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i will tell the good and the bad thing about this fic. the good : + premise story and plot development is interesting. + mc is cool and reasonable, not cocky, not perverted, his sole goal so far is to protect his siblings. + Issei undergone traumatic event's so he mature early not indulging his perverted hobby instead he become protective to his family and trying his best to grow stronger to reach that goal the bad : -way too many unnecessary OCs. issei sister, asia brother, loki and the gang. they become more important than canon characters. is there a point to read DxD fanfic if the main story is filled with non-DxD characters? you decide, but i personally rather read original novel instead if there is too many OCs -mc is your perfect human, your gary stu, this kind of character is the worst character because such human is not possible. human is human because they are flawed or have vice, otherwise they just fairy tale angel. the story still early so maybe he have flaw or vice in the future. - Grammar is awful. pronoun is all wrong. the fic often use "he" pronoun for female characters or vice versa. the fic use "brother" for female character or vice versa. the fic use "hyoudou brother" for referring issei and his sister. it's quite clear that the author just use google translate and wont bother to proofread it. for author : use "hyoudou sibling" next time i think this fic have potential but the awful translation makes it unreadable. and the so many OCs fill the story to the point shifting out Canon characters is making me dont care about the story anymore. it's tough to read
Delete my old comment cuz its getting drowned o(￣┰￣*)ゞ just want to say that this novel has already reach the end of Volume 2 I'll read your suggestion and criticism, give me a review if you like my book （；´д｀）ゞ
oh you, you are the only one that I can recall, yet again you didn't remember me hmp as long as I live I will always remember you, as always m?
Hello I know I know I only reads a couple chapters, the words that you choice a bit confusing me, idk about you but my first language isn't English sooooo yeah maybe that the issue for myself, also keep up the work, I have these felling that you are a student, high school student. yeah good work!
I like how he prefers to create new routes, stories and characters, even though the problem is the stability of the updates, neat at least I think this is readable
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Well, I think it's okay, only read when free, and don't have anything to read again
How about Mc get rid of old man in the park and make sure their grandfather don't corrupt Issei? Issei was showing to be very innocent before both of them corrupted him.
Grammar and choice of words are bad and I think it's common for starters but maybe will improve in future. As for other elements, I don't know how to give a review because I didn't really write a serious review. That's all and hopefully will improve in future. :)
To all those who like high school DX recommend reading this fan fiction book it's one of the best ones I found in high school DXD And I have looked hard to find a good one and I recommend everyone who would love to read this definitely read it I re-read this book twice already and I'm still hooked and I'm still excited to find out what happens next so why don't you all give it a try I know I didn't regret giving it a try And I bet you guys won't either
i will tell the good and the bad thing about this fic. the good : + premise story and plot development is interesting. + mc is cool and reasonable, not cocky, not perverted, his sole goal so far is to protect his siblings. + Issei undergone traumatic event's so he mature early not indulging his perverted hobby instead he become protective to his family and trying his best to grow stronger to reach that goal the bad : -way too many unnecessary OCs. issei sister, asia brother, loki and the gang. they become more important than canon characters. is there a point to read DxD fanfic if the main story is filled with non-DxD characters? you decide, but i personally rather read original novel instead if there is too many OCs -mc is your perfect human, your gary stu, this kind of character is the worst character because such human is not possible. human is human because they are flawed or have vice, otherwise they just fairy tale angel. the story still early so maybe he have flaw or vice in the future. - Grammar is awful. pronoun is all wrong. the fic often use "he" pronoun for female characters or vice versa. the fic use "brother" for female character or vice versa. the fic use "hyoudou brother" for referring issei and his sister. it's quite clear that the author just use google translate and wont bother to proofread it. for author : use "hyoudou sibling" next time i think this fic have potential but the awful translation makes it unreadable. and the so many OCs fill the story to the point shifting out Canon characters is making me dont care about the story anymore. it's tough to read
Delete my old comment cuz its getting drowned o(￣┰￣*)ゞ just want to say that this novel has already reach the end of Volume 2 I'll read your suggestion and criticism, give me a review if you like my book （；´д｀）ゞ
oh you, you are the only one that I can recall, yet again you didn't remember me hmp as long as I live I will always remember you, as always m?
Hello I know I know I only reads a couple chapters, the words that you choice a bit confusing me, idk about you but my first language isn't English sooooo yeah maybe that the issue for myself, also keep up the work, I have these felling that you are a student, high school student. yeah good work!
I like how he prefers to create new routes, stories and characters, even though the problem is the stability of the updates, neat at least I think this is readable
niceeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
Well, I think it's okay, only read when free, and don't have anything to read again
How about Mc get rid of old man in the park and make sure their grandfather don't corrupt Issei? Issei was showing to be very innocent before both of them corrupted him.
Grammar and choice of words are bad and I think it's common for starters but maybe will improve in future. As for other elements, I don't know how to give a review because I didn't really write a serious review. That's all and hopefully will improve in future. :)
To all those who like high school DX recommend reading this fan fiction book it's one of the best ones I found in high school DXD And I have looked hard to find a good one and I recommend everyone who would love to read this definitely read it I re-read this book twice already and I'm still hooked and I'm still excited to find out what happens next so why don't you all give it a try I know I didn't regret giving it a try And I bet you guys won't either