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Escribe una reseñaAh, the only bad thing is that it's been almost a month without releasing new chapters, ah, the story is good, it has few defects, the strength of the MC is realistic for those who know the plot.
Evaluation: Below Average. WQ: Several gramm errors which can be improved on as the story progress. Monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process. 3/5 SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon/plot which is lackluster. 2/5 CD: MC is a transmigrator but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. MCs inaction to progress further by leaving the village is really lackluster and too dumb for my opinion just to follow the plot. MC is a dumb hero which is too kind for NarutoVerse. Lacks utilization of NarutoVerse foreknowledge & his earth/previous life experiences. 2/5 US: Chapters are short, stability of update matches the quality of this FF. 4/5 WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5 My opinion: Could've been better to make a new plot rather than doing the same thing as other Naruto FF. Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
The story development is good tbh, but the character design leaves more to be desired. he's or was an adult for god's sake and the way he readins is no way for an adult should reason. And this is simply a wish fulfilment ff but it's too much. What? if you wanted the full Otsustsuki package why didn't you just become a SI in the Uchiha, Senju, Hyuga or Uzumaki clan while also wishing for a chakra breeder reactor, that way we'll know what we came to read. this is just you destroying my perfect Naruto story. You're just redoing the whole Naruto plot with slight deviations. It gets boring fast NB: This isn't me being rude or overly criticizing you. This is my honest thoughts, author. do with it as you see fit.
Evaluation: Below Average. WQ: Several gramm errors which can be improved on as the story progress. Monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process. 3/5 SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon/plot which is lackluster. 2/5 CD: MC is a transmigrator but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. MCs inaction to progress further by leaving the village is really lackluster and too dumb for my opinion just to follow the plot. MC is a dumb hero which is too kind for NarutoVerse. Lacks utilization of NarutoVerse foreknowledge & his earth/previous life experiences. 2/5 US: Chapters are short, stability of update matches the quality of this FF. 4/5 WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5 My opinion: Could've been better to make a new plot rather than doing the same thing as other Naruto FF. Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
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The author has done a great job when it comes to improving the quality of writing and is very open to constructive criticism on how to improve further.
I am reading 16 episodes and in general, it is entertaining to read because the author follows almost all the ideas of his readers, he also has good grammar and makes everything go well, so this is just beginning and for the future it will be a very good story.
good story. a bit concerned your trying yo make yo harem to big. think more than 4 would be to much. other than that no complants. rn its basically 9 tails, tenten, and hinita. hope tsunade is in. either way its yo choice. keep up the good work.
I have only read four chapters but I can say for sure that it has potential. So, Mr. Author please don't drop it and give it a good ending. That's all I had to say.... And one more thing... please update it regularly, that's my earnest request.
Ah, the only bad thing is that it's been almost a month without releasing new chapters, ah, the story is good, it has few defects, the strength of the MC is realistic for those who know the plot.
Evaluation: Below Average. WQ: Several gramm errors which can be improved on as the story progress. Monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process. 3/5 SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon/plot which is lackluster. 2/5 CD: MC is a transmigrator but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. MCs inaction to progress further by leaving the village is really lackluster and too dumb for my opinion just to follow the plot. MC is a dumb hero which is too kind for NarutoVerse. Lacks utilization of NarutoVerse foreknowledge & his earth/previous life experiences. 2/5 US: Chapters are short, stability of update matches the quality of this FF. 4/5 WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5 My opinion: Could've been better to make a new plot rather than doing the same thing as other Naruto FF. Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
The story development is good tbh, but the character design leaves more to be desired. he's or was an adult for god's sake and the way he readins is no way for an adult should reason. And this is simply a wish fulfilment ff but it's too much. What? if you wanted the full Otsustsuki package why didn't you just become a SI in the Uchiha, Senju, Hyuga or Uzumaki clan while also wishing for a chakra breeder reactor, that way we'll know what we came to read. this is just you destroying my perfect Naruto story. You're just redoing the whole Naruto plot with slight deviations. It gets boring fast NB: This isn't me being rude or overly criticizing you. This is my honest thoughts, author. do with it as you see fit.
Evaluation: Below Average. WQ: Several gramm errors which can be improved on as the story progress. Monotonous dialogues/interaction & redundant thought process. 3/5 SD: With a slow to average pace of development and it also lacks MC & story progression since author-san decided to follow cannon/plot which is lackluster. 2/5 CD: MC is a transmigrator but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. MCs inaction to progress further by leaving the village is really lackluster and too dumb for my opinion just to follow the plot. MC is a dumb hero which is too kind for NarutoVerse. Lacks utilization of NarutoVerse foreknowledge & his earth/previous life experiences. 2/5 US: Chapters are short, stability of update matches the quality of this FF. 4/5 WB: There's nothing new as author-san decided that MC follows/observe cannon. 3/5 My opinion: Could've been better to make a new plot rather than doing the same thing as other Naruto FF. Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
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The author has done a great job when it comes to improving the quality of writing and is very open to constructive criticism on how to improve further.
I am reading 16 episodes and in general, it is entertaining to read because the author follows almost all the ideas of his readers, he also has good grammar and makes everything go well, so this is just beginning and for the future it will be a very good story.
good story. a bit concerned your trying yo make yo harem to big. think more than 4 would be to much. other than that no complants. rn its basically 9 tails, tenten, and hinita. hope tsunade is in. either way its yo choice. keep up the good work.
I have only read four chapters but I can say for sure that it has potential. So, Mr. Author please don't drop it and give it a good ending. That's all I had to say.... And one more thing... please update it regularly, that's my earnest request.
Well, read and enjoy my dear readers. Also I gave myself five starts cuz why not?