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the story is stupid and forced, the dialouge is contrived, the descriptions and explanations aren't, and the MC is 2D, boring, bland and unentertaining.
Grammar is very bad, often uses the wrong word, or the correct words in the wrong order. Plot is ok. Character development is sporadic. MC and his girls make random decisions sometimes (at least to me). The world, how it works, and some of the history is poorly explained until the later chapters, and even then there are some things that aren't explained. Overall, it was entertaining, but a bit of a pain to read. I hope author keeps writing and getting better. If so, we can look forward to some good stories that keep getting better and better.
Yeah, sorry author, but this is just way too hard to read. --- It's not the grammar or spelling, but something else about how you write. It's like everything is stunted and lacking detail while presuming that the reader perfectly understands everything that's in your head while writing. --- We don't. --- Chinese MTL is easier to comprehend than this. I wish I could give you an exact reason why, because this story is a cool idea, but I can't.
I really enjoyed this story I like how the characters were build up but I wish to see more athena it would have been amazing but that was amazing. I really enjoyed and the building up of children and the history they have was fun to read. thanks for a wonderful story
Seriously it ended so prematurely? I literally skip many adventures of the Harem and MC, which was one of the proposals he was included in the novel. I was sad because Athena appeared and the work was over, without even showing the adventures with her. And she choking on Leon (MC) outside after the Reunion of the two and their moments in bed crying And hugged. Very sharp cut and final without salt, ending with a dialogue with the Goddess Freya. I sincerely wanted to have read about Harem's pregnancies, her travels, Celes' reaction when she found out she was pregnant since she said she didn't want to have children, seeing Louise and Athena jealous of Celes' Pregnancy and then Athena's Pregnancy, and Louise being the last to become pregnant and giving birth to the Son, then Amaterasu revived and pregnant.But that didn't happen, well sad. Author do you like to write short stories..? I could have written a little more to end up with about 240~300 chapters. But you are the Author and decide the course of history. Summary at the end: Reading was cool, even with Auto Translation. The ending would say cool to know that there were children and Louise getting pregnant (But I wanted to read it!), honestly I was kind of sad that it was like this END. Note: 4 - Not bad, but not so good for the final and cut/timerskip. [img=update]
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Ah, another good book by homie sixth, sadly once again I’m too busy to really get into. I hope your doing well homie and good luck with your next amazing book. I’m still waiting for you to make the best harem book ever made 🙃
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Happy new year author thank you for bringing us Chapter of your novel many blessings and have a good time this day December 31 Mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm
I didn't realize Sixth was the author till a comment, but so far this story is really good. I am astonished how far Sixth has come from the Game Rune System, and Summoned... I married a Yandere. This is another story where the MC feels real and the story isn't carried by the MC always asking "How come? What is that?? Why did they attack me??" so the whole obvious situation can be explained is painstakingly detail. The world and scene setting is delivered in stride with the story.. I just got to the point where it seems the MC's emotions, personality, and actions will take it's first growth spurt. Keep up the good work!!!!
23 chaps in and I must say, good job. This story is solid. The characters a reasonable, the story is fairly interesting, you update regularly, and the writing quality is that of a native English speaker. If your looking for something safe to read that won't disappoint you, then this is the thing. However the flip side is also true. We aren't exactly treading new ground here. No new parts of the fantasy genre are being explored. On top of that, there aren't really any literary risks taken. It's a normal story. That's the only flaw I have found. And that's not really a flaw. All in all, not bad at all.
Sixth has done it again, bestowing upon us another magnificent harem. First and foremost, the grammar of this novel is good, easy to read, and it's off to quite an interesting start, with a great Mc and his now growing harem, definitely worth reading, best of luck!
Revelar spoiler I will start to see this novel it looks interesting Mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm
Author's four stars review, for there's always room for improvement. With those words, feel free to point out all mistakes, typos, etc. All for the improvement! Now, onto the story... Waifus smiles cure my depression... This book is about leveling up with lovely girls! Is it just killing monsters to get exp points? Nah, they level up in many ways. For example, smiling... Ah, beautiful... Not enough? Alright, waifu, cook some meal for my boi. Not enough? Tsk... Alright, cuddle with him... Wait, wait! I said cuddle, not bed wrestling!
the story is stupid and forced, the dialouge is contrived, the descriptions and explanations aren't, and the MC is 2D, boring, bland and unentertaining.
Grammar is very bad, often uses the wrong word, or the correct words in the wrong order. Plot is ok. Character development is sporadic. MC and his girls make random decisions sometimes (at least to me). The world, how it works, and some of the history is poorly explained until the later chapters, and even then there are some things that aren't explained. Overall, it was entertaining, but a bit of a pain to read. I hope author keeps writing and getting better. If so, we can look forward to some good stories that keep getting better and better.
Yeah, sorry author, but this is just way too hard to read. --- It's not the grammar or spelling, but something else about how you write. It's like everything is stunted and lacking detail while presuming that the reader perfectly understands everything that's in your head while writing. --- We don't. --- Chinese MTL is easier to comprehend than this. I wish I could give you an exact reason why, because this story is a cool idea, but I can't.
I really enjoyed this story I like how the characters were build up but I wish to see more athena it would have been amazing but that was amazing. I really enjoyed and the building up of children and the history they have was fun to read. thanks for a wonderful story
Seriously it ended so prematurely? I literally skip many adventures of the Harem and MC, which was one of the proposals he was included in the novel. I was sad because Athena appeared and the work was over, without even showing the adventures with her. And she choking on Leon (MC) outside after the Reunion of the two and their moments in bed crying And hugged. Very sharp cut and final without salt, ending with a dialogue with the Goddess Freya. I sincerely wanted to have read about Harem's pregnancies, her travels, Celes' reaction when she found out she was pregnant since she said she didn't want to have children, seeing Louise and Athena jealous of Celes' Pregnancy and then Athena's Pregnancy, and Louise being the last to become pregnant and giving birth to the Son, then Amaterasu revived and pregnant.But that didn't happen, well sad. Author do you like to write short stories..? I could have written a little more to end up with about 240~300 chapters. But you are the Author and decide the course of history. Summary at the end: Reading was cool, even with Auto Translation. The ending would say cool to know that there were children and Louise getting pregnant (But I wanted to read it!), honestly I was kind of sad that it was like this END. Note: 4 - Not bad, but not so good for the final and cut/timerskip. [img=update]
Revelar spoiler Ah, another good book by homie sixth, sadly once again I’m too busy to really get into. I hope your doing well homie and good luck with your next amazing book. I’m still waiting for you to make the best harem book ever made 🙃
Revelar spoiler SUBIRÁS UNA NUEVA NOVELA MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM MMMMMM MMM
Happy new year author thank you for bringing us Chapter of your novel many blessings and have a good time this day December 31 Mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm
I didn't realize Sixth was the author till a comment, but so far this story is really good. I am astonished how far Sixth has come from the Game Rune System, and Summoned... I married a Yandere. This is another story where the MC feels real and the story isn't carried by the MC always asking "How come? What is that?? Why did they attack me??" so the whole obvious situation can be explained is painstakingly detail. The world and scene setting is delivered in stride with the story.. I just got to the point where it seems the MC's emotions, personality, and actions will take it's first growth spurt. Keep up the good work!!!!
23 chaps in and I must say, good job. This story is solid. The characters a reasonable, the story is fairly interesting, you update regularly, and the writing quality is that of a native English speaker. If your looking for something safe to read that won't disappoint you, then this is the thing. However the flip side is also true. We aren't exactly treading new ground here. No new parts of the fantasy genre are being explored. On top of that, there aren't really any literary risks taken. It's a normal story. That's the only flaw I have found. And that's not really a flaw. All in all, not bad at all.
Sixth has done it again, bestowing upon us another magnificent harem. First and foremost, the grammar of this novel is good, easy to read, and it's off to quite an interesting start, with a great Mc and his now growing harem, definitely worth reading, best of luck!
Revelar spoiler I will start to see this novel it looks interesting Mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm mmmmmm
Author's four stars review, for there's always room for improvement. With those words, feel free to point out all mistakes, typos, etc. All for the improvement! Now, onto the story... Waifus smiles cure my depression... This book is about leveling up with lovely girls! Is it just killing monsters to get exp points? Nah, they level up in many ways. For example, smiling... Ah, beautiful... Not enough? Alright, waifu, cook some meal for my boi. Not enough? Tsk... Alright, cuddle with him... Wait, wait! I said cuddle, not bed wrestling!