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Very Good fanfiction, but I really hope he won't be in a relationship with any of his sisters, as for me they should stay in a family relationship
Está reseña e spara decirles alos lectores que la historia mejora una ves llegan a orario siempre que aguanten asta llegar a Orario las cosas Irán a mejor y que el autor no matara más personajes eso es todo pasen la bien
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The story seems to rely on gratuitous shocks and unnecessary violence. This is not only problematic but also detracts from what could have been a more engaging narrative. Thirty chapters were spent on character development, but in the end, it all seemed pointless. There are countless ways to build characters effectively and develop plots that truly matter. Unfortunately, all the time and effort put into reading this content were not rewarded, as many characters introduced did not have any significant importance to the story. It's frustrating to have spent hours trying to memorize character names that, in the end, contributed nothing to the outcome. I hope that future narratives learn from these mistakes and focus on providing readers with a more rewarding and meaningful experience.
Everything's perfect, except for the chapter production. Since the story is very slow paced, i expected the chapter to be at least 2 chaps per day. but no. so how about making the story not so slow paced? i need more. it's like a drug. if i don't have more, ill go insane. so please understand.
HungryMushroom Amazing fanfic Keep doing an amazing job You can do this Danmachi Fanfic idea directly after you finish Reborn in Danmachi as a Dragon-Kin (Rewrite) Shadow Monarch in Danmachi A soul is reborn into Danmachi with the powers of the Shadow Monarch. What will he do now? Harem Hestia Ais Wallenstein Riveria Ljos Alf Ryuu Lion Tione Hiryute Tiona Hiryute Freya Hephaestus Demeter Aisha Belka Phryne Jamil Lena Tally Samira Sanjouno Haruhime Ishtar Bache Kalif Argana Kalif Tsubaki Collbrande Laura Shakti Varma Sophia Flores Emma Flores
For those who don't like tragedy stories, I recommend that you don't read this here, avoid it at all costs, the author simply killed half of everyone he knew, And I don't doubt he kills the rest later too, because this is the type of writer who only knows how to develop a character by killing everyone around him. He killed his father, mother, grandparents and teachers, I have no doubt about killing his brothers in the future, for more character "development", simply pathetic, After all, it's the only way to develop character that he knows, to kill everyone involved with the protagonist
This is one of the best Danmachi fanfics I have found. It has great story progression and character development. However, if you don't like or can't tolerate tragic and dark beginnings, I wouldn't recommend this, but at least give it a try. I hope you also enjoy this and leave a good review or positive criticism so that the author has more motivation to continue this fanfic and would be less likely to drop this. My only critic is that the siblings aren't too developed so far in the story, that are basically just inserted for emotional ties, however, I hope the author will start focusing some attention on them to make the story more realistic by showing the bonds between siblings and their individual personalities.
Hasta ahora (Cap 31), puedo decir que me gusta mucho esta historia, es un desarrollo lento, pero bien hecho. Si quieres ver como nuestro protagonista conversa con la familia Loki, explora el laberinto, conoce a personajes del anime, explora Orario, etc... Todavía no es el momento, diría que falta un aprox de 20-30 capítulos más, para que el prota viaje a Orario (no dire si viaja solo o con más personajes, tendrás que leer la historia para saberlo) Igualmente si eres muy tan de Danmachi y quieres ver como pasan ciertos eventos de la novela ligera o el anime, todavia no es el momento, pero si quieres ver un desarrollo lento, pero bien hecho y con cierta profundidad, esta es tu historia. A continuación un pequeño sploiler de la línea de tiempo en la que se encuentra el prota por si te interesa saberlo (al menos hasta el Cap 31): Esta ubicado antes de la caída de Zeus y Hera, los3 grandes desastres están vivos, la familia Astrea está viva, Hestia todavía no baja del cielo, Bell todavía no llega a Orario, etc…
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I really like this novel, the only thing I hope is that it doesn't drag on too much with childhood, it is also updated more constantly and something I would like would be for the fights to be as epic as in the original danmachi.
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I like it so far I just hope u don’t kill any of his childhood friends or siblings this time. Sure make them loose a arm or a leg but don’t kill them bc then all that character development goes and it’s just sad to see good characters go so early in the grand scheme of things. You know
This rewrite is really cool, I've always really liked MC, non-humans, especially dragons, the original didn't really hook me, but this one is making me even more excited to see it and keep up with the releases xD
Muito bom, mas tem espaço para melhoras. ...... ...... ....... ....... ..... ....... ...... ...... ....... ....... ....... ........ ...... ...... ...... ......
Very Good fanfiction, but I really hope he won't be in a relationship with any of his sisters, as for me they should stay in a family relationship
Está reseña e spara decirles alos lectores que la historia mejora una ves llegan a orario siempre que aguanten asta llegar a Orario las cosas Irán a mejor y que el autor no matara más personajes eso es todo pasen la bien
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The story seems to rely on gratuitous shocks and unnecessary violence. This is not only problematic but also detracts from what could have been a more engaging narrative. Thirty chapters were spent on character development, but in the end, it all seemed pointless. There are countless ways to build characters effectively and develop plots that truly matter. Unfortunately, all the time and effort put into reading this content were not rewarded, as many characters introduced did not have any significant importance to the story. It's frustrating to have spent hours trying to memorize character names that, in the end, contributed nothing to the outcome. I hope that future narratives learn from these mistakes and focus on providing readers with a more rewarding and meaningful experience.
Everything's perfect, except for the chapter production. Since the story is very slow paced, i expected the chapter to be at least 2 chaps per day. but no. so how about making the story not so slow paced? i need more. it's like a drug. if i don't have more, ill go insane. so please understand.
HungryMushroom Amazing fanfic Keep doing an amazing job You can do this Danmachi Fanfic idea directly after you finish Reborn in Danmachi as a Dragon-Kin (Rewrite) Shadow Monarch in Danmachi A soul is reborn into Danmachi with the powers of the Shadow Monarch. What will he do now? Harem Hestia Ais Wallenstein Riveria Ljos Alf Ryuu Lion Tione Hiryute Tiona Hiryute Freya Hephaestus Demeter Aisha Belka Phryne Jamil Lena Tally Samira Sanjouno Haruhime Ishtar Bache Kalif Argana Kalif Tsubaki Collbrande Laura Shakti Varma Sophia Flores Emma Flores
For those who don't like tragedy stories, I recommend that you don't read this here, avoid it at all costs, the author simply killed half of everyone he knew, And I don't doubt he kills the rest later too, because this is the type of writer who only knows how to develop a character by killing everyone around him. He killed his father, mother, grandparents and teachers, I have no doubt about killing his brothers in the future, for more character "development", simply pathetic, After all, it's the only way to develop character that he knows, to kill everyone involved with the protagonist
This is one of the best Danmachi fanfics I have found. It has great story progression and character development. However, if you don't like or can't tolerate tragic and dark beginnings, I wouldn't recommend this, but at least give it a try. I hope you also enjoy this and leave a good review or positive criticism so that the author has more motivation to continue this fanfic and would be less likely to drop this. My only critic is that the siblings aren't too developed so far in the story, that are basically just inserted for emotional ties, however, I hope the author will start focusing some attention on them to make the story more realistic by showing the bonds between siblings and their individual personalities.
Hasta ahora (Cap 31), puedo decir que me gusta mucho esta historia, es un desarrollo lento, pero bien hecho. Si quieres ver como nuestro protagonista conversa con la familia Loki, explora el laberinto, conoce a personajes del anime, explora Orario, etc... Todavía no es el momento, diría que falta un aprox de 20-30 capítulos más, para que el prota viaje a Orario (no dire si viaja solo o con más personajes, tendrás que leer la historia para saberlo) Igualmente si eres muy tan de Danmachi y quieres ver como pasan ciertos eventos de la novela ligera o el anime, todavia no es el momento, pero si quieres ver un desarrollo lento, pero bien hecho y con cierta profundidad, esta es tu historia. A continuación un pequeño sploiler de la línea de tiempo en la que se encuentra el prota por si te interesa saberlo (al menos hasta el Cap 31): Esta ubicado antes de la caída de Zeus y Hera, los3 grandes desastres están vivos, la familia Astrea está viva, Hestia todavía no baja del cielo, Bell todavía no llega a Orario, etc…
Revelar spoiler I really like this novel, the only thing I hope is that it doesn't drag on too much with childhood, it is also updated more constantly and something I would like would be for the fights to be as epic as in the original danmachi.
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I like it so far I just hope u don’t kill any of his childhood friends or siblings this time. Sure make them loose a arm or a leg but don’t kill them bc then all that character development goes and it’s just sad to see good characters go so early in the grand scheme of things. You know
This rewrite is really cool, I've always really liked MC, non-humans, especially dragons, the original didn't really hook me, but this one is making me even more excited to see it and keep up with the releases xD
Muito bom, mas tem espaço para melhoras. ...... ...... ....... ....... ..... ....... ...... ...... ....... ....... ....... ........ ...... ...... ...... ......