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Escribe una reseñaI don't understand the existence of OC like elle, including the goddess and the phoenix queen, and the spirit world they rule, author can you explain their benefits???, I don't believe it's because of the fusion of fire and ice, with the MC's system, he is almost omnipotent in the future, so what can elle do for the MC?? Playing games?????
Why does this have so many 5 star reviews when it's a waste of time and the author has over 50 chapters with just filler and useless words to lengthen the word count? The story doesn't progress in more than 50 chapters and it gets boring (google translator)
Ok I want to start by saying I’m enjoying this story I really enjoy what I’m reading and listening to however as a person who enjoys listening and or reading stories I like to try to point out problems that myself or others might have. That being said your writing quality is good but when we get to some of the later chapters I’m on 33 currently it’s harder to enjoy because it feels like your trying to hard especially when your describing him a Vritra getting exited and working with the Demi plane and his clan trait the way you write it makes it feel like it’s a play from the 1800s or an opera it’s just to much they way you describe it feels to much like your trying to hard to explain something that can easily be imagined. I would like to recommend that you loosen up on descriptions and make them more compact and not so big and grand when they don’t need to be like a poem or play it would make everything flow better and seem more relaxed that super intense.
Very good story author👍👍, just one tiny question did you change writing style from around after chapter 30. If I have to say before it was about 4.5 star and now it is like 4-ish. Like you are using words that are not needed to enlarge para and sentences. eg_At one time you wrote sera and sona interaction pera with_the sister were nervous air was filled with sisterly affection and so on_ but we already know how they behave from what we have watched and read so...kinda gets tiresome reading extra words...
This is pretty nice. Even if once the story finally reaches canon, it will be completely unknown.
I’m never great at using the star ranking. I think the story is going good so far. I’m only at ch 17 but so far so good. The chapters do feel like they have progressively gotten shorter but not bad not bad in deed.
A good ff, the only problem here is that the childhood arc is very extensive, and just now in the later chapters some time has passed, but he is still in the DxD universe and didn't go to Danmachi or other worlds.
Sol_Pendragon Great Novel Keep up the great work You can do this Black Clover Fanfic idea immediately after Rise of the Immortal Black Dragon King Black Clover: The Dragon Slayer A soul who was a black clover fan is reborn in the world of Black Clover at Hage Village in the orphanage about two years before episode one. Dragon Slayer Magic Spells Learned: Lightning: Lightning Dragon Roar,Raging Bolt, Lightning Dragon's Heavenward Halberd, Lightning Dragon's Breakdown Fist, Lightning Dragon's Jaw, Roaring Thunder. Iron: Iron Dragon's Club, Iron Dragon's Sword, Iron Dragon's Hard Fist,Iron Dragon's Lance, Iron Dragon's Lance: Demon Logs. Shadow: Shadow Dragon's Slash,Shadow Dragon's Claw,Shadow Dragon's Waxwing Flash,Shadow Dragon's Eruption,Shadow Dragon's Blade Sky: Sky Dragon's Claw,Sky Dragon's Crushing Fang, Sky Dragon's Wave Wind, Shattering Light: Sky Drill. Poison: Poison Dragon's Twin Wings,Poison Dragon's Fang Thrust,Poison Dragon's Scales,Poison Dragon's Spiral Jaw,Poison Dragon's Twin Fang,Poison Dragon's Roar. Harem Charlotte Roselei Noelle Silva Rebecca Scarlet Vanessa Enoteca Charmy Pappitson Mimosa Vermillion Catherine (Black Clover) Sol Marron Nebra Silva Mereoleona Vermillion Witch Queen (Black Clover) Sally (Black Clover) Puli Angel Wainsley (Black Clover) Risacca Ondell Selena (Black Clover) Galgaria (Black Clover) Secre Swallowtail Undine (Black Clover) Lolopechka (Black Clover) Sarado (Black Clover)
well i like this kind of fanfic can anyone recommend fanfic like this i only read 4 kind of this fanfic🤧🫶
it was amazing before you started using Ai, I can tell you started using it when mc had that dream about fighting indra as vrbritra, why did you do this? it so tedious to read now
It's a good story. Good writing and a nice story development. It has a clear plot and is enjoyable.
Firstly, I won’t spoil anything in his review, so if you haven’t read it yet you should be fine. Like the synopsis states, this is a simple story about a guy that got transmigrated into DxD. The main character himself is easy to like and the story isn’t unnecessarily complicated, so even hose with a low reading comprehension can enjoy this. The author makes visible effort and improvements in his writing style all while maintaining a consistent upload schedule, chapters are decently sized and fulfilling, and the plot and action are both balanced very well. Also, the author actually accepts constructive criticism and uses it to grow his story and his writing. It is very nice to hav an author that makes an effort to acknowledge and interact so much with his community. Lastly, If you want to read more chapters in advance, then you can join the author’s Patreon.
I don't make reviews often, but it's a good novel. The MC progresses at a steady rate, which makes the story intriguing. the story moves slowly with important events given time while the non important training arcs are shortened or time skipped, which I enjoy greatly. Overall, it's a good story with great potential.
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The story... is good... some dumb-like choice (for me), but overall, the story is enjoyable and likeable to read; plus, it has a good potential to be a great one... hopefully... A massive harem, but hopefully, a well constructed one (I just started the story). All in All hope the Author won't drop it and reach a great ending for it
I've really enjoyed my time reading this so far, and it doesn't make you feel like you've wasted your time reading it. There are a few little inconsistencies here and there, and when the author suddenly switches to script-style writing for no reason, it can be really jarring. But other than that, I have no real complaints.
Great story so far. Looking forward to the other characters that will be summoned and the strike the blood and mix worlds arcs. ......................................... .......................................... ........................................... .......................................... ..........................................
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Not bad, but kind of boring. The childhood arc is too long, with no serious training, just him fooling around with girls. The romance is just okay, with the normal tsundere cliche. If you want a romance slice of life fic to pass time, you have come to the right place.
This is a Fantastic fic the author actually listens to his reading opinions and ask his audience what they would like to see to make it better he dosent complain like a bozo like most people Ngl do. Great background he does in depth reasearch 🧐 on the topic and if he’s wrong you can correct him a he won’t get all (Well Technically) on you he a open minded person. Writing quality muah 😘 superb. Story development excellent. Character design idk what that means but I don’t what to seem bias to just give out five stars and people will think I’m a AI OR ROBOT. World background like I said he does his reasearch and if he worng you can correct him about it and he won’t complain. Overall great fanfic. Ps. Unbaised opinion take it how you will
pretty great story so far. I'm kinda sad that MC is still only 8, but the story is progressing just that MC would most probably reach satan class before the story starts but in a way that's also a plus side of the story since it doesn't feel like mc is shackled to the plot. a pretty great story. Also Author, I was wondering.... since mc is the prison dragon, could he have blackbeard's devil fruit?
Revelar spoilerIt really good, but please update more fast [img=faceslap] and author you petron how much chapter do you petron have?
I don't understand the existence of OC like elle, including the goddess and the phoenix queen, and the spirit world they rule, author can you explain their benefits???, I don't believe it's because of the fusion of fire and ice, with the MC's system, he is almost omnipotent in the future, so what can elle do for the MC?? Playing games?????
Why does this have so many 5 star reviews when it's a waste of time and the author has over 50 chapters with just filler and useless words to lengthen the word count? The story doesn't progress in more than 50 chapters and it gets boring (google translator)
Ok I want to start by saying I’m enjoying this story I really enjoy what I’m reading and listening to however as a person who enjoys listening and or reading stories I like to try to point out problems that myself or others might have. That being said your writing quality is good but when we get to some of the later chapters I’m on 33 currently it’s harder to enjoy because it feels like your trying to hard especially when your describing him a Vritra getting exited and working with the Demi plane and his clan trait the way you write it makes it feel like it’s a play from the 1800s or an opera it’s just to much they way you describe it feels to much like your trying to hard to explain something that can easily be imagined. I would like to recommend that you loosen up on descriptions and make them more compact and not so big and grand when they don’t need to be like a poem or play it would make everything flow better and seem more relaxed that super intense.
Very good story author👍👍, just one tiny question did you change writing style from around after chapter 30. If I have to say before it was about 4.5 star and now it is like 4-ish. Like you are using words that are not needed to enlarge para and sentences. eg_At one time you wrote sera and sona interaction pera with_the sister were nervous air was filled with sisterly affection and so on_ but we already know how they behave from what we have watched and read so...kinda gets tiresome reading extra words...
This is pretty nice. Even if once the story finally reaches canon, it will be completely unknown.
I’m never great at using the star ranking. I think the story is going good so far. I’m only at ch 17 but so far so good. The chapters do feel like they have progressively gotten shorter but not bad not bad in deed.
A good ff, the only problem here is that the childhood arc is very extensive, and just now in the later chapters some time has passed, but he is still in the DxD universe and didn't go to Danmachi or other worlds.
Sol_Pendragon Great Novel Keep up the great work You can do this Black Clover Fanfic idea immediately after Rise of the Immortal Black Dragon King Black Clover: The Dragon Slayer A soul who was a black clover fan is reborn in the world of Black Clover at Hage Village in the orphanage about two years before episode one. Dragon Slayer Magic Spells Learned: Lightning: Lightning Dragon Roar,Raging Bolt, Lightning Dragon's Heavenward Halberd, Lightning Dragon's Breakdown Fist, Lightning Dragon's Jaw, Roaring Thunder. Iron: Iron Dragon's Club, Iron Dragon's Sword, Iron Dragon's Hard Fist,Iron Dragon's Lance, Iron Dragon's Lance: Demon Logs. Shadow: Shadow Dragon's Slash,Shadow Dragon's Claw,Shadow Dragon's Waxwing Flash,Shadow Dragon's Eruption,Shadow Dragon's Blade Sky: Sky Dragon's Claw,Sky Dragon's Crushing Fang, Sky Dragon's Wave Wind, Shattering Light: Sky Drill. Poison: Poison Dragon's Twin Wings,Poison Dragon's Fang Thrust,Poison Dragon's Scales,Poison Dragon's Spiral Jaw,Poison Dragon's Twin Fang,Poison Dragon's Roar. Harem Charlotte Roselei Noelle Silva Rebecca Scarlet Vanessa Enoteca Charmy Pappitson Mimosa Vermillion Catherine (Black Clover) Sol Marron Nebra Silva Mereoleona Vermillion Witch Queen (Black Clover) Sally (Black Clover) Puli Angel Wainsley (Black Clover) Risacca Ondell Selena (Black Clover) Galgaria (Black Clover) Secre Swallowtail Undine (Black Clover) Lolopechka (Black Clover) Sarado (Black Clover)
well i like this kind of fanfic can anyone recommend fanfic like this i only read 4 kind of this fanfic🤧🫶
it was amazing before you started using Ai, I can tell you started using it when mc had that dream about fighting indra as vrbritra, why did you do this? it so tedious to read now
It's a good story. Good writing and a nice story development. It has a clear plot and is enjoyable.
Firstly, I won’t spoil anything in his review, so if you haven’t read it yet you should be fine. Like the synopsis states, this is a simple story about a guy that got transmigrated into DxD. The main character himself is easy to like and the story isn’t unnecessarily complicated, so even hose with a low reading comprehension can enjoy this. The author makes visible effort and improvements in his writing style all while maintaining a consistent upload schedule, chapters are decently sized and fulfilling, and the plot and action are both balanced very well. Also, the author actually accepts constructive criticism and uses it to grow his story and his writing. It is very nice to hav an author that makes an effort to acknowledge and interact so much with his community. Lastly, If you want to read more chapters in advance, then you can join the author’s Patreon.
I don't make reviews often, but it's a good novel. The MC progresses at a steady rate, which makes the story intriguing. the story moves slowly with important events given time while the non important training arcs are shortened or time skipped, which I enjoy greatly. Overall, it's a good story with great potential.
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The story... is good... some dumb-like choice (for me), but overall, the story is enjoyable and likeable to read; plus, it has a good potential to be a great one... hopefully... A massive harem, but hopefully, a well constructed one (I just started the story). All in All hope the Author won't drop it and reach a great ending for it
I've really enjoyed my time reading this so far, and it doesn't make you feel like you've wasted your time reading it. There are a few little inconsistencies here and there, and when the author suddenly switches to script-style writing for no reason, it can be really jarring. But other than that, I have no real complaints.
Great story so far. Looking forward to the other characters that will be summoned and the strike the blood and mix worlds arcs. ......................................... .......................................... ........................................... .......................................... ..........................................
Revelar spoiler............................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
Not bad, but kind of boring. The childhood arc is too long, with no serious training, just him fooling around with girls. The romance is just okay, with the normal tsundere cliche. If you want a romance slice of life fic to pass time, you have come to the right place.
This is a Fantastic fic the author actually listens to his reading opinions and ask his audience what they would like to see to make it better he dosent complain like a bozo like most people Ngl do. Great background he does in depth reasearch 🧐 on the topic and if he’s wrong you can correct him a he won’t get all (Well Technically) on you he a open minded person. Writing quality muah 😘 superb. Story development excellent. Character design idk what that means but I don’t what to seem bias to just give out five stars and people will think I’m a AI OR ROBOT. World background like I said he does his reasearch and if he worng you can correct him about it and he won’t complain. Overall great fanfic. Ps. Unbaised opinion take it how you will
pretty great story so far. I'm kinda sad that MC is still only 8, but the story is progressing just that MC would most probably reach satan class before the story starts but in a way that's also a plus side of the story since it doesn't feel like mc is shackled to the plot. a pretty great story. Also Author, I was wondering.... since mc is the prison dragon, could he have blackbeard's devil fruit?
Revelar spoiler
It really good, but please update more fast [img=faceslap] and author you petron how much chapter do you petron have?