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Writing quality: Top notch. Few if any errors that pull you out of the story. Story Development: Absolutely splendid read, you have a bullied kid, parental problems, PTSD/trauma, then coming across a "Opportunity" this leads to its own set of problems but incredible potential positives outcomes. To a solid bit of foreshadowing of something major occuring in the story early on and gradually picking up into a grand finale of sorts. Can't imagine what we will be getting to experience in this story few hundred chapters from now. Character Design: Solid work here across the board. Consistently expressing other characters and how the occurrences in the story in itself effected them. Showing growth in the main character early on and being consistent with it. Main character isn't broken op and still has enemies but clearly you can see what his growth rate will be like in the future. Updating stability: I want to see 14 chapters a week. I personally read extremely fast. So I'm generally picky here. And I like basically being able to get on every day and getting to read a solid 2 chapters from Novels I am really enjoying. Meh I'm needy/greedy when it comes to good literature can't help it. I just read most of the chapters in burst and caught up to the most recent chapter so I can't judge on this and so forth leaving it at 5 stars until further notice. World Background: Overall solid, the author gives good description of environments that the "present" story is taking place in from schools, training areas, bedrooms and more and has also included this in combat scenes in the use of weapons or defenses. The story has gone over some history but it's been here and there for me, this is probably not what most people will think, it's just what I personally would prefer a bit more in this one specific aspect. Can't help it I'm needy. More I have to read of this the better. Total: 5 out of 5 in each category until further notice. It's definitely caught my eye and I'm now paying attention to it's uploads. Very enjoyable read that makes me want more. To see what's coming next. Final Verdict will be given when the author reaches 1,000 chapters or the novel is otherwise abandoned.
This novel has a great concept but why isn’t there more technological aspect? It’s called “Biological SUPER COMPUTER!” Meaning that it will deal with biology along with technology. But so far, there isn’t any forum of technology being used/created. It’s already 200 chapters in and the MC barely had any character advancement; still sorta rules by his emotion; severely lack intelligence; and far too naïve. A The MC believes he’s grow and smart to make sound decisions, but so far it’s as if he’s being led by Circumstances, always on the defensive. Hopefully this story will improve; but we will see! Author make sure you add more technology to this novel. There’s so much that could be done!
I still don't understand why people learn to fight with hand to hand combat and weapons instead of fully utilize their brain crystal and mc (I get it he's 15) is the worse in term of power usages I mean just keep throwing them trees will ya
I like the story so far. However, I have problems with chaoter 265. Why is there romance included?! It just makes things worse, especially when there is no romance tag.
Revelar spoiler
author dont forget to make it so that every girl who shows interest like emily and amber will be his future wives
good story by quick question how do I view auxiliary volumes on my phone
Very good world building. But I am 100 chapter in and barely anything has happened. I have to drop it just cause of how slow paced it is. No one cares about all these side characters.
can anyone tell me what this ESIGMAD1 and other ranks like this means what is the proper order of these ranks
While the story is interesting and the premise is good, it has very little editing which makes it difficult to read. Additionally, while the author does take feedback, which is easy to notice after reading 200+ chapters, the older chapter are a mess and require significant rewrite. Essentially, while there is definitely improvement in the writing style, there are very few people that will be able to reach that point before giving up, which is the main reason this story will never see the top lists. For example, the other switches between story-lines between several chapters and you lose focus on their main character, while being forced to focus on characters the readers just aren't able to connect with because they disappear within a few chapter and have very little connection to the main story. While it was fixed, it still remains as a part of the story and is very difficult to gloss over. The only advise I can give to the author a complete rewrite for the first 200 chapters with serious editing and removal of filler chapters.
I’m really liking this novel so far, the power system is quite good, and the supercomputer brain AI is a nice take, however the constant change of POV is the only downfall… the back and forth between MC and the military is really jarring, and I end up skipping most of the military chapters because there’s no incentive to care what’s happening to these irrelevant side characters. I’ll keep reading in hopes it gets better as I’m only on chapter 200
Hello author! I would like to know if there is ntr in the work (I hope not) or yuri (I hope not). I would also like to know how many girls are currently in the harem, and if there are any yanderes... please answer me.
Love the story but for the love god dear author can you move the fights faster cause I’m reading the chase chapters and it feels like the fights has been going on for a week. Other than that great story.
It was good but too many POVs, It would be great if the author focuses only on mc or 3-5 side characters pov. Multiple characters made the novel's arc unnecessary longer.
This novel is absolutely incredible and unique, unlike anything I have read before. The best part is that the novel just continues to get better and better as the story goes on. The author has taken the genres of the system, apocalypse, supernatural/ sci-fi, and the concepts of superpowers, AI, and advanced tech, and was able to blend them together creating his own unique take that is awesome to read. I recommend this novel to everyone
Hello Author, The grammar quality is good enough to read without issue but the problem is when people are in conversation no emotions conveyed at many or almost all chapters like for example if Eric speaks or his friends speaks they just say like amber said-----eric said------bro please write the emotion by which they are speaking like if they smiling while speaking or indifferently or coldly oe sadly like anything bro please just add the emotion just because of this i had to drop this 3 times then again continue after sometimes of there are any improvements.please author do improve it.Yours loyal reader.
Writing quality is above average, story development is predictable and there was some plothole probably to rewrite, character design is meh because not choosing intelligence since this world INT also equal to IQ, supposedly slowed down enemy movement and increased thought process to do multiple spells at once... but dexterity...makes him have faster thought process which is illogical...the stat to real life application is bad... if MC become genius because INT is high then i might quit.
The story is good. The only problem is that the MC is really really really really unlikable. He’s dumb, arrogant, he has an extremely short fuse, he is not creative, he is not brave (though not specially cowardly) and half the character development goes something like this: “Uh, I didn’t blow up over some trash talk, I grew up as a person.” 5min later… tries to start a fistfight and insults a dozen people over one disrespectful comment. And finally in one of the last chapters he goes all “woe is me” mixed with a “me against the world” mentality and goes all edgy, though idk if it was another temper tantrum or if he is like this now. Sorry had to vent.
loving book but school tournament makes no sense in the world u built. in a country where they fighting a war against another country and one against monsters the importance of getting best talent on surface would be important. i mean obvisouly corruption would obvisouly be a factor. however by having the tournament be random the school took a risk of top student eliminating each other as shown by adam and mcs friends fight. the tournament should of been structured so that the top students didnt compet against each other in first round and since there was 22 spots 2 of the spots could of went to a losers bracket in case of a powerful student being eliminated by another powerful student early on.
Revelar spoiler
Beautifoul scenarios, compelling storyline, great MC growth, unforgettable descriptions. Best novel ever.
ok I am not leaving a bad review but I have to ask I listen to the books on here with audio and your use of ----------------- hurts my ears I get you are trying to so that you are talking about the system window but I think if you use only one - the point can be seen I wish to see this. anyways thanks for a great book don't drop it keep writing have a great day.
In my opinion, only problem in your novel is that it is very slow . if you solve this problem, then this story has very high potential . You should also focus more on Worldbuilding too .
Very good story, very good ideas and with a good world background. But I'm going to have to stop reading this novel since it seems very slow and I'm a little bored that the story doesn't progress. There are many chapters for the same topic, which makes it long and boring. But all in all I liked the story and it is a good start for an author with little experience.[img=recommend]
The authors book provides a great amount of context of the environment with plenty of information. However, his obsession to provide every character their own two page dialogue and Background really ruins the entertainment from the Main story. IDk why he bothers when the reader know's they're a dead Man, EX investigator, and the nightclub kid (Achim). However, this is an Author who Clearly loves to write. I hope to read more of his work as he Improves. P.S Author... you forgot to mention the brain crystal from Martin Hais in chapter 290. (MC Never absorbed it in future chapters)
It's good but I'm gon drop it, cuz it's too slow paced, and I don't have the patience to read it. Even if the pace will pick up, I don't want to wait...so yeah. But give it a try if you want.
My only problem is that, sometimes I forgot who is the mc here due to multiple pov. 😄😄😄
Totally love the novel so far & I am sad I cannot keep binge-reading. It has a different take on the apocalypse genre and I love the plot so far. Great character development and insight into the emotions of the characters not just the MC. The only thing I really really hope for is for the MC starts his Romance/Harem soon because it's pathetic when a girl like Amber shows all the signs of liking him but he is too dense to do anything about it. I pray this novel doesn't go down the dense, unaware, afraid-of-talking-to-girls route cause that would ruin a great story. I can't wait for more chapters bro so keep up the great work
Thanks Everyone for having given my book a shot. If possible leave a review :D[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
Writing quality: Top notch. Few if any errors that pull you out of the story. Story Development: Absolutely splendid read, you have a bullied kid, parental problems, PTSD/trauma, then coming across a "Opportunity" this leads to its own set of problems but incredible potential positives outcomes. To a solid bit of foreshadowing of something major occuring in the story early on and gradually picking up into a grand finale of sorts. Can't imagine what we will be getting to experience in this story few hundred chapters from now. Character Design: Solid work here across the board. Consistently expressing other characters and how the occurrences in the story in itself effected them. Showing growth in the main character early on and being consistent with it. Main character isn't broken op and still has enemies but clearly you can see what his growth rate will be like in the future. Updating stability: I want to see 14 chapters a week. I personally read extremely fast. So I'm generally picky here. And I like basically being able to get on every day and getting to read a solid 2 chapters from Novels I am really enjoying. Meh I'm needy/greedy when it comes to good literature can't help it. I just read most of the chapters in burst and caught up to the most recent chapter so I can't judge on this and so forth leaving it at 5 stars until further notice. World Background: Overall solid, the author gives good description of environments that the "present" story is taking place in from schools, training areas, bedrooms and more and has also included this in combat scenes in the use of weapons or defenses. The story has gone over some history but it's been here and there for me, this is probably not what most people will think, it's just what I personally would prefer a bit more in this one specific aspect. Can't help it I'm needy. More I have to read of this the better. Total: 5 out of 5 in each category until further notice. It's definitely caught my eye and I'm now paying attention to it's uploads. Very enjoyable read that makes me want more. To see what's coming next. Final Verdict will be given when the author reaches 1,000 chapters or the novel is otherwise abandoned.
This novel has a great concept but why isn’t there more technological aspect? It’s called “Biological SUPER COMPUTER!” Meaning that it will deal with biology along with technology. But so far, there isn’t any forum of technology being used/created. It’s already 200 chapters in and the MC barely had any character advancement; still sorta rules by his emotion; severely lack intelligence; and far too naïve. A The MC believes he’s grow and smart to make sound decisions, but so far it’s as if he’s being led by Circumstances, always on the defensive. Hopefully this story will improve; but we will see! Author make sure you add more technology to this novel. There’s so much that could be done!
I still don't understand why people learn to fight with hand to hand combat and weapons instead of fully utilize their brain crystal and mc (I get it he's 15) is the worse in term of power usages I mean just keep throwing them trees will ya
I like the story so far. However, I have problems with chaoter 265. Why is there romance included?! It just makes things worse, especially when there is no romance tag.
Revelar spoiler author dont forget to make it so that every girl who shows interest like emily and amber will be his future wives
good story by quick question how do I view auxiliary volumes on my phone
Very good world building. But I am 100 chapter in and barely anything has happened. I have to drop it just cause of how slow paced it is. No one cares about all these side characters.
can anyone tell me what this ESIGMAD1 and other ranks like this means what is the proper order of these ranks
While the story is interesting and the premise is good, it has very little editing which makes it difficult to read. Additionally, while the author does take feedback, which is easy to notice after reading 200+ chapters, the older chapter are a mess and require significant rewrite. Essentially, while there is definitely improvement in the writing style, there are very few people that will be able to reach that point before giving up, which is the main reason this story will never see the top lists. For example, the other switches between story-lines between several chapters and you lose focus on their main character, while being forced to focus on characters the readers just aren't able to connect with because they disappear within a few chapter and have very little connection to the main story. While it was fixed, it still remains as a part of the story and is very difficult to gloss over. The only advise I can give to the author a complete rewrite for the first 200 chapters with serious editing and removal of filler chapters.
I’m really liking this novel so far, the power system is quite good, and the supercomputer brain AI is a nice take, however the constant change of POV is the only downfall… the back and forth between MC and the military is really jarring, and I end up skipping most of the military chapters because there’s no incentive to care what’s happening to these irrelevant side characters. I’ll keep reading in hopes it gets better as I’m only on chapter 200
Hello author! I would like to know if there is ntr in the work (I hope not) or yuri (I hope not). I would also like to know how many girls are currently in the harem, and if there are any yanderes... please answer me.
Love the story but for the love god dear author can you move the fights faster cause I’m reading the chase chapters and it feels like the fights has been going on for a week. Other than that great story.
It was good but too many POVs, It would be great if the author focuses only on mc or 3-5 side characters pov. Multiple characters made the novel's arc unnecessary longer.
This novel is absolutely incredible and unique, unlike anything I have read before. The best part is that the novel just continues to get better and better as the story goes on. The author has taken the genres of the system, apocalypse, supernatural/ sci-fi, and the concepts of superpowers, AI, and advanced tech, and was able to blend them together creating his own unique take that is awesome to read. I recommend this novel to everyone
Hello Author, The grammar quality is good enough to read without issue but the problem is when people are in conversation no emotions conveyed at many or almost all chapters like for example if Eric speaks or his friends speaks they just say like amber said-----eric said------bro please write the emotion by which they are speaking like if they smiling while speaking or indifferently or coldly oe sadly like anything bro please just add the emotion just because of this i had to drop this 3 times then again continue after sometimes of there are any improvements.please author do improve it.Yours loyal reader.
Writing quality is above average, story development is predictable and there was some plothole probably to rewrite, character design is meh because not choosing intelligence since this world INT also equal to IQ, supposedly slowed down enemy movement and increased thought process to do multiple spells at once... but dexterity...makes him have faster thought process which is illogical...the stat to real life application is bad... if MC become genius because INT is high then i might quit.
The story is good. The only problem is that the MC is really really really really unlikable. He’s dumb, arrogant, he has an extremely short fuse, he is not creative, he is not brave (though not specially cowardly) and half the character development goes something like this: “Uh, I didn’t blow up over some trash talk, I grew up as a person.” 5min later… tries to start a fistfight and insults a dozen people over one disrespectful comment. And finally in one of the last chapters he goes all “woe is me” mixed with a “me against the world” mentality and goes all edgy, though idk if it was another temper tantrum or if he is like this now. Sorry had to vent.
loving book but school tournament makes no sense in the world u built. in a country where they fighting a war against another country and one against monsters the importance of getting best talent on surface would be important. i mean obvisouly corruption would obvisouly be a factor. however by having the tournament be random the school took a risk of top student eliminating each other as shown by adam and mcs friends fight. the tournament should of been structured so that the top students didnt compet against each other in first round and since there was 22 spots 2 of the spots could of went to a losers bracket in case of a powerful student being eliminated by another powerful student early on.
Revelar spoiler Beautifoul scenarios, compelling storyline, great MC growth, unforgettable descriptions. Best novel ever.
ok I am not leaving a bad review but I have to ask I listen to the books on here with audio and your use of ----------------- hurts my ears I get you are trying to so that you are talking about the system window but I think if you use only one - the point can be seen I wish to see this. anyways thanks for a great book don't drop it keep writing have a great day.
In my opinion, only problem in your novel is that it is very slow . if you solve this problem, then this story has very high potential . You should also focus more on Worldbuilding too .
Very good story, very good ideas and with a good world background. But I'm going to have to stop reading this novel since it seems very slow and I'm a little bored that the story doesn't progress. There are many chapters for the same topic, which makes it long and boring. But all in all I liked the story and it is a good start for an author with little experience.[img=recommend]
The authors book provides a great amount of context of the environment with plenty of information. However, his obsession to provide every character their own two page dialogue and Background really ruins the entertainment from the Main story. IDk why he bothers when the reader know's they're a dead Man, EX investigator, and the nightclub kid (Achim). However, this is an Author who Clearly loves to write. I hope to read more of his work as he Improves. P.S Author... you forgot to mention the brain crystal from Martin Hais in chapter 290. (MC Never absorbed it in future chapters)
It's good but I'm gon drop it, cuz it's too slow paced, and I don't have the patience to read it. Even if the pace will pick up, I don't want to wait...so yeah. But give it a try if you want.
My only problem is that, sometimes I forgot who is the mc here due to multiple pov. 😄😄😄
Totally love the novel so far & I am sad I cannot keep binge-reading. It has a different take on the apocalypse genre and I love the plot so far. Great character development and insight into the emotions of the characters not just the MC. The only thing I really really hope for is for the MC starts his Romance/Harem soon because it's pathetic when a girl like Amber shows all the signs of liking him but he is too dense to do anything about it. I pray this novel doesn't go down the dense, unaware, afraid-of-talking-to-girls route cause that would ruin a great story. I can't wait for more chapters bro so keep up the great work
Thanks Everyone for having given my book a shot. If possible leave a review :D[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]