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Es una buen libro, tiene gran coherencia con la historia original (excepto la linea de tiempo un poco adelantada) y el sistema de comercio dimencional esta bien, me hubiese gustado tener algunas inetracciones con mas que solo 2 o 3 comerciantes, lo cual junto con la linea de tiempo es lo unico que no la hace un 5 en mi opinion. Me encanta que el personaje solo tenga una pareja ya que no soy fan de historias con harem, y el desarrolo de esta relacion es en realidad bastante refrescante. Gracias por la historia y espero encontrar mas historias cortas y entretenidas como esta.
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Bro it was the second novel I read of yours after the chainsaw man one and easy to say that you did not disappoint
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Okay, read this from start to finish in one sitting, not going to lie. Loved it, the three star review is an unintentional reference to the scene about how three star reviews tend to be more honest. Anyways, yeah loved it. I will say that it felt rushed towards the end of the novel. But I think I understand why, I used to write my own stories and stuff, but whenever you get towards the end of your story you tend to have; burnouts, writers block, etc etc... so I get it. Plus towards the end of this novel mc was already at the peak of mha. So yeah loved it, a decent quality quick read, so probs to the author great work look forward to more interesting reads from you in the future.
i enjoyed it It kinda felt fast paced at the end and would have liked a bit more interaction with class 1A but thank you for the story Arthur-sama and for at least finishing it
a well deserving fanfic which i really enjoyed a lot hope this ff suits you well and it has a interesting plot hope author san will write similar or rather interesting ff as well
This was a really satisfying read. I binged the entire thing in two days. Really nice. Thanks for making it.
thank you author, it was a fun trip. I hope you make good novels like this and you succeed in that too
It was a good trip, full of fun moments, nonsense from the MC, Mineta the goose that lays the golden eggs, and the love interest was good, what I would have liked is to know what happened to Orichi,And also the scammed Sasuke hahaha, until the next author, see you in the next story
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Thank you for the fanfic, it has been an amazing journey. I honestly can't think of anything I particularly dislike in this, which is unbelievably rare for a fanfic and goes to show how great it was. I would love to read another fanfic with a similar premise to this one - maybe one in HS DXD, Highschool Of The Dead (but major nerfs to what can be bought, like only really supplies and at most some weaker powers like Bending powers from Avatar, minor quirks, martial arts, cultivation arts that could barely make him superhuman, etc.), Rosario Vampire, Miraculous Ladybug, Ben 10, One Piece, Dragon Ball, Tensura / TTIGRAAS, the SCP Universe, Naruto, etc.
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I guess it already ended with 85 chapters... It was a fun journey, but it could have been more fun if he and his family could travel to ither worlds hohoho..
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Good story, it had a quick progression that wasn't particularly bad, overall it was fun, I just found the end of the story a little abrupt, but that's ok
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it's hard for me to explain why i dislike this story other than the fact that it feels empty and pointless. Chinese mtl feels less bland than this, it's like there's nopoint to anything in this story and not in the good way.
Ehhh~ It's a promising Fanfic, but, I don't really like MC's who think with their lower half, soooo... I'm just gonna go. though don't let this review discourage others from reading it!
Knowing the author I will give this fanfic a five-star review since the quality is all guaranteed, I will just cross my fingers and hope he will finish this one and not drop it in the middle like he did to plenty of his other work.... Good luck!!
The dialogues are too dry, you can't feel any emotion behind each dialogue which hurts the reading. It's like reading about robots because they all express themselves in the same way, you can't feel the personality of any character because they all speak the same. What should be done to have a good dialogue would be to complement it with something like, for example: "Hello! Today is a nice day, isn't it?" The young woman approached with the same jovial and happy tone as always. (nejire) Or we also have the case of Eri in this story of which we never know how she feels or what her emotions are because they only reduced her to responding with dry dialogues like yes or no. The protagonist also has no personality or a bit of charisma, he is super boring and there is nothing to say about him, we don't know what his motivations are, his goals or why he does what he does, he only exists and speaks with 0 charisma and emotion Aside from that, the idea of the trading system is interesting and original, it is also good to read about someone who is not always in class 1a of the canon
(Heavy Spoilers) Dislikes: -Traders: Apart from Ochirmaru the MC hasn't traded with anyone else worth noting, I would love to see him trade with Aizen or Kisuke from bleach, Dr.Gero from Dragon Ball, Frieza from Dragon ball. Or more one piece material(They were many mentions of Doffy with his nickname Joker but nothing that important) -The powers, MC through his trading system acquired many power systems(Like chakra from naruto ...) and it became very hard to keep track of all of them, I would have enjoyed it more If the story was heavily focused on famous power systems like chakra. -Unique abilites: Apart from the Sharingan the MC didn't recieve any unique ability, Anything he bought either was an item to boost his strength or a technique, In my opinion it would have been better if he bought a devil fruit or a stand or a transformation Apart from what I mentioned everything is good, the pace(I think canon just started at chapter 57) , Diaougle.... In shorter terms I hope the mc would get more unique abilites and trade with anyone noteworthy other than the snake pedo
I've read enough to give my honest review. this FanFic is very good, there is some difficulties when reading this but it's still easy to understand and read. I love that you made the MC impact the personalities of other characters and change the plot. now I'm not the best at writing, and I know that there are different styles when writing a novel, but in this fanfic, there are times when you put a dialogue of two people in the same paragraph, and that could be confusing. but overall this FanFic is great, keep up the good work and please don't drop this. I really hope you can continue this until at least season 3-4 of MHA
Good work, author chan. La novela no es mala, pero hay que admitir que la construcción del sistema no esta bien hecho. Por lo tanto, puedes reducir la interacción del sistema con el protagonista y solo escribir el resultado de la transacción, es decir en sola una o dos párrafos escribir que compró y cuanto costo.
Sinceramente leí fanfic chinos antes y algunos de ellos fueron buenos pero este tuvo la maldita basura de idea de usar camino del cultivo y me dio asco absoluto así que me voy ( no me gusta el cultivo es la única cosa por la que dejo el fanfic)
Es una buen libro, tiene gran coherencia con la historia original (excepto la linea de tiempo un poco adelantada) y el sistema de comercio dimencional esta bien, me hubiese gustado tener algunas inetracciones con mas que solo 2 o 3 comerciantes, lo cual junto con la linea de tiempo es lo unico que no la hace un 5 en mi opinion. Me encanta que el personaje solo tenga una pareja ya que no soy fan de historias con harem, y el desarrolo de esta relacion es en realidad bastante refrescante. Gracias por la historia y espero encontrar mas historias cortas y entretenidas como esta.
Revelar spoiler Bro it was the second novel I read of yours after the chainsaw man one and easy to say that you did not disappoint
▬▬▬.◙.▬▬▬ ═▂▄▄▓▄▄▂ ◢◤ █▀▀████▄▄▄▄◢◤ █▄ █ █▄ ███▀▀▀▀▀▀▀╬ ◥█████◤ ══╩══╩═ ╬═╬ ╬═╬ ╬═╬ ╬═╬ ╬═╬ ╬═╬ 👍
Melhor do que pensei que seria. Recomendo que leiam. Melhor do que pensei que seria. Recomendo que leiam. Melhor do que pensei que seria. Recomendo que leiam. Melhor do que pensei que seria. Recomendo que leiam.
Okay, read this from start to finish in one sitting, not going to lie. Loved it, the three star review is an unintentional reference to the scene about how three star reviews tend to be more honest. Anyways, yeah loved it. I will say that it felt rushed towards the end of the novel. But I think I understand why, I used to write my own stories and stuff, but whenever you get towards the end of your story you tend to have; burnouts, writers block, etc etc... so I get it. Plus towards the end of this novel mc was already at the peak of mha. So yeah loved it, a decent quality quick read, so probs to the author great work look forward to more interesting reads from you in the future.
i enjoyed it It kinda felt fast paced at the end and would have liked a bit more interaction with class 1A but thank you for the story Arthur-sama and for at least finishing it
a well deserving fanfic which i really enjoyed a lot hope this ff suits you well and it has a interesting plot hope author san will write similar or rather interesting ff as well
This was a really satisfying read. I binged the entire thing in two days. Really nice. Thanks for making it.
thank you author, it was a fun trip. I hope you make good novels like this and you succeed in that too
It was a good trip, full of fun moments, nonsense from the MC, Mineta the goose that lays the golden eggs, and the love interest was good, what I would have liked is to know what happened to Orichi,And also the scammed Sasuke hahaha, until the next author, see you in the next story
Revelar spoiler Thank you for the fanfic, it has been an amazing journey. I honestly can't think of anything I particularly dislike in this, which is unbelievably rare for a fanfic and goes to show how great it was. I would love to read another fanfic with a similar premise to this one - maybe one in HS DXD, Highschool Of The Dead (but major nerfs to what can be bought, like only really supplies and at most some weaker powers like Bending powers from Avatar, minor quirks, martial arts, cultivation arts that could barely make him superhuman, etc.), Rosario Vampire, Miraculous Ladybug, Ben 10, One Piece, Dragon Ball, Tensura / TTIGRAAS, the SCP Universe, Naruto, etc.
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I guess it already ended with 85 chapters... It was a fun journey, but it could have been more fun if he and his family could travel to ither worlds hohoho..
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Good story, it had a quick progression that wasn't particularly bad, overall it was fun, I just found the end of the story a little abrupt, but that's ok
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it's hard for me to explain why i dislike this story other than the fact that it feels empty and pointless. Chinese mtl feels less bland than this, it's like there's nopoint to anything in this story and not in the good way.
Ehhh~ It's a promising Fanfic, but, I don't really like MC's who think with their lower half, soooo... I'm just gonna go. though don't let this review discourage others from reading it!
Knowing the author I will give this fanfic a five-star review since the quality is all guaranteed, I will just cross my fingers and hope he will finish this one and not drop it in the middle like he did to plenty of his other work.... Good luck!!
The dialogues are too dry, you can't feel any emotion behind each dialogue which hurts the reading. It's like reading about robots because they all express themselves in the same way, you can't feel the personality of any character because they all speak the same. What should be done to have a good dialogue would be to complement it with something like, for example: "Hello! Today is a nice day, isn't it?" The young woman approached with the same jovial and happy tone as always. (nejire) Or we also have the case of Eri in this story of which we never know how she feels or what her emotions are because they only reduced her to responding with dry dialogues like yes or no. The protagonist also has no personality or a bit of charisma, he is super boring and there is nothing to say about him, we don't know what his motivations are, his goals or why he does what he does, he only exists and speaks with 0 charisma and emotion Aside from that, the idea of the trading system is interesting and original, it is also good to read about someone who is not always in class 1a of the canon
(Heavy Spoilers) Dislikes: -Traders: Apart from Ochirmaru the MC hasn't traded with anyone else worth noting, I would love to see him trade with Aizen or Kisuke from bleach, Dr.Gero from Dragon Ball, Frieza from Dragon ball. Or more one piece material(They were many mentions of Doffy with his nickname Joker but nothing that important) -The powers, MC through his trading system acquired many power systems(Like chakra from naruto ...) and it became very hard to keep track of all of them, I would have enjoyed it more If the story was heavily focused on famous power systems like chakra. -Unique abilites: Apart from the Sharingan the MC didn't recieve any unique ability, Anything he bought either was an item to boost his strength or a technique, In my opinion it would have been better if he bought a devil fruit or a stand or a transformation Apart from what I mentioned everything is good, the pace(I think canon just started at chapter 57) , Diaougle.... In shorter terms I hope the mc would get more unique abilites and trade with anyone noteworthy other than the snake pedo
I've read enough to give my honest review. this FanFic is very good, there is some difficulties when reading this but it's still easy to understand and read. I love that you made the MC impact the personalities of other characters and change the plot. now I'm not the best at writing, and I know that there are different styles when writing a novel, but in this fanfic, there are times when you put a dialogue of two people in the same paragraph, and that could be confusing. but overall this FanFic is great, keep up the good work and please don't drop this. I really hope you can continue this until at least season 3-4 of MHA
Good work, author chan. La novela no es mala, pero hay que admitir que la construcción del sistema no esta bien hecho. Por lo tanto, puedes reducir la interacción del sistema con el protagonista y solo escribir el resultado de la transacción, es decir en sola una o dos párrafos escribir que compró y cuanto costo.
Sinceramente leí fanfic chinos antes y algunos de ellos fueron buenos pero este tuvo la maldita basura de idea de usar camino del cultivo y me dio asco absoluto así que me voy ( no me gusta el cultivo es la única cosa por la que dejo el fanfic)