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I found the story interesting at first but it’s not a good one, the main character is supposed strong but so far he’s just been shown as being an idiot and way too passive.
It's good, if you can ignore the horrid grammar. But I have mastered the art of reading what should be, not what is. Definitely worth a try
Yeah... no... I found the mc naive, and it's been 10 years and still haven't changed, still no emotion
batman in onepiece world in world like that mc are kind and very weird . he doesnt want to harm other so he let all trample on him . he top 1-20 of the sea but he let weakling walk over him . if you like batman then this for you.
Revelar spoiler
im awaiting for more chapters to be posted, but story and MC progressed nicely, why so much complains?
yeah I'm dropping this shit makes no sense at all he is too nice and he Acts like a background character and how fast he got strong literally is rushed
Its awful like really bad its not consistant mc too nice even after being sold by his dad and being trained by one of the strongest characters author makes him seem strong in the summary but after 10 years of training which luffy only took 2 was able to learn conquerro. and author made him have immense talen more than luffy just don't read it i'll say...
my guy your asking for support from webnovel reader that are just as broke as you😂
It's good lots of potential. Finally a mc that doesn't have a devil fruit. No the mc doesn't kill people at least not yet. I would say the help he called in killed some in my opinion it didn't say they did though. Anyways it's a nice change compared to other fanfics where they just kill people because they can with no real reason. He is incredibly naive though and it does get him in trouble quite a bit. There's some lack of common sense and it does have some parts that make you laugh. Also the grammar isn't the greatest but you can understand everything. It just needs some editing. Overall a pretty good read (the start may be kind of slow to some). Keep up the good work, I hope you finish this book.
incoherent and incorrigible way of writing, learn to use grammar checker or paraphraser because your grammar is really hard to read
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Everything just somehow makes sense for the Mc he gets as strong as shanks in 12 years and somehow has a different version of 'Voise of All Things'. VERY GOOD ! ! 😮💨
Revelar spoiler
This fic has serious potential but the pacing is extremely slow for no reason. The author writes chapters that doesn't add everything to the story at all
I enjoy this very much but the only thing I might not be a fan of is taking robin with you
Just horrible. The MC is a beta robot that wont kill a guy even if he is graping his mother. But thats not it, he is the strongest swordman that used haki in seconds but 10 years after of trainning he cant break a door... this is extremely stupid and full of contradictions. In one chapter Shakky teached him everything about the world but 5 chapters sfter he doesnt know what a shishibukai is. Yeah, just horrible.
So far so good but the chapters are a bit short, at least 2 chapters per day but well there is no denying that it is a very good story I recommend it if you want to get excited great book
Harem will make this FF boring, and you need editing either through human or AI
First off, writing quality is really bad. The sentences do not flow very well grammatically aswell as it seems more like the author writing is either using a really bad translator, or English isn’t their main language Second, while the story development is sort of okay, the overall attitude of the MC is not something that could be possible in a character that was trained by a the pirate kings right hand, Rayleigh. The character would seem to have the gentle attitude you’d expect from one of the 4 blues, not the grandline. I won’t deny the idea of the fanfiction is good, I mean Yorichii is the goat, but the way the author tells it is not at a quality most readers can bear to read. Tips for author: improve the grammar of you’re writing, structure the story to make better sense and include that in the attitude for the MC. That’s pretty much all I have to say, good luck! [img=recommend]
Jezzz so many bad reviews, why? this story is not that bad, it deserve much better Reviews,you guys are just bunch iof haters and trash talkers, you expected what,? this is FanFictionthis is author own vision.
Please continue. The novel is excellent and deserves four stars We watch the fights against Mihawk 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
There's not much to say about this fic, it's very bad, a very slow story and so out of logic, a boring, empty and clunky protagonist that the only thing I manage to awaken in me is an incredible boredom I don't understand how anyone can like a protagonist who doesn't show any emotion and all he does is nod and act like a fool
This fan fic is not worth wasting your time. This is prolly gonna be dropped soon and author is not consistent at all. The character design is good but doesn't suit the theme at all.
A naïve, boring, silly and weak protagonist, if he hadn't had that 10-year training with the Dark King, the story that the author wants to interpret would be more believable, but unfortunately it's not like that [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
A clear example of how to ruin a fanfiction in 2 chapters, amazing[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The biggest problem with this story is the MC. 10 years of training, 10 years, and he remains the same empty, hollow shell. And it's not a matter of waiting for chapters, it's logic. If you wanted to keep the MC like a potato and develop it little by little, there would be no point in doing this training during this time. It's torturous to read how he walks and acts even though he's that age, that training, and his "ability."
I found the story interesting at first but it’s not a good one, the main character is supposed strong but so far he’s just been shown as being an idiot and way too passive.
It's good, if you can ignore the horrid grammar. But I have mastered the art of reading what should be, not what is. Definitely worth a try
Yeah... no... I found the mc naive, and it's been 10 years and still haven't changed, still no emotion
batman in onepiece world in world like that mc are kind and very weird . he doesnt want to harm other so he let all trample on him . he top 1-20 of the sea but he let weakling walk over him . if you like batman then this for you.
Revelar spoiler im awaiting for more chapters to be posted, but story and MC progressed nicely, why so much complains?
yeah I'm dropping this shit makes no sense at all he is too nice and he Acts like a background character and how fast he got strong literally is rushed
Its awful like really bad its not consistant mc too nice even after being sold by his dad and being trained by one of the strongest characters author makes him seem strong in the summary but after 10 years of training which luffy only took 2 was able to learn conquerro. and author made him have immense talen more than luffy just don't read it i'll say...
my guy your asking for support from webnovel reader that are just as broke as you😂
It's good lots of potential. Finally a mc that doesn't have a devil fruit. No the mc doesn't kill people at least not yet. I would say the help he called in killed some in my opinion it didn't say they did though. Anyways it's a nice change compared to other fanfics where they just kill people because they can with no real reason. He is incredibly naive though and it does get him in trouble quite a bit. There's some lack of common sense and it does have some parts that make you laugh. Also the grammar isn't the greatest but you can understand everything. It just needs some editing. Overall a pretty good read (the start may be kind of slow to some). Keep up the good work, I hope you finish this book.
incoherent and incorrigible way of writing, learn to use grammar checker or paraphraser because your grammar is really hard to read
Wonderful, please continue [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap] [img=faceslap]
Everything just somehow makes sense for the Mc he gets as strong as shanks in 12 years and somehow has a different version of 'Voise of All Things'. VERY GOOD ! ! 😮💨
Revelar spoiler This fic has serious potential but the pacing is extremely slow for no reason. The author writes chapters that doesn't add everything to the story at all
I enjoy this very much but the only thing I might not be a fan of is taking robin with you
Just horrible. The MC is a beta robot that wont kill a guy even if he is graping his mother. But thats not it, he is the strongest swordman that used haki in seconds but 10 years after of trainning he cant break a door... this is extremely stupid and full of contradictions. In one chapter Shakky teached him everything about the world but 5 chapters sfter he doesnt know what a shishibukai is. Yeah, just horrible.
So far so good but the chapters are a bit short, at least 2 chapters per day but well there is no denying that it is a very good story I recommend it if you want to get excited great book
Harem will make this FF boring, and you need editing either through human or AI
First off, writing quality is really bad. The sentences do not flow very well grammatically aswell as it seems more like the author writing is either using a really bad translator, or English isn’t their main language Second, while the story development is sort of okay, the overall attitude of the MC is not something that could be possible in a character that was trained by a the pirate kings right hand, Rayleigh. The character would seem to have the gentle attitude you’d expect from one of the 4 blues, not the grandline. I won’t deny the idea of the fanfiction is good, I mean Yorichii is the goat, but the way the author tells it is not at a quality most readers can bear to read. Tips for author: improve the grammar of you’re writing, structure the story to make better sense and include that in the attitude for the MC. That’s pretty much all I have to say, good luck! [img=recommend]
Jezzz so many bad reviews, why? this story is not that bad, it deserve much better Reviews,you guys are just bunch iof haters and trash talkers, you expected what,? this is FanFictionthis is author own vision.
Please continue. The novel is excellent and deserves four stars We watch the fights against Mihawk 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
There's not much to say about this fic, it's very bad, a very slow story and so out of logic, a boring, empty and clunky protagonist that the only thing I manage to awaken in me is an incredible boredom I don't understand how anyone can like a protagonist who doesn't show any emotion and all he does is nod and act like a fool
This fan fic is not worth wasting your time. This is prolly gonna be dropped soon and author is not consistent at all. The character design is good but doesn't suit the theme at all.
A naïve, boring, silly and weak protagonist, if he hadn't had that 10-year training with the Dark King, the story that the author wants to interpret would be more believable, but unfortunately it's not like that [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
A clear example of how to ruin a fanfiction in 2 chapters, amazing[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
The biggest problem with this story is the MC. 10 years of training, 10 years, and he remains the same empty, hollow shell. And it's not a matter of waiting for chapters, it's logic. If you wanted to keep the MC like a potato and develop it little by little, there would be no point in doing this training during this time. It's torturous to read how he walks and acts even though he's that age, that training, and his "ability."
Sorry, but the writing is terrible. A total mess