HP - Shadow Monarch!

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RaccoonLeague

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grav1ty24

It's just a silly xianxia and nothing more. The logic of the characters? Absent (=level of xianxia). From Harry Potter there are only names and that's it. The MC seems to be flashy and cool, but in reality it's eighth grader syndrome and that's it, lol

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GOD_001

Everything sucks except the update frequency and world background. The same scenario is repeated in the book. MC is very arrogant, has no respect for other people. He looks down on everyone but I think he's just stupid. He's interested in everything except magic. I don't even understand why he's still coming to Hogwarts, all he does is provoke people, at this rate he'll turn the entire wizarding world against him

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AuroraFlower30303

I like and hate MC because of his attitude of ignoring all actions without thinking through them which will keep him being bullied, which I think is annoying.isn't he a genius? why not think through his every action with violence and not solve problems with his intelligence. for example mc used his fists to repeatedly knock down his dorm door and after a few days, he finally used a password to get in, seriously his actions were ridiculous. The author tries to make MC the center of attention by creating problems. I felt like MC's real personality wasn't like that when I read the first chapter, his personality wasn't like I imagined at the beginning of the chapter

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Dark_PersonJJ

Ohhh so you writed a Harry Potter & Shadow Monarch story now huh, interesting, will it also have Lemons and Harem like your other storys?

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Raptor2244

Mediocre story where the Mc slaps everyone around him in the face while looking at them with disdain, they retaliate, he beats them up, rinse and repeat. It's like a crappy cultivation novel reskinned as Harry potter with a sneering imperialist young master as the Mc.

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minorityhuntah

lovely idea but the edge lord mc ruins it for me💔

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Mokillerx7

One of the only books and fanfic I would rate as peak content. Hope author keeps going I love it.

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Daoist503890

The fanfic feels like a machine translation or AI-generated text for several reasons: Overloaded scenes and dialogues. Everything is stretched out, but nothing really happens. The characters talk for a long time, yet the conversation goes nowhere. The protagonist is a walking humiliation machine. There’s no development, no real conflict—just another "puppet genius" effortlessly crushing everyone. Unrecognizable characters. They act strangely, as if their personalities were randomly swapped with a different set of traits. The world's logic collapses. Hogwarts is just a backdrop, magic works however it’s convenient for the author, but without any real system. Language mistakes. The sentences sound as if they were either run through an auto-translator or generated by an AI without understanding the meaning. If you’re looking for basic fan service where an "overpowered protagonist puts everyone in their place," this is for you. If you want something with a real story, logic, and proper writing style—you’re better off skipping it.

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Kayden77

The story is okay but the translation is one of the worst I have seen in a long time

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AHAPPYBEAR

The not-so-late, oh-so-great raccoon, happy to see another new novel, your great at what you do, and I am always excited for your next work.

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PUERKO_Senpai

The story is interesting, but I don't understand where he gets the weights, daggers and sword that suddenly appear without being mentioned before. At least say that he transfigured some garbage into those objects because it takes away a lot of immersion from the story.

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Green_Lantern_2814

ok ok ima be honest and i’m biased against system novels i find them to be so cliche, unrealistic, and just a crutch to any story. The main character’s mom dying boom there’s a magical cure in the system, his brothers neighbors fish a dark overlord and about to kill the mc boom system convenient power boost. you get my point but…. this story is anything besides that its so well thought out and doesn’t follow the timeline its new & refreshing. My only critique is in the being he got jumped and saw he was out numbered and overpowered so instead of trying to be the op mc he should be training ppl he can trust to have his back just in case THUS enter his harem of girls, his wife’s are less likely to betray him over any dude. but besides that this is a amazing story and highly recommend you read this fic or any of the authors other books they aree so good trust me you won’t regret it just wished he was a machine that pumped out chapters quickly lol. keep up the AMAZING work and i can’t wait to see what you continue to cook 👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽👍🏽

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AlphaDragnir

Masterclass

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DaoistXlSNQT

I enjoy the story. Keep up the good work

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Octavio_Rex

me encanta como se va dirigiendo la trama y el personaje como monarca de la sombra

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Word7

It's an ok fanfic. There's nothing horrible about it except for the grammar. Goodness the inconsistency is rampant in this one.

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Tyson_Ransfield

its greet I like it and would like more please keep up the great writing thank you

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JasonReilly05

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