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Also, My main characters look like the above. He is also very tall but lean not in the scrawny type. As you might have guessed I am writing this obivous instruction because I want my novel to get the official rating
This story has a very promising plot. It just needs more attention to world-building and consistent character-building. There are grammar errors here and there, but the narrative is still good overall.
Although there is only 3 chapters in this i pretty much think it is a great start it is well written i very like the story it interesting to read the pacing for the 3 chapters are well maintained keep up the good work
So… I have gone for brutal honesty rather than mindless praise in the hope that I might be able to help you grow. I have read the first two chapters, and have added some feedback on the first few paragraphs. These will probably already give you a bit of an idea what I mean when I say that your grammar needs some work. The most glaring mistake is the constant switch between past and present tense. Overall, I believe there’s a fun story here. It just needs some polishing. I wish you a lot of fun writing it.
Very good writing, love the story plot can’t wait the see what will happen next, please keep on writing, I’m very exciting for the next chapter to be released, will recommend to everyone 👍 you’re doing amazing work
At only two chapters, it's difficult to say where the story is headed, however, those two chapters were written so we'll one can only look forward to what's in store, good job author😊
It's just two chapters atm but has me asking all the right questions. It's vivid in a way that made me feel like i was watching it and not reading. In short, this is something to look out for and i cannot wait to see how it turns out!
First time reading a novel that’s not focused on obsessive romance and I love it. I’ll wait for the author’s update and hope I enjoy the book. Nice book so far… I’ll come back for another review at the end of the story. 🤭🤭🤭 keep up the good work author😊
Your story is quite promising ,I enjoying it so far. My only suggestion is to keep updating regularly. I'm eager to see where the story goes next.
I read the first chapter and I have to say this with honesty that concept is really really good and if you can keep going I definitely can say this it will be good, but after reading the chapter I read the synopsis it is a little confusing i think you do a little change in it, and I don't know if you have a plot in mind for the story, but if you not I have some points after reading the chapter and synopsis, read them if you think they are useful. 1. Exploring Magic Integration: Since the protagonist is a scientist, you could delve into how he integrates his advanced scientific knowledge with the magical aspects of the new world he finds himself in. This could lead to fascinating discoveries and unique approaches to solving problems. 2. Reviving His Reputation: The protagonist could initially struggle to regain the recognition he deserves in this new world. He might choose to work in secrecy, publishing under a pseudonym, or using magic to create impressive displays that attract attention while keeping his true identity hidden. 3. Moral Dilemmas: As the protagonist grows stronger and interacts with various characters, he could face moral dilemmas related to his past experiences. He might need to decide whether to seek revenge on the corrupt prime minister or focus on using his knowledge for the greater good. 4. Alliance Building: The protagonist could form alliances with other individuals who share his ideals and vision for a better world. These allies could be fellow scientists, mages, or individuals who have suffered due to corruption and inequality. 5. Exploration of Love and Relationships: While the protagonist has a complex perspective on love, his interactions with different characters could gradually challenge his beliefs. As he forms deep connections with people around him, he might come to understand the nuances of different types of love. 6. Cultural Clash: The clash between the protagonist's scientific background and the magical world's traditions and beliefs could lead to interesting conflicts. He could find himself at odds with certain groups who see science as a threat to their magical way of life. 7. Quest for Truth: As the protagonist uncovers more about the corruption and conspiracies in the world, he could embark on a quest for truth. This could involve uncovering hidden histories, deciphering ancient prophecies, and solving puzzles that tie into both science and magic. 8. Character Growth: The story could focus not only on the protagonist's external achievements but also on his internal growth. Through his experiences and interactions, he could evolve from a somewhat detached individual into someone who learns to appreciate the complexities of human emotions and connections. 9. Ethical Dilemmas: With his scientific knowledge and desire to create a better world, the protagonist might face difficult ethical decisions. These decisions could test his principles and challenge his views on what constitutes progress. 10. Climactic Confrontation: The story could build toward a climactic confrontation between the protagonist and the corrupt prime minister. This could be a showdown of wits, where the protagonist uses both his scientific acumen and magical abilities to expose the truth and challenge the prime minister's reign.
Interesting story plot and characters development. I will be waiting for the next chapter to release. Can’t wait to find out what will happen next. Keep up you good work 👍
Shameless review. SO yeah, I think this story has an idea with potential but still needs proper execution so hoping that you all will guide me and make this a hit.
Also, My main characters look like the above. He is also very tall but lean not in the scrawny type. As you might have guessed I am writing this obivous instruction because I want my novel to get the official rating
This story has a very promising plot. It just needs more attention to world-building and consistent character-building. There are grammar errors here and there, but the narrative is still good overall.
Although there is only 3 chapters in this i pretty much think it is a great start it is well written i very like the story it interesting to read the pacing for the 3 chapters are well maintained keep up the good work
So… I have gone for brutal honesty rather than mindless praise in the hope that I might be able to help you grow. I have read the first two chapters, and have added some feedback on the first few paragraphs. These will probably already give you a bit of an idea what I mean when I say that your grammar needs some work. The most glaring mistake is the constant switch between past and present tense. Overall, I believe there’s a fun story here. It just needs some polishing. I wish you a lot of fun writing it.
Very good writing, love the story plot can’t wait the see what will happen next, please keep on writing, I’m very exciting for the next chapter to be released, will recommend to everyone 👍 you’re doing amazing work
At only two chapters, it's difficult to say where the story is headed, however, those two chapters were written so we'll one can only look forward to what's in store, good job author😊
It's just two chapters atm but has me asking all the right questions. It's vivid in a way that made me feel like i was watching it and not reading. In short, this is something to look out for and i cannot wait to see how it turns out!
First time reading a novel that’s not focused on obsessive romance and I love it. I’ll wait for the author’s update and hope I enjoy the book. Nice book so far… I’ll come back for another review at the end of the story. 🤭🤭🤭 keep up the good work author😊
Your story is quite promising ,I enjoying it so far. My only suggestion is to keep updating regularly. I'm eager to see where the story goes next.
I read the first chapter and I have to say this with honesty that concept is really really good and if you can keep going I definitely can say this it will be good, but after reading the chapter I read the synopsis it is a little confusing i think you do a little change in it, and I don't know if you have a plot in mind for the story, but if you not I have some points after reading the chapter and synopsis, read them if you think they are useful. 1. Exploring Magic Integration: Since the protagonist is a scientist, you could delve into how he integrates his advanced scientific knowledge with the magical aspects of the new world he finds himself in. This could lead to fascinating discoveries and unique approaches to solving problems. 2. Reviving His Reputation: The protagonist could initially struggle to regain the recognition he deserves in this new world. He might choose to work in secrecy, publishing under a pseudonym, or using magic to create impressive displays that attract attention while keeping his true identity hidden. 3. Moral Dilemmas: As the protagonist grows stronger and interacts with various characters, he could face moral dilemmas related to his past experiences. He might need to decide whether to seek revenge on the corrupt prime minister or focus on using his knowledge for the greater good. 4. Alliance Building: The protagonist could form alliances with other individuals who share his ideals and vision for a better world. These allies could be fellow scientists, mages, or individuals who have suffered due to corruption and inequality. 5. Exploration of Love and Relationships: While the protagonist has a complex perspective on love, his interactions with different characters could gradually challenge his beliefs. As he forms deep connections with people around him, he might come to understand the nuances of different types of love. 6. Cultural Clash: The clash between the protagonist's scientific background and the magical world's traditions and beliefs could lead to interesting conflicts. He could find himself at odds with certain groups who see science as a threat to their magical way of life. 7. Quest for Truth: As the protagonist uncovers more about the corruption and conspiracies in the world, he could embark on a quest for truth. This could involve uncovering hidden histories, deciphering ancient prophecies, and solving puzzles that tie into both science and magic. 8. Character Growth: The story could focus not only on the protagonist's external achievements but also on his internal growth. Through his experiences and interactions, he could evolve from a somewhat detached individual into someone who learns to appreciate the complexities of human emotions and connections. 9. Ethical Dilemmas: With his scientific knowledge and desire to create a better world, the protagonist might face difficult ethical decisions. These decisions could test his principles and challenge his views on what constitutes progress. 10. Climactic Confrontation: The story could build toward a climactic confrontation between the protagonist and the corrupt prime minister. This could be a showdown of wits, where the protagonist uses both his scientific acumen and magical abilities to expose the truth and challenge the prime minister's reign.
Interesting story plot and characters development. I will be waiting for the next chapter to release. Can’t wait to find out what will happen next. Keep up you good work 👍
Shameless review. SO yeah, I think this story has an idea with potential but still needs proper execution so hoping that you all will guide me and make this a hit.