the novel

25d
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Norvaldo_Roberts_6345

story is pretty good but can you change the name of the story to something catcher or something

26d
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SwordDemon876

This novel is something else, I hold it off for a long time but after reading it, I have to say I love it. For the chat to action scenes it is peak level [img=Your move]

1mth
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Zarion116

Sooo there all this ass but the MC ain’t getting any???

1mth
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Rafi_Anan

A perfect story, specially for us superhero fans. keep it going author.[img=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]

1mth
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Kamizura

really good overall, but as a non paying member I can't read nearly as much as I would want to... cannot watch videos to unlock chapters and most chapters are 2/3 free passes to unlock a single chapter which is the only downside to this novel

1mth
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MagicEmpress

Perfect ! [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

1mth
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Master_of_none

Excellent story, compelling characters. Looking forward to seeing how this develops. Keep up the great work.

1mth
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Pedro_Sousa

Already tired of self-inserted edgylords and villains mcs that fills this site? Then give this novel a chance, a novel with a good hearted guy who is just trying to be his best to be good person in a world filled with evil, betrayal and disappointments without giving up, finding his way up in the world, while getting together with some great girls without their perfect cliche. Thanks a lot for this novel author, 10/10.

1mth
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jordsky

This is my first review, so this honestly weighs heavily for me. I wouldn't have written a review for any novels on here, but I had to say something about this novel. First and foremost, only three novels on this app have ever resonated with me with me wanting more, this being one out of the three, I may not have much reading time on this app but I have read enough hours cumulative throughout my life regarding novels, LNs, WNs, Wuxias, Xuanhuans, Eronovels, you name it, so I have quite the bit of experience differentiating low quality time wasters to well thought out novels such as this one. The writing quality of this novel is exceptional, leagues above the authors' other works, with sentencing and phrase selection that doesn't bore you out, with the stream element comments very much hooking you in, the stream comments gave me quite a bit of a chuckle and largely entertained me, Story development is predictable yet somehow not simplistic in terms of plot. Stream and system component very well done, making use of cliche novel genres and making something though not exactly original, is definitely very enjoyable and unique in its own sense. Character design is also well done, though not perfect, it is definitely good enough to invoke some feelings out of you, especially in the early chapters. World background is also meticulously done same with that of the other elements and you can easily tell that the author takes the time to incorporate the plot seamlessly into the next arc. This is a very well done novel that deserves my first review ever, and a round of applause from me, if I had to rank this novel it would definitely be in my upper top 10. Updates are relatively decent, Novel is enjoyable enough to not nitpick, and lastly I hope the chapter quality continues to be kept at the same level as of writing this review, it would be a shame if the novel degrades in quality. Thank you Sleazy for this wonderful novel. Looking forward to more chapters and the completion of this novel and to your next.

1mth
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Enciridion

This has been great to read but what type of antihero will the MC be. Will he become a murderhobo and kill any criminal he sees or will he remain mostly as he has been. Can anyone let me know it would be greatly appreciated Thanks.

1mth
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Tommy_Wood

The story is there but I think the author is trying to get to major plot points too fast and is missing filler pieces to expalin certain actions or decisions or the absent background info that would make us like a character, some things are just blatantly looked over by characters that should be more aware obvious actions that most people would be wary of, and while I enjoy harems the heroines are just falling for a guy with no actual basis, I get the girlfriend and childhood friend but the pro hero speedster maybe should of started as just a fan that slowly became infatuated not in love after a short stream. On the plus side though the story has great bones and with some more fleshing out could be awesome, the system need more moments where Scott actually studies it and figures out how his ‘super power’ works (can’t tell me he’s just accepting a random power system in a society that is stated to have interdemsional warlords and aliens) I expect him to be more aware of the system that is suddenly predicting crimes and has the word ’harem’ in its name, possible mind control and what not are on the table in superpowered worlds. The heroines have some decent backstory building but Maya’s choices are just all over the place, and Emma is just unexplainable as I refuse to believe a flash level speedsters is going to be unable to clean sweep a whole city in seconds to look for someone as she stated herself to be ‘faster then light’ that level of speed is absurd and overpowered that I find it hard for her to not find Scott in seconds of seeing the stream, she herself stated she knew where his first stream was as it was in her ‘patrol’ area so she must have an idea of major and minor parts of the city or can easyily look up a street sign or building and shop names. The stream it’s self just need more detail, does it blur identify features like a location or features to keep Scott’s secret, does it give out minor missions, what all does it sell and when does Scott buy his stuff, the watch he used comes out of left field or was just too small a part to even notice yet it’s a major tool he uses when he saves Elena. What does the system do and what are its defined rules. Scott himself just seems kind of all over the place, bro is supposedly intelligent yet I have yet see him do anything remotely smart as he just seems to go with the flow and whim of the system and not ask any questions and as a vigilante is doing zero prep work or investigation work into criminals or ‘black mechanica’ an organization that supposedly has alien tech and nuclear capabilities and has been running around heroes for years and you expect me to believe his one foray into them is causing them a lick of trouble, it’s stated they are a global organization, one guy in one city stumbling on a cell isn’t going to do anything but annoy them, and get a small bounty of ’Nightwatch’, they’ve had to have dealt with things like him before just from how many superabled people there are now, plus his back story is just missing, why is his mom import or even where are his parents, is there some family situation we should be aware of. Vincent is just not fleshed out and too stereotyped, I believe him a bad guy but I think he’s also being too obvious with it, more subtle gaslighting and less outright bastard and his character improves dramatically as he pushes a wedge between maya and Scott instead of one asshole phone call. Mostly the story just needs filler to help flesh out the world and characters, little Paragraphs to explain actions or choices that build a character and help the reader understand character motivations. Maybe a side piece chapters for none important characters to help flesh out the sudden hero streams effect on the wider population or maybe a few small time heroes using it to fund their own hero activities, maybe a few people who think like Scott following in his footsteps, maybe Emma doing her own stream disguised as a different vigilante like a dark speedster named Shade. In summary I like the story just wished it was more fleshed out as I keep running into the problem of doubling back and questioning when did this happen, ‘offscreen’ moments that confuse readers and just a lack of scenes that transition the story, I hope the writer continues to write and I’m going to continue reading the story and hope it’s fleshed our more later in the story.

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1mth
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oxygen5011

Nothing amazing, just another heavily edgy teenage anime concept mixed with half real characters. Story development is subpar, fight scenes are told not shown. Characters are sometimes real sometimes not.

1mth
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Danger_Croc

i love the story........[img=update][img=update].........

1mth
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B_shadow

Damnnnnnnn bro this is peak not the hero tho that guys trash

1mth
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SleazyPen

If you have any question, and any question at all, feel free to ask here :) I put the five stars by mistake, but we all make mistakes haha~

2mth
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Prakhar_Baghel

Mc is very much a pushover, always getting pushed around by people, he never takes the initiative , always going with the flow and it's so annoying.

17h
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DT_Apex
LV 11 Badge

Refreshing and fun. Forget the Novels where the level of power is the basis of a coherent continuation for the development of the character's strength and for his comparisons with others (whether they are good or bad). This is a world of superheroes where everyone has their own strengths and weaknesses (although with recent developments I don't see how some say interested in finding Scott can actually be dangerous for his current level). The characters and comments of the streams are the real strength of Novel as well as the humor brought by the madness of the women surrounding the MC. I don't know if the World Building will space or not outside the Earth's orbit but it is secondary since the focus of the whole Novel are the interactions between the MC, the super heroines and the public as well as the truth of the Society and the world of superheroes in general. The only flaw that I found in this certainly different genre is that the MC does not have a real character development even after having better understood how wrong the world of super heroes is ...It also tends to have too weak a side as regards the approach and the relationship with the heroines: SPOILER - - - - - Maya is a bitch who got Scott insulted by her agent right in front of her ... Even if they reconcile since she is redeeming everything she has done, it does not change; Emma falls in love with him because "he is like old heroes" but she does nothing to become one and even when he is declared a terrorist she says nothing just because she would go against the agency that controls her (together with Maya and Lady Fortress) ...Hypocrisy, all three; now there is the story of Rope girl and her team (including the traitor Deathmark) etc in the last chapters and although it is a mission entrusted to them the truth is that they must kill a person who saved the city and is clearly a hero and not a terrorist yet agree to do it ... I'm definitely forgetting something but the point is that MC is someone who hates conforming to the world because he knows how disgusting it is so accepting certain actions both from people who say they love him and from people who go against him just because they have to adapt to the world make him look like a pushover. It is probably this aspect of him that makes interaction with other female characters easier but I believe that in some situations making him firmer in his beliefs and making others adapt to him and not the other way around could create different dynamics and would help develop a another side of him he definitely needs ...

5d
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Big_Hank

The concept of the series is good, but the characters and communication are terrible. Even though it is a harem tag, every female character that MC has a relationship with is good at first and then becomes a bad female character by the author. For example, while MC's girlfriend started off very nice at first, she suddenly turns to the NTR route and lies to MC. Even though she says she wants to be a real hero and doesn't want to be a slave to corporations, she goes and becomes a corporate slave. From where? Why would the author do such a st*pid thing? The second incident is when Elena and Mc are about to have s*x, the bad guy suddenly comes and ruins the show. Then Elena ceases to be a harem member after. The writer shows it and doesn't give it away and it's like this all the time. I think it will take at least 1000 episodes to see that it is a proper harem.

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7d
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DaoistLwCnMT

yo this novel is really worth it one chapter is 50 slides Long i have never seen any novel with this much chapter length but I like it I don't even feel it's long the story is very intriguing and The chapters are really worth to buy with coins most of novels has 20 25 slides some are even less than that but this NOVEL has really good chapter length and worth it love the story will write another review [img=update]

7d
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Scape_Goat391

it's trully are rare find, one of those books that has you captivated from the very start. and one that force's the readers to empty their free pass stockpile once you have read all the free chapters. each character has their own flaws and strengths that only help humanise each induvidual character. while the author always seems to put in the extra mile designing characters for our and their own enjoyment. that leaves me with only one question,where do you make your character art.

8d
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Ryomensukuna

This story is exquisitely good Chapter 69 and 70 are my favourite chapters in this app best shit I have ever laid my eyes on

8d
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SadFritos

the story is interesting and all, but lowkey it's either this shit incomprehensible or I'm retarted cause sometimes i get lost. And the story don't even make sense sometimes.

8d
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DaoistLwCnMT

yo brother i really loved this novel finally some good concept rather than reincarnation and being extra,i really loved the charcacter tho and the comments are so relatable and funny right now my favourite is Gwen as I have read it until 18 chapters and I am not even feeling the long chapters are long i am so much immeresed in ith that it's doesn't feel long at all i really loved this novel will make another review and this will happen in reality if there existed superheroes the things you mentioned all things same happened in real life. Author i curse you to complete this novel [img=update][img=update][img=update]

8d
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akorallus

I read this daily it's definitely one of the best reads on this app in my opinion

15d
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PumpkinJack

With as little spoilers as possible please tell me before I read further that Gwen gets a fair shake and the you can have a harem conversation comes soon!? I’m in chapter 73 and need hope.

17d
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Tadano_Ningen

This was a fresh breath of air. .....

20d
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Norvaldo_Roberts_6345

great book but author chould you change the name of the novel to something better please 😢

22d
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SimplyOUTRAGeous

it good. What you want more? fine. well for starters it's the first novel to make me spend money on this app/site, second author has a clear goal and strategy when writing it, and even when he makes some mistakes like when MC and a certain FL would reveal each other's names, author just found a way to cover for it no big deal. it good read it!

23d
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Zelinguissa

The system said that the live streams are 100% safe and no bad guy can watch them and identify who and where MC is, but out of nowhere the system started live streaming his real face and he couldn't stop. You can argue that bc it's "100% safe" no bad guy saw his face, but what if some of his fans dig out his real identity based on his face and share on other social networks or even spred it mouth to mouth in the real world, one way or another it would end up reaching his enemies. Don't get me wrong, the novel is interesting, funny and innovative, but for me I don't like when the system forces actions that could be harmful to the MC for the purpose of the greater good.

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23d
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Leviamon

THIS IS THE PEAKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK😭🙏🏻

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23d
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Norvaldo_Roberts_6345

Hello author good novel but I think you chouhd get more people to read with a simpler name for the novel

25d
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Norvaldo_Roberts_6345

story is pretty good but can you change the name of the story to something catcher or something

26d
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SwordDemon876

This novel is something else, I hold it off for a long time but after reading it, I have to say I love it. For the chat to action scenes it is peak level [img=Your move]

1mth
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Zarion116

Sooo there all this ass but the MC ain’t getting any???

1mth
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Rafi_Anan

A perfect story, specially for us superhero fans. keep it going author.[img=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]mg=gift]

1mth
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Kamizura

really good overall, but as a non paying member I can't read nearly as much as I would want to... cannot watch videos to unlock chapters and most chapters are 2/3 free passes to unlock a single chapter which is the only downside to this novel

1mth
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MagicEmpress

Perfect ! [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

1mth
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Master_of_none

Excellent story, compelling characters. Looking forward to seeing how this develops. Keep up the great work.

1mth
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Pedro_Sousa

Already tired of self-inserted edgylords and villains mcs that fills this site? Then give this novel a chance, a novel with a good hearted guy who is just trying to be his best to be good person in a world filled with evil, betrayal and disappointments without giving up, finding his way up in the world, while getting together with some great girls without their perfect cliche. Thanks a lot for this novel author, 10/10.

1mth
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jordsky

This is my first review, so this honestly weighs heavily for me. I wouldn't have written a review for any novels on here, but I had to say something about this novel. First and foremost, only three novels on this app have ever resonated with me with me wanting more, this being one out of the three, I may not have much reading time on this app but I have read enough hours cumulative throughout my life regarding novels, LNs, WNs, Wuxias, Xuanhuans, Eronovels, you name it, so I have quite the bit of experience differentiating low quality time wasters to well thought out novels such as this one. The writing quality of this novel is exceptional, leagues above the authors' other works, with sentencing and phrase selection that doesn't bore you out, with the stream element comments very much hooking you in, the stream comments gave me quite a bit of a chuckle and largely entertained me, Story development is predictable yet somehow not simplistic in terms of plot. Stream and system component very well done, making use of cliche novel genres and making something though not exactly original, is definitely very enjoyable and unique in its own sense. Character design is also well done, though not perfect, it is definitely good enough to invoke some feelings out of you, especially in the early chapters. World background is also meticulously done same with that of the other elements and you can easily tell that the author takes the time to incorporate the plot seamlessly into the next arc. This is a very well done novel that deserves my first review ever, and a round of applause from me, if I had to rank this novel it would definitely be in my upper top 10. Updates are relatively decent, Novel is enjoyable enough to not nitpick, and lastly I hope the chapter quality continues to be kept at the same level as of writing this review, it would be a shame if the novel degrades in quality. Thank you Sleazy for this wonderful novel. Looking forward to more chapters and the completion of this novel and to your next.

1mth
Ver 4 respuestas
Enciridion

This has been great to read but what type of antihero will the MC be. Will he become a murderhobo and kill any criminal he sees or will he remain mostly as he has been. Can anyone let me know it would be greatly appreciated Thanks.

1mth
Ver 1 respuestas
Tommy_Wood

The story is there but I think the author is trying to get to major plot points too fast and is missing filler pieces to expalin certain actions or decisions or the absent background info that would make us like a character, some things are just blatantly looked over by characters that should be more aware obvious actions that most people would be wary of, and while I enjoy harems the heroines are just falling for a guy with no actual basis, I get the girlfriend and childhood friend but the pro hero speedster maybe should of started as just a fan that slowly became infatuated not in love after a short stream. On the plus side though the story has great bones and with some more fleshing out could be awesome, the system need more moments where Scott actually studies it and figures out how his ‘super power’ works (can’t tell me he’s just accepting a random power system in a society that is stated to have interdemsional warlords and aliens) I expect him to be more aware of the system that is suddenly predicting crimes and has the word ’harem’ in its name, possible mind control and what not are on the table in superpowered worlds. The heroines have some decent backstory building but Maya’s choices are just all over the place, and Emma is just unexplainable as I refuse to believe a flash level speedsters is going to be unable to clean sweep a whole city in seconds to look for someone as she stated herself to be ‘faster then light’ that level of speed is absurd and overpowered that I find it hard for her to not find Scott in seconds of seeing the stream, she herself stated she knew where his first stream was as it was in her ‘patrol’ area so she must have an idea of major and minor parts of the city or can easyily look up a street sign or building and shop names. The stream it’s self just need more detail, does it blur identify features like a location or features to keep Scott’s secret, does it give out minor missions, what all does it sell and when does Scott buy his stuff, the watch he used comes out of left field or was just too small a part to even notice yet it’s a major tool he uses when he saves Elena. What does the system do and what are its defined rules. Scott himself just seems kind of all over the place, bro is supposedly intelligent yet I have yet see him do anything remotely smart as he just seems to go with the flow and whim of the system and not ask any questions and as a vigilante is doing zero prep work or investigation work into criminals or ‘black mechanica’ an organization that supposedly has alien tech and nuclear capabilities and has been running around heroes for years and you expect me to believe his one foray into them is causing them a lick of trouble, it’s stated they are a global organization, one guy in one city stumbling on a cell isn’t going to do anything but annoy them, and get a small bounty of ’Nightwatch’, they’ve had to have dealt with things like him before just from how many superabled people there are now, plus his back story is just missing, why is his mom import or even where are his parents, is there some family situation we should be aware of. Vincent is just not fleshed out and too stereotyped, I believe him a bad guy but I think he’s also being too obvious with it, more subtle gaslighting and less outright bastard and his character improves dramatically as he pushes a wedge between maya and Scott instead of one asshole phone call. Mostly the story just needs filler to help flesh out the world and characters, little Paragraphs to explain actions or choices that build a character and help the reader understand character motivations. Maybe a side piece chapters for none important characters to help flesh out the sudden hero streams effect on the wider population or maybe a few small time heroes using it to fund their own hero activities, maybe a few people who think like Scott following in his footsteps, maybe Emma doing her own stream disguised as a different vigilante like a dark speedster named Shade. In summary I like the story just wished it was more fleshed out as I keep running into the problem of doubling back and questioning when did this happen, ‘offscreen’ moments that confuse readers and just a lack of scenes that transition the story, I hope the writer continues to write and I’m going to continue reading the story and hope it’s fleshed our more later in the story.

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1mth
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oxygen5011

Nothing amazing, just another heavily edgy teenage anime concept mixed with half real characters. Story development is subpar, fight scenes are told not shown. Characters are sometimes real sometimes not.

1mth
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Danger_Croc

i love the story........[img=update][img=update].........

1mth
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B_shadow

Damnnnnnnn bro this is peak not the hero tho that guys trash

1mth
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