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Capítulo 4: Chapter 4: The Golden String.

Chapter 4: The Golden String.

After seeing Huo Yuhao's reaction, the golden string showed joy as it danced in the air. It looked strange, but kind of cute. It was like an excited puppy when its owner praised it.

Huo Yuhao can't be blamed for his surprise at all because, compared to a system that can only issue quests for rewards, this golden string is something else entirely.

The golden string is a crystallization of wishes, dreams, desires, and wisdom. Its existence is a miracle and what it does is a miracle. So much so that Huo Yuhao is a bit suspicious about its motives. But seeing the golden string excitedly wiggle around in the air, he threw that thought out the window.

'How can a cute little guy like that have ulterior motives?' Huo Yuhao thought to himself. After all, cuteness is justice. But what does the golden string do?

The golden string can influence and interfere with the world to allow the desired outcome that the user wants at the expense of energy. The energy source is not limited to a certain kind; it can be soul power, spirit power, mana, Qi, blood, Ki, etc.

The golden string is integrated into Huo Yuhao's soul; it cannot be removed, and in the case of Huo Yuhao's death, it simply ceases to exist. The desires and wishes it fulfills are also a part of Yuhao; that is to prevent power stripping from its owner.

Basically, the golden string is a wish-granting machine; you feed it enough energy, and it can lead to a desired outcome. Like granting abilities, skills, or more. So, things like world travel are indeed possible, but they require a lot of energy.

'Hmm, that is so overpowered if used correctly,' Huo Yuhao thought as he watched the dancing golden string in the air.

"Phew. Now at least I have a chance to change our (Huo Yuhao's and Huo Yun'er's) fate and break free from the shackles of that control freak god."

Huo Yuhao started thinking about his first wish. It has to be something that can assist him in living and gaining power in this new world, and it also has to help him adapt to changes in his surroundings.

And who can be better in assisting Yuhao than a sage, more specifically a great sage. Am I right!

"Ah, does it have a name?" Huo Yuhao wondered as he watched the golden string stop in mid-dance and rush towards him. It shook on one end with a golden luster as if to answer Yuhao's question.

"Hmm, then how about Goldy?" The golden string simply slapped Huo Yuhao on the face for his ridiculous naming sense, making him fall out of the bed.

"Ouch. So, you don't like that name, huh?" Huo Yuhao stated as he watched the golden string 'look' at him with a look that said 'What do you think?'

[A few minutes later.]

"Okay, stop slapping me, how about Estelle? It means star, and it is quite a cute name for you. Don't you think?" Huo Yuhao closed his eyes, prepared to receive the nth slap from the golden string. However, the slap never came.

Huo Yuhao glanced at the golden string and saw it 'thinking' about the name. 'Okay, this might be the one. I just have to convince it.'

"It can also be shortened to Ellie or Est. How about it?" Huo Yuhao wanted to escape the slap torture after all he wasn't a masochist that loves pain.

The golden string 'thought' for a while and simply 'nodded' with one end of its body. It shone with a golden luster as if agreeing with the name Huo Yuhao chose.

"Great!" Yuhao exclaimed as he watched the golden string now named Estelle dance in the air, excited for receiving a beautiful name from its owner.

"Now, moving on. Can I ask anything right now? Do you have enough energy?" Huo Yuhao asked Ellie. He was quite worried if it still needed to charge itself for energy before granting wishes.

Ellie simply 'nodded' and gave a 'look' that said, "You can count on me."

"Very well, Ellie. I need an assistant skill to help me in understanding and adapting in this world, and it also has to help me escape from this prison-like place with my mom." Huo Yuhao responded to the enthusiastic Ellie.

"Hmm, what can it be? Ah, the favorite skill of the most overpowered slime in the anime world, [Great Sage]. Can I have it? Do you have enough energy for it?" Huo Yuhao asked with a nervous tone.

Ellie just glowed with a golden luster and sank into Huo Yuhao's chest. Huo Yuhao was confused about Ellie's behavior, and just when he was about to ask what was going on, his chest started feeling warm like he had been sunbathing in the gentlest sun ever. It was so comfortable that he almost fell asleep.

A few moments went by, and a piece of information appeared in his mind, and Ellie reappeared from his chest with no change in appearance except for a new golden ring that appeared on its body.

"Hmm, I feel different, like something has been added to my being. It feels weird, not in a bad way," Huo Yuhao commented as he felt the changes in himself.

"Looks like [Great Sage] did not affect your reserves that much. If I had known that, I would have asked for [Raphael]. But that is fine. The difference between both of them is massive in terms of computation ability, but basic core functions are still the same, except for [Alteration] and [Degenerate]."

"And I don't think my poor little soul can handle [Raphael] being stuffed into it. I would most likely die." Huo Yuhao shuddered when he thought about exploding when he received his first skill. Ellie glowed and a new piece of information appeared in his mind.

Ellie will not grant wishes or desires that can endanger his life. After all, if Huo Yuhao dies, it dies as well. So, even if Huo Yuhao were to stupidly ask for an ability or a skill that can end his life, Ellie will stop him and try to find an alternative that can have the same effect with little consequences. Cute Ellie is cute.

"Okay, now the assistant skill is here. We need a skill or an ability that can help us in combat." Huo Yuhao browsed his memories trying to find some skills or abilities that could help him escape from here safely and survive in this world.

"Okay, please give me [Thread Manipulation] skill and [Illusion Manipulation] skill." After careful consideration, Huo Yuhao chose these two skills for attack and defense for the time being.

Ellie glowed with a vibrant golden luster and entered his chest. A familiar warmth enveloped him, and then Ellie appeared again with two more golden rings on its body.

"Hmm, I feel full somehow. Not the feeling from eating food, it is different. It will take some time to get used to." Huo Yuhao commented as he noticed the changes in his soul.

"Ah, Ellie, can you grant classes? Like a combat class or a support class like in RPGs?" Huo Yuhao asked the cute golden string that was floating in the air.

Ellie was silent for a while and glowed once, and a new piece of information appeared in his mind. Simply put, it can grant him a class with the current reserves, and some energy will still be available, but the process will be painful.

Granting skills is easy as it can add the skill to his soul or transfer knowledge into his mind. Granting a class to a normal person is different. It is like ascension. He, a normal person, will have an affinity for traits and attunements.

For example, a [Warrior] class will have an affinity for weapons and attachments, combat, slaughter, and more. A [Saint] class will have an affinity for holy power and attunements for healing and evil-breaking.

So, by choosing a class right now, Huo Yuhao will ascend to a class holder, but he has an advantage. Ellie can grant him multiple classes, not at the same time, otherwise, he will die, but after his soul gets used to its ascension.

"Hmm, I see," Yuhao commented while also thinking about the classes that he could choose from. He browsed his memory for an OP class that would be an all-rounder in the beginning of his journey.

"Okay Ellie, I want a [Nanomancer] class (read it again, it is not necromancer, it is nanomancer)" Huo Yuhao made his choice. He figured that this class is OP and an all-rounder. So, he would be useful in combat, production, and support. The class also has the potential for evolving.

Ellie froze for a second and stared at Huo Yuhao for a moment as if asking, 'Are you sure? It will hurt like hell you know.'

"Yes, I am sure. I need to get used to it now before my escape journey with mom. And [Nanomancer] class has production skills that can help me create stuff to protect mom when we are escaping." Huo Yuhao replied to Ellie while finding a cloth to bite into when the pain hit him. After all, a screaming child would cause a commotion. Oh wait, he is living in an isolated place, so even if he dies here no one is going to bat an eye.

"…"

That is kinda sad. No scratch that, that is miserable, not going to lie. Huo Yuhao just sighed.

"How long will it take, Ellie? I don't want mom to come home to find me rolling on the ground and looking like I am dying." Huo Yuhao could already imagine her fainting on the spot if she saw him in that state.

Ellie glowed, comforting Huo Yuhao that it won't take too long. Knowing that, Huo Yuhao made his way to the bed and sat cross-legged on the bed and held the cloth in his mouth.

'Okay Ellie, I am ready.' He talked in his mind, as he was sure Ellie 'heard' him. After all, they are connected.

Ellie glowed once, twice, thrice, and entered his chest. The warmth that he was expecting did not make an appearance this time. What announced its presence this time was agonizing pain.

No matter how mentally prepared he was, that excruciating pain was too much for him to handle. He used [Great Sage] to give himself some breathing room, but it was still painful.

His body was breaking apart and his soul was in a miserable situation. His spiritual sea kept shaking and the two beads kept trying to prevent its collapse. After all, a collapse in the spiritual sea means a person has pretty much a destroyed soul. And if Yuhao's spiritual sea collapsed, they wouldn't have anywhere else to go and would dissipate into nothingness.

Huo Yuhao resisted with all his might. He had faith in Ellie. She did not stop him, that means that he could survive this operation and ascend to a class holder and become more powerful.

'I have to hold on. For myself. For my mom. For freedom.' Huo thought as the world became increasingly dim for his eyes.

Just when he was about to lose it, the tattoo on his nape finally showed itself and powerful energy emitting coldness and holiness infused itself in Huo Yuhao's blood.

His body shook and blood started to seep out from his pores. His bone structure was changing and his hair grew longer and its color changed from blue to platinum blond.

The process lasted for several hours and the pain gradually became tolerable for Huo Yuhao and he persisted through the entire process. Until it finally came to an end and he passed out.

His body finally stopped spasming and his spiritual sea stabilized, much to the relief of the two beads. The tattoo on his nape sank into his body.

The various wounds on his body disappeared and his malnourished body was no more. His body appeared healthy with a faint blush on his skin and face a lot cuter. So cute in fact that its charm is fatal for older women (wink wink).

His spiritual sea expanded more, and his spiritual power increased. The two beads finally 'sighed' and returned to their previous position.

Overall, the class ascension seemed fruitful.

A few hours later.

"Argh…" Huo Yuhao stirred awake. He opened his eyes and raised his hand to block the light coming from the window.

He stared at his hand and thought about the painful process that he just went through.

"Man, that was something. I don't know when I will experience something like that ever again." He spoke to himself as he gazed at the ceiling and just sighed in the end.

"Ellie, are you there?" Hearing his call, Ellie came out emerging from his chest. No more additional golden rings appeared on its body. But the golden color was noticeably dimmer. It looked like Ellie used a lot of energy during the ascension.

"Phew, man, I feel like an idiot. I should have chosen the [Pain Resistance] skill before the class ascension." Huo Yuhao wished to slap himself before the process began.

"Looks like the process took a toll on you, Ellie."

Hearing this, Ellie just shook its body and 'stared' at Huo Yuhao with a look that said 'And who is responsible for that, huh?'

"Okay, fine. Just try to recuperate and charge yourself, okay?" Huo Yuhao instructed Ellie. His tone carried a bit of self-blame.

Ellie glowed a little and entered his chest again. Huo Yuhao just sighed.

He looked around and saw the bloody scene in front of him. He got out of bed, removed the sheet, and simply created a new one similar to it but a lot softer using [Thread Manipulation]. He took the bloodied sheets and threw them in a basket.

While he was doing all that, he noticed his reflection in the small mirror by the sink and he paused for a second.

"Is this the mandatory beautification that happens after each painful process in the cultivation world? Damn, look at that jade skin, hahaha." He cracked a small joke while he was admiring his transformation.

But he soon stopped.

He assessed his current outfit, his clothes soaked in blood. He sighed and went out of the cottage with the bucket filled with the bloodied sheets.

He cast a simple illusion using [Illusion Manipulation] skill and made his way towards the river.

His mom was going to finish her shift soon, so he had to be quick. He zoomed towards the river and noticed that the speed and strength of his current body were marginally different from a few hours ago.

Arriving at the river, he created a new set of clothes using [Thread Manipulation] and took off his bloodied clothes. All while maintaining the illusion. He noticed that it was much easier to manipulate the soul energy in the air while using his skills.

He broke down the bloodied clothes and the bloodied sheets with [Thread Manipulation] and simply washed all the blood from them in the river, then he used them to catch fish in the river.

He washed himself in the river and then rinsed the bucket from the blood on it. He wore his new set of clothes that looked exactly like the old pair but much softer. He manipulated the threads trapping the fish to trap them in the bucket.

"Phew, I feel refreshed. Nothing feels better than a cold shower. Well, it is not exactly a shower, but you get the idea." Huo Yuhao mused to himself as he walked back towards the cottage. His mom would be back home pretty soon.

(Chapter 4 finished.)

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An:

Phew, 2.6k words. I need to speed up the chapters. We need to pass 15k to enter the rankings.

I asked you guys if you want Huo Yuhao to have twin martial souls, but I received no reply till now. I will wait for this and the next chapter before writing the spirit awakening ceremony.

Do you want Huo Yuhao to have twin martial souls?

 Yes

 No

Do you want [Great Sage] to talk in the fanfic?

Yes

No

As far as I know, Rimuru's Great Sage was unique from the beginning. It almost had consciousness from the beginning. I haven't seen any other unique skill that does that talks to its user, so I credited it to Rimuru's special existence.

And for the class, it might be out of the blue, but I have an idea for it.

Don't comment [Shadow Monarch] class. It was overdone in the web novel community and no one can bring its true potential, me included.

Maybe he will have [Shadow Manipulation] skill in the future, just not now. He is very strong currently.

I think most of you already know what type of blood has been injected into his body by the Herrscher of Finality stigma, right?

Anyways, as always, share comments, memes, and waifu pics in the comment section.

See you in the next upload.

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Capítulo 5: Chapter 5: Escape Plan.

Chapter 5: Escape Plan.

As Huo Yuhao was making his way towards the cottage, he used [Great Sage]'s subskill [Analytical Appraisal] to get an idea about the surrounding plants and animals. He was doing that to see if he could find anything of value in this forest. Unfortunately, his luck was not that great. Except for some wild herbs that could be used as spices and some cowardly 10-year-old soul beasts.

Huo Yuhao stared at the two ten-year-old soft bone rabbits, going at it like there was no tomorrow. As he walked past them, a thread attacked the two soul beasts, ending their short lives.

"Fucking rabbits, man! All they do is eat and mate. All I can say is Tang San has really, how to say this, unique taste." Yuhao mused to himself as he continued manipulating threads to collect all the herbs and spices that he could identify.

The trip was a short one, and as Huo Yuhao arrived at the cottage, he manipulated the threads coming out from his back to place his loot and organize the place while he was at it.

'Looks like mom hasn't arrived yet. Well then, let's test the famous Huo Yuhao's grilled fish that I have read about in the novel.' Huo Yuhao reviewed his memory and how he used to prepare and cook fish for his mother when she was ill due to overwork.

He released some threads to collect some firewood from a distance and started making a fire.

"Hmm, manipulating the threads became much easier. I will continue using it to better my control. If I learned anything from Madara, other than being an absolute badass, I should better my control over my powers and skills." Huo Yuhao spoke to himself as he remembered some of Madara's scenes and promised himself that in the future he would strive to be as cool as him.

Well, jokes aside, Huo Yuhao started manipulating the threads to clean the fish that he caught from the river, skewered them using some wooden sticks, and placed them over the fire that he created.

'Hmm, I probably should put an illusion on myself. I can't really explain how my appearance changed in one day to mother now, can I? I will wait till the spirit awakening ceremony and remove the illusion. I remember some martial souls change the user's appearance after awakening.' Huo Yuhao thought as he started using [Illusion Manipulation] to make himself look like he used to look in the morning before his mom had gone to work.

'Perfect.' He looked at himself in the mirror and he looked exactly how he looked in the morning, with short blue hair and childish innocence on his face.

He focused his attention back on the fish on the fire and started cutting the herbs using the threads and applying the herb spice mixture to the fish.

A pleasant aroma emerged from the grilled fish. So pleasant, in fact, that Yuhao started salivating after smelling it.

"Gulp! Are we sure that Oscar is the food god, not Yuhao? This fish looks almost glowing." Yuhao was shocked seeing the almost glowing fish.

Huo Yuhao was so focused on the grilled fish that he failed to notice the tattoo on his nape appear again. And a certain Herrscher of Finality was shocked beyond belief.

"How is that possible? A person that has Kaslana blood in him and he can cook? How is he doing that?" The Herrscher mumbled to herself as she stared at the scene in disbelief.

Back to Huo Yuhao.

He held one skewer and took a bite, only to freeze after eating it.

"Dear God, I almost imagined myself swimming in the sea with various sea creatures swimming beside me and I am leading them to conquer the land. What the hell? That is near Food Wars level of cooking." Yuhao muttered to himself as he stared at the finished skewer with complex emotions.

He started preparing more skewers and after having his fill, he started preparing another batch for his mother. After cooking all the fish that he brought, he set a kettle on the fire to boil some water. His mother should be arriving soon and she would definitely appreciate washing with warm water after a tough day at work. How thoughtful of you, Yuhao.

Sure enough, a couple of minutes went by and a figure made its way towards the cottage. It was none other than Huo Yun'er. She apparently worked from sunrise to sunset, which is quite a brutal work schedule for someone of her weak physique.

"Hao'er, I am back. I brought some fruits with me. Come and have some." Huo Yun'er announced her presence as she entered the cottage and put down the basket on the nearby table.

"Welcome back, mom." He greeted her and his tone carried a hint of excitement.

Hearing his enthusiasm, she visibly relaxed. She sat down and started peeling an apple and gave it to him.

"Here you go, Yuhao." She handed him the peeled apple and started peeling another.

Huo Yuhao simply smiled and started eating the apple, and he brought a plate filled with grilled fish that he cooked a while ago.

"Thanks, mom. Here, you haven't had dinner yet, have you? I caught these fish this afternoon." Yuhao handed the plate to her under the stunned gaze of his mother.

"Huo Yuhao, what did I say about not leaving the house alone?" She asked Yuhao after breaking out of her shock. Her tone was still gentle but had some nervousness in it.

"But mom, I wanted to make you happy. Are you mad at me?" Huo Yuhao replied, his voice breaking and his eyes sparkling as if he would cry at any moment. (He is acting guys, don't comment that the MC is childish all of that will change after they escape.)

Seeing his current appearance, Yun'er just sighed and spoke in a much softer tone this time, "Okay Hao'er, I am sorry. Mom is just worried about you, and I am very happy with your grilled fish. It looks yummy."

Yuhao simply nodded and his body visibly relaxed.

When Huo Yun'er took a bite of the fish, she had her Food Wars moment before devouring all the fish on the plate. She kept praising her son's cooking abilities that had improved significantly since the last time. She started to have doubts about her cooking and thought that it might taste unpleasant to Yuhao and vowed that she would increase her cooking skills in the future. Huo Yun'er then went to wash up with the warm water.

'Man, acting like a child is really tiring. I didn't know I had it in me. Maybe I should have abandoned the medical field and joined an acting school, because goddamn that was some Oscar-level acting right there.'

'I need to reveal that we need to leave this place. Mom is gentle and kind and hardworking, but she is also stubborn. She believes that the current oppression is due to the duchess and that the duke would save us one day when he gets back to the mansion from the battlefield.'

'But here is the thing, mother. The duke is not coming back for the next 5-6 years. The duchess will become increasingly cruel in her mistreatment and cut the resources to almost nothing. You will die after being beaten and malnourished in the next 5 years, and I can't let that happen.' Huo Yuhao thought about how to change his mother's mind about escaping from the mansion.

A couple of minutes passed by and Huo Yun'er came back wearing her sleepwear, ready for a peaceful night's sleep. After locking the door and closing the window to prevent the cold night air from freezing them overnight, she made her way to bed.

"Come here, Hao'er," she urged her son to get next to her and lie down in bed.

Yuhao obliged to her call and lay next to her in bed. He stared at her beautiful face and showed a complex expression on his immature, cute face.

Seeing his current appearance, Huo Yun'er giggled a little and spoke in a patient tone. "Hao'er, do you have something to tell me?"

Huo Yuhao put a hesitant expression (still acting) on his face and finally sighed. "Mom, can we leave the mansion?"

Huo Yun'er was shocked, hearing these words from him.

Before she could speak, Yuhao hurriedly continued, "I do not want to get beaten for no reason again, mom. I heard from one of the guards that was passing by that there are large cities outside, with gentle weather, tall buildings, and lively atmosphere. The people would smile from time to time, and at night they go out with friends and family to check the night market and play in the plaza."

"We do not have any of that here, mom. I want to see you laugh more and spend time with you more. I do not see you most of the day, and when you get back from work you are always tired. Can we leave our home and go to one of the cities?"

Seeing the look of hesitation on her face, he sighed inwardly. 'Well, love does that to a person. She is holding on to the hope that her childhood friend and lover would come back and save them like a prince on a white horse.'

He continued in a more serious tone this time, "And the spirit awakening ceremony is nearby. If I fail to awaken the white tiger martial spirit, the duchess will kill us, mom. I don't want to see you die."

He choked on tears as he spoke to her.

Huo Yun'er's body shook, and seeing her son bawling his eyes out, she could only hug him and try to comfort him while also holding back the tears that were threatening to fall from her beautiful eyes.

A couple more minutes passed and the sobbing noises started to lessen until the cottage was completely silent. Huo Yun'er observed her son, who cried himself to sleep with a sad look on her face filled with self-blame and sorrow.

She started to think if they moved out would they have lived a better life. Would Yuhao make friends and play and run with them in the city?

She started thinking about her son's childhood, only for it to appear imprisoned within these rotting cottage walls, as he waited for her to come from work. He had nothing to do other than stare at the window and gaze at the outside world. He is simply a caged bird with crippled wings wishing to be free.

And to make matters worse, the duchess and her son would target him from time to time just because they thought his existence to be an eyesore in their eyes.

Her son's childhood was miserable and will continue to be miserable as long as he stays here. She had hoped that the duke would return one day and would free them from this cage and get them better treatment, but for how long can they endure? What if they were killed by the duchess when the duke was not home?

The more she thought about it, the more her guilt and self-blame intensified, and tears started rolling down like a river from her beautiful blue eyes.

Time passed and she finally cried herself to sleep.

After making sure that his mom was asleep, Huo Yuhao opened his eyes and broke away from her embrace.

'Well, the seed of doubt is planted and all I need is a trigger and what better trigger than watching your son get beaten up to near death. I can handle it easily with illusions, but am I really doing the right thing? I am manipulating her to abandon her love and escape with me.' Yuhao thought for a while.

'I hope you can forgive me, mother. I simply do not wish to see you endure any more suffering or humiliation in this place, and I most definitely don't want you to die. After all, the hardest decisions require the strongest wills.' Huo Yuhao's eyes were filled with unwavering determination.

"Plan [Mansion escape] is on." Yuhao muttered to himself as he gazed at the beautiful full moon outside the window. The gentle silver light shone upon his immature face that was filled with determination to free himself from his miserable fate.

(Chapter 5 finished.)

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An:

Here is a new chapter straight from the oven, almost 2.1k words without the author's note.

A lot of you might not support that Huo Yuhao is emotionally manipulating his mother's feelings to escape the mansion, but that is a decision he is willing to make to give his mother a better life and avoid her death.

Also, I decided that Huo Yuhao must have a second martial spirit.

Because if there is no second martial spirit and he only has his spiritual eyes martial soul, then his cultivation will take a hit.

Skydream Ice Worm escaped from the fierce beasts after 5 years since Yuhao awakened his spirit eyes.

So, if I leave his cultivation at level 10 for 5 years, I am sure most of you will be dissatisfied, me included.

Skydream Ice Worm has to be his first soul ring. After all, it is a million-year-old soul ring. And it gave him 4 skills in one ring.

I plan to make Skydream his first soul spirit, so that he can give Yuhao more million-year-old spirit rings with 4 skill spots. That would be pretty OP.

Without further ado, please give me a suggestion for his second martial spirit.

I was thinking of the following:

- Gate of Babylon

- Chains of Heaven

- A dragon martial soul

- Demon slime (Basically Rimuru, but not his skills and stuff, just the slime template, so that Yuhao can have the intrinsic skills of demon slimes, which are quite OP as well.)

- Other suggestions

Please vote as I would like to start to write about the spirit awakening ceremony after escaping from the mansion.

Also, shoutout to dragonmage124 for sharing his ideas with me in the previous chapter. I enjoyed talking about the lore of Douluo Dalu with you.

Anyways, do not forget to comment memes, your thoughts, and most importantly waifu pics.

I left some anime and movie references in this chapter, so I want to see some paragraph comments on them, if you may.

That is all for today.

Bye.


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