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While it is an interesting idea, the English is like a preschooler's writing and you can't tell who's talking because the author doesn't have any "povs". They also keep using "man" to describe a child when they should use "boy" because the word "Man" refers to a grown male who is mature. love the concept though.
The Wasted Potential of Reincarnation Tropes in Fiction In the realm of storytelling, the reincarnation or “second chance” trope offers a wealth of narrative potential. It allows for exploration of themes like redemption, growth, and the application of hard-earned wisdom. However, when poorly executed, this trope can feel hollow, especially when the protagonist fails to reflect the maturity and intelligence one would expect from someone who has lived a prior life. A common pitfall in such stories is the portrayal of characters whose actions contradict the premise, leaving readers frustrated and disillusioned. A protagonist who has lived a previous life should demonstrate traits that distinguish them from first-life characters. Wisdom, emotional control, and an ability to think strategically are hallmarks of someone who has experienced the highs and lows of a full existence. Unfortunately, many stories fail to deliver on this expectation, often depicting reincarnated characters who act impulsively or immaturely. For example, a protagonist who lashes out uncontrollably after betrayal—going as far as to harm an innocent child—strains the credibility of their supposed backstory. Such behavior contradicts the maturity that should come with having lived, learned, and presumably grown from past experiences. This inconsistency weakens the narrative. The core appeal of a reincarnation story lies in watching the character leverage their past-life knowledge to navigate present challenges. If they instead act no differently than someone experiencing life for the first time, the reincarnation element becomes irrelevant. This wasted potential leaves readers questioning why the author chose the second-life premise at all. Without the protagonist demonstrating growth or self-awareness, the story risks becoming indistinguishable from a standard coming-of-age tale. Furthermore, poor emotional regulation in a reincarnated character undermines the thematic depth that this trope can offer. A betrayal might evoke anger or grief, but a character with the wisdom of a second life would approach such situations with nuance—perhaps seeking revenge in a calculated manner or choosing forgiveness to break a cycle of pain. When their reactions mirror those of an inexperienced individual, it diminishes the gravity of their supposed journey and robs the audience of meaningful character development. For authors, crafting a compelling reincarnation story requires a careful balance between human flaws and the wisdom gained from a second life. It is not necessary for the protagonist to be infallible, but their actions should reflect growth and self-reflection. Even in moments of weakness, their decision-making should tie back to lessons learned in their previous life. For instance, a character driven by rage might pause, recalling the consequences of acting impulsively in their first life, and opt for a more measured response. Such moments not only deepen the character but also reinforce the premise of reincarnation as a meaningful narrative device. Ultimately, the reincarnation trope is a tool that, when used effectively, can elevate a story by adding layers of complexity and emotional resonance. However, its misuse can lead to shallow, inconsistent characters who fail to engage the audience. By ensuring that protagonists act in ways consistent with their lived experiences, authors can create stories that fulfill the promise of second chances, offering readers both entertainment and insight into the human capacity for growth.
Complete and utter shite. Writing is disjointed and does not flow at all. Utterly confused by how a 4 yr old as described as "a man", gender descriptions are misused. Read the first 50 chapters and feel as if that part of my time was not just wasted, but stolen. If it wasn't free, I wouldn't have even read that many. Not worth wasting your time reading this trash.
Enfadonho enfadonho..... Sem sentido algum... Veja bem um cara que era adulto ...morreu e reencarnou ... E agora no novo mundo ele chora com um bebe, e se comporta como uma criança que faz birra...sério...tava tentando continuar mas não deu.... Birra de um homem de sei lá que idade em um corpo de criança pq o irmão vai embora. Afff
enough for me to say this story will became best fantasy although at first until 63 chapter just only have 600 words but its ok
there is basically a 50 chapter prologue that feels barely coherent which makes it very hard to get into unfortunately...
Well, lets start with bad things and then good things. 1- Writing quality is good if we consider the grammer and such but its written in a way that is very hard to understand what is happening. Like in starting chapters you are referring the opponent az 'That man ' or 'the man' but you can give more info on why is he bulling them. what are girls thinking. not just what their eyes are doing. one more thing is like sometimes the story just braks in between and then whusshh its back on track but missing few important parts. 2- character design can be improved. give more info abt the characters. in the early chaps the characters are like dolls talking with each other. next is dialogue. if you're putting it a POV please put a mark so we understand who are we looking the story from. 3- the good part is the story has good premise and power levels untill i read. so keep up for unique ideas. 4- i dont know abt updating stabilty so full 5 star for that. 5- world background is decently intriduced as story peogresses but as mentioned above the story just breaks in between and that just takes focus away from the story. A pointer- the story feels monotonous and its boring that way. try to have interactions of character and not just this happened and after that that happened. anyway, this is just my opinion. keep up the good work 👍.
While it is an interesting idea, the English is like a preschooler's writing and you can't tell who's talking because the author doesn't have any "povs". They also keep using "man" to describe a child when they should use "boy" because the word "Man" refers to a grown male who is mature. love the concept though.
The Wasted Potential of Reincarnation Tropes in Fiction In the realm of storytelling, the reincarnation or “second chance” trope offers a wealth of narrative potential. It allows for exploration of themes like redemption, growth, and the application of hard-earned wisdom. However, when poorly executed, this trope can feel hollow, especially when the protagonist fails to reflect the maturity and intelligence one would expect from someone who has lived a prior life. A common pitfall in such stories is the portrayal of characters whose actions contradict the premise, leaving readers frustrated and disillusioned. A protagonist who has lived a previous life should demonstrate traits that distinguish them from first-life characters. Wisdom, emotional control, and an ability to think strategically are hallmarks of someone who has experienced the highs and lows of a full existence. Unfortunately, many stories fail to deliver on this expectation, often depicting reincarnated characters who act impulsively or immaturely. For example, a protagonist who lashes out uncontrollably after betrayal—going as far as to harm an innocent child—strains the credibility of their supposed backstory. Such behavior contradicts the maturity that should come with having lived, learned, and presumably grown from past experiences. This inconsistency weakens the narrative. The core appeal of a reincarnation story lies in watching the character leverage their past-life knowledge to navigate present challenges. If they instead act no differently than someone experiencing life for the first time, the reincarnation element becomes irrelevant. This wasted potential leaves readers questioning why the author chose the second-life premise at all. Without the protagonist demonstrating growth or self-awareness, the story risks becoming indistinguishable from a standard coming-of-age tale. Furthermore, poor emotional regulation in a reincarnated character undermines the thematic depth that this trope can offer. A betrayal might evoke anger or grief, but a character with the wisdom of a second life would approach such situations with nuance—perhaps seeking revenge in a calculated manner or choosing forgiveness to break a cycle of pain. When their reactions mirror those of an inexperienced individual, it diminishes the gravity of their supposed journey and robs the audience of meaningful character development. For authors, crafting a compelling reincarnation story requires a careful balance between human flaws and the wisdom gained from a second life. It is not necessary for the protagonist to be infallible, but their actions should reflect growth and self-reflection. Even in moments of weakness, their decision-making should tie back to lessons learned in their previous life. For instance, a character driven by rage might pause, recalling the consequences of acting impulsively in their first life, and opt for a more measured response. Such moments not only deepen the character but also reinforce the premise of reincarnation as a meaningful narrative device. Ultimately, the reincarnation trope is a tool that, when used effectively, can elevate a story by adding layers of complexity and emotional resonance. However, its misuse can lead to shallow, inconsistent characters who fail to engage the audience. By ensuring that protagonists act in ways consistent with their lived experiences, authors can create stories that fulfill the promise of second chances, offering readers both entertainment and insight into the human capacity for growth.
Complete and utter shite. Writing is disjointed and does not flow at all. Utterly confused by how a 4 yr old as described as "a man", gender descriptions are misused. Read the first 50 chapters and feel as if that part of my time was not just wasted, but stolen. If it wasn't free, I wouldn't have even read that many. Not worth wasting your time reading this trash.
Enfadonho enfadonho..... Sem sentido algum... Veja bem um cara que era adulto ...morreu e reencarnou ... E agora no novo mundo ele chora com um bebe, e se comporta como uma criança que faz birra...sério...tava tentando continuar mas não deu.... Birra de um homem de sei lá que idade em um corpo de criança pq o irmão vai embora. Afff
enough for me to say this story will became best fantasy although at first until 63 chapter just only have 600 words but its ok
there is basically a 50 chapter prologue that feels barely coherent which makes it very hard to get into unfortunately...
Well, lets start with bad things and then good things. 1- Writing quality is good if we consider the grammer and such but its written in a way that is very hard to understand what is happening. Like in starting chapters you are referring the opponent az 'That man ' or 'the man' but you can give more info on why is he bulling them. what are girls thinking. not just what their eyes are doing. one more thing is like sometimes the story just braks in between and then whusshh its back on track but missing few important parts. 2- character design can be improved. give more info abt the characters. in the early chaps the characters are like dolls talking with each other. next is dialogue. if you're putting it a POV please put a mark so we understand who are we looking the story from. 3- the good part is the story has good premise and power levels untill i read. so keep up for unique ideas. 4- i dont know abt updating stabilty so full 5 star for that. 5- world background is decently intriduced as story peogresses but as mentioned above the story just breaks in between and that just takes focus away from the story. A pointer- the story feels monotonous and its boring that way. try to have interactions of character and not just this happened and after that that happened. anyway, this is just my opinion. keep up the good work 👍.
Doesn’t even qualify as junk food. It’s abysmal.