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Very good book. Read up to 800 chapters. I advise readers to not read the book if you like short arcs or stories as the plots in this book are very detailed and last many chapters. The storyline sets up the plot for the future as every word in the book is intentional and some things may be confusing will have a greater meaning in the future.
Love this book or series or whatever it is, the concept is amazing, I would play the hell out of a game like this, the system is super great, first few chapters are okay but I read he’s redoing them to fix some stuff or has done it but that just shows how frequently they update. It drags a smidge at times and the world and story is so vast that at other times things get put on the back burner and not touched on for a long time but all in all I really love it and if I was to make an MMO, this would be the blueprint I’d want to use.
I am giving my review after read over 1000 chapters in the story, I would first request new readers or those who wish to read this story to be patient, you won't see improvement of power level, fame,politics, status,etc. general concept of a fantasy society at short interval, but with time you will see improvement that you won't notice, second, I would say thanks to author to maintain this level of updating stability, which is very rare, so readers generally don't get cut out of story, third, the route of story is very interesting that it may take time to get used to but once did, you will enjoy it everyday, fourth, it may not be more important of all things but the setting due to the protagonist is being shown cautious or paranoid in his actions, example would you set out to kill lvl 100 boss when at 1 lvl, fifth, all left to express my gratitude to author for bringing such a story, thank you.
I've always been bad with reviews, so I'm just gonna say that it is worth reading. [img=Relaxed][img=Relaxed][img=Moneybags]
[Basic Shamanic Summoning Arts] refers to a foundational skill that allows the user to tap into the unique summoning abilities traditionally practiced by orcs. These summoning arts were initially modified by the Sage of Erudition to suit human summoners, creating a more accessible version of orcish summoning techniques. The skill enables the user to summon creatures known as Orcbeasts, which are beasts specifically trained and tamed by orcs to aid them in battle. Key features of [Basic Shamanic Summoning Arts] include: Summoning Orcbeasts: The skill allows the user to summon Orcbeasts, such as the Arx'has Boar mentioned, to accompany them in combat. These summoned creatures scale in power based on the user's stats at the time of summoning. Control Options: The user has the option to either directly control every movement of the summoned Orcbeasts or give them simple orders that they will follow without hesitation. This flexibility allows for tactical adaptation during battles. Summoning Limit: The skill has a limit on the number of Orcbeasts that can be summoned simultaneously, with a maximum of two Orcbeasts allowed at a time. Cooldown and Cost: There is a cooldown period of 1 minute between summonings, and the cost of summoning depends on the specific Orcbeast being summoned. Overall, [Basic Shamanic Summoning Arts] provides the user with the ability to summon powerful allies from the orcish tradition, enhancing their capabilities in combat situations.
4+3+3+4+3)/5=3.4 a pretty good novel to be honest. relatively fun read. good moments between characters. but some events just DRRRRRAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSGG out! the forging events tend to take more chapters than I'm interested in. lately, the inheritance Arc has been/is SUPER long! so long that I'd rather stockpile chapters than keep up with updates. so good novel. but some might say it's info dump heavy.
Author please tell I really want to read this but I dislike video game novel please tell me it the game will merge with the real world please respond
Author, I’m curious, does the mc hate Vera or something? How come she is left out of everything? He doesn’t say goodbye to her, and hasn’t added her to his friends list despite being a person he interacts with quite often?
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mediocre... at the beginning the MC talks about how he wants to gain reputation and become stronger, in order to get people to join his future organization to win the fight they lost in his past life. then he proceeds to be hyper-paranoid about people not thinking he is a noob. what is the point of having past life experiences and knowledge if you are too scared to use it??? the author mentions that this scaredy cat, paranoid mindset is part of who he was at some point in his past life but there are no details surrounding it, it seems to just be said in passing. there is no character development in the first 125 chapters, the only thing is the mc is strong for his level that's it, he hides everything else. it's like he is living his first life ready to fail all over again. I hope it gets better but it isn't looking optimistic...
I only got through 12 chapters. So take the review for what it’s worth. The mc of this story is supposed to be someone who is reborn into the game world prior to the game going live. The mc is someone who was involved in the end battle between the game company and the resistance. This premise sets the character up as being a high level character who should know a lot about the game. What we get however is someone who seems to be fumbling around without a clear goal. Don’t worry though because almost every chapter he wants to plan what he is going to do. This story has a similar premise to legendary mechanic but unfortunately doesn’t hit the mark to keep readers interested. Many chapter comments say “boring”. I have to agree and it is primarily because the mc is bumbling around like someone who is playing the game for the first time in their life with a pro friend giving him hints on things to make his life easier like how to develop skills instead of being a veteran player himself. I had high hopes but I’m gonna pass on the rest of this one.
I really like the idea and concept of the novel so far up to which chapter I have read(278). Still there are a lot of inconsistencies in the novel. I feel. Firstly there are many unnecessary information in most of the chapters taking up a lot of unnecessary words which could be used somewhere else. Also, a proper world background is missing, with information here and there that does not make much sense. It is better to use an extra chapter before the novel begins like some novels here do, where they provide a general outlook to the whole world background. It will no doubt contain some spoilers but it will help the reader understand the world more. I suggest providing a chapter before the novel starts which consists of information regarding the power ranks and the levels they relate to. Also a chapter on the world background of the world the mc is in currently. It will help all readers going into the novel. I hope this suggestion maybe helpful a little.
I enjoy when a story isn't rushed and when it's well written, and these certainly apply to this story. It is eloquently worded and it spends much time on describing the interactions between characters as well as the thoughts of the main character. These are both the book's greatest strenths and weaknesses in my opinion. To illustrate this I will write two lines essentially describing the same thing: -"He could not help but allow the lurking smile at the back of his mind grow on his face as he expressed the feeling his thoughts gave him" -"He smiled at the thought" I enjoy these lengthy descriptions... but not when the book is full of them. Most of the descriptions are like the first option, and I got tired of it pretty quickly. The phrase "could not help but" is also unnecessarily abused to an almost hilarious degree. While I certainly cannot fault the author on their english, I wish they would consider the time to use these dragged out ways to say things that could be short and concise. Which brings me to my second point, the pacing. Dear lord is the pacing slow, which I also enjoy at times, but only if we get some action in between. Those who have read the book may be thinking "wasn't the monster wave enough action?" and to that I say, it should have been half as lengthy and have more fighting rather than pointless dialogue. Also, the monsters are literally only described as that, 'monsters'. Nothing is said about how the regular monsters look in the first couple of chapters of the fight. I'd say, give the book a chance, those of the same opinion as me regarding pacing and language will quickly realize it isn't for them, and for the less picky, I believe you will enjoy it. It certainly isn't bad by any means, but I will not be reading more than 60 chapters of it. Hope you can take some of the criticism to heart and improve author, flaws aside I think you have a good story in you.
Overall I would say give this novel a read. I was gonna address some things, but the author has already put out an updated review of their own addressing those issues. All the gripes I had were addressed in their update, so I only have positive things to say here. The concept and unique bits about this novel set it apart from other mmorpg releases. I could mention them all but you will realize a lot of them in the first few chapters. Give it a shot.
It is unfortunate but the fact that the entire world is a game takes the fun out of it for me… everything is decent enough though from writing to pace atleast on the first chapter, expressly for Webnovel so if anyone reads this and doesn’t care about my issue with it then most definitely read it.
I could not help but to make this review. I didn't read the other reviews yet, but im pretty certain im like number 105 making this joke. Anyways, good book so far :D
Read to chapter 112. I came to it hoping for a slightly worse legendary mechanic. I felt disappointed. The writing is good, no errors or anything, and I think the story has some interesting things to it, but I can't stand the MC. In particular, his indecisiveness on hiding or showing his power. It also feels like the MC is wasting a lot of his time and throwing away his advantage. He also doesn't seem to use his knowledge from his previous life a lot.
I just realised why I love this book so much. it's basically a mix between The Legendary Mechanic and Realm of Myths and legends which are 2 of the best books I've read. but author please stop saying "could not help but" every 5 sentences I beg you
2 chapters in. The Writing is bland like a soup of water. The characters are more dead than alive. Reading feels like having a joke explained to you halfway through the joke itself. @TrueDawn, pls fix.
Carbon copy of the legendary Mechanic series. Same world building, same starting. Basically a medieval world while the legendary Mechanic started in an urban world. Anyway if it's good like TLM then I have no complaints.
this by far one my absolute favorite books with story that pulls you into an an immersive and rich world. the character has a great and interesting path that leads him to gradually get stronger and stronger.
Honestly, all I can say about this novel is that the MC is a complete and utter hyper-paranoid idiot. We're constantly told how awesome he is and that he pretty much reached the peak of the game in the past, but he hardly shows it in the novel. He's constantly making himself mediocre so that no one takes a closer look at him yet he doesn't care that the Blacksmith's Guild gets a look at his 1st class and will send it to headquarters? Very inconsistent. He also reacts like a newbie to everything for the sake of the reader and it gets old fast. Also, I get that this is meant to be a VRMMO where the players develop the world, but it feels like all the NPCs have been whacked with the idiot stick a few hundred times. The system also makes virtually no sense in my opinion. It seems like the author ran with the first cool idea he had in his head and didn't bother to think of any of the implications. Only reason the review score isn't lower is because I never reached the current chapter so I have no opinion on the update stability. Honestly, I don't usually read VRMMO novels because I think they usually would suck as games and think they would be better served as isekai/regular LitRPG and this novel did nothing to dissuade me from this dislike. If anyone reading this novel wants to read a story where the MC goes back to the beginning and exploits it for all it's worth in an actual good way, read Night Ranger instead of this.
novel would be better if there was not a bunch of could not help but's in every chapter to the point someone made a comment with a counter that reaches 150 in 40 chapters. Also you have to force yourself to pretend that the mc is not a reincarnator to read it because the author apparently forgets that and shows the mc amazed or intrigued by information he should already know or he goes, oh yea I forgot that conveniently when it's something that no one would ever forget.
it's a solid novel, so far my biggest gripe is even though this is supposed to be like a reincarnation regression novel, it really doesn't feel like it is and the novel feels like it lacks a sense of direction half the time despite me knowing what the end goal of a certain arc/ situation is. other then that I'm always game for solid updates a decent main character and some solid writing quality itself
Okay, the MMORPG is a little overdone by now. However, the way the author approached this is something I haven't seen so far. The concept of this novel is great. Now for the criticism, the writing quality is good. Same with the update stability, but when it comes to the story? I kind of hate it, it's an MMORPG in the title. Now with the synopsis combined with the first chapter, I thought players were going to actually be a part of the story. I'm assuming it is, but if it's not the way you opened up the book is pretty much clickbait at this point. I think you should rewrite the synopsis as well as chapter one, and you should also re-write the title to reflect the mc living as an NPC. Now if that's not the main focus of the book, then overall this is terrible, there is way too much filler, the pacing of the book is far too slow, and I don't feel connected to these NPCs you're spending dozens of chapters developing with. Writing quality 4/5 Updates 5/5 Story 3/5 Charecter 4/5
Too many info dumps and useless paragraphs. This is too tedious to read, I should drop this after the first 5 chapters, but keep trying it. I really drop this after the tide. I can't help it, just too long and tedious.
author how come earth got destroyed when they fought in the game and how come they could fight against the admins? .....................................
I could not help but be a bit disappointed by this novel. It felt so good at first, but I could not help but notice that he feels like a complete noob at times, when he was supposed to be a pro who survived until the end. I also could not help but notice that in the first chapter, it was mentioned that he could rememeber anything if he just focused on it. I could not help but notice that he seemed oblivious to things that he should rememeber, or atleast have an idea of. An example being when he retrieved the pain relief pills through the menu. He was shocked they materialized infront of him, when after literal years of gameplay, he should have known that would happen for NPC’s. I could not help but notice that the technology tree seems highly limiting.
(This review has been made after I posted Chapter 315.) Hey there. It's been almost six months since I've started writing this novel, so I think it's about due time for me to give another review to this novel from my perspective. Of course, if you take a look at the latest reviews I've gotten, you'd see that a great portion of them say that MC acts incredibly cowardly and newbie-like for someone who has a lot of experience, with some of them even talking about how I rely on a certain phrase a lot of the time (the phrase in question is "could not help but"). From this point onward, there's a possibility that I might spoil a few things about the story, which I would like to apologize in advance for. However, I'll still try my best to not spoil it. First and foremost, let me talk about my reliance on a few key phrases, with the most glaring one you'd find while reading the story is the counter for "could not help but" in the paragraph comments. Then again, there are a few other key phrases I tend to use as a crutch throughout the novel, but let me point out that English is not my first language. Aside from that, I've taken a great portion of the inputs you've given me, which I sincerely appreciate, and have varied my usage of words ever since. From Chapter 200 onwards, rarely has the "could not help but" phrase ever been used. But alas, reviews mentioning it still pop up, so I guess worrying about is useless in the end. Moving on from that, let's talk about the MC's personality at the beginning of the novel. Similar to the active change I've made towards the omission of the usage of certain phrases, I've also taken action towards changing the MC's personality outright at Chapter 115 into something that was more in line with what people expect from someone with a lot of experience. But once again, I still get reviews about how they don't like MC's personality at the beginning and how they call him multiple names under the sun. Believe me when I say I've already taken note of it and that I am planning to rewrite the beginning of the story once I graduate college (which would happen hopefully a few months after I post this review). I'm not oblivious towards MC's personality at the beginning, especially if I know why he acts like that in the first place. In the end, I just wanted to make this review to tell everyone who is reading and who is planning to read this novel a couple of things. For those who have read my novel up to the latest chapter and are continuing to read it, I thank you from the bottom of my heart. And for those who are planning to pick up the book from the title and the synopsis, just keep an open mind. It's part of the reason why I made at least 90 chapters of the novel free, after all. Of course, I'd like it if you get to around Chapter 115 at the very least, but I won't hold it against you if you don't. Once again, I would like to thank everyone who has given me support and constructive criticism of what I've been writing thus far, making me realize that I still have a lot to improve on. I hope you enjoy the journey the novel shall take you on. (This review shall be removed once the beginning of the story has been rewritten to fit the overall narrative better.)
Very good book. Read up to 800 chapters. I advise readers to not read the book if you like short arcs or stories as the plots in this book are very detailed and last many chapters. The storyline sets up the plot for the future as every word in the book is intentional and some things may be confusing will have a greater meaning in the future.
Love this book or series or whatever it is, the concept is amazing, I would play the hell out of a game like this, the system is super great, first few chapters are okay but I read he’s redoing them to fix some stuff or has done it but that just shows how frequently they update. It drags a smidge at times and the world and story is so vast that at other times things get put on the back burner and not touched on for a long time but all in all I really love it and if I was to make an MMO, this would be the blueprint I’d want to use.
I am giving my review after read over 1000 chapters in the story, I would first request new readers or those who wish to read this story to be patient, you won't see improvement of power level, fame,politics, status,etc. general concept of a fantasy society at short interval, but with time you will see improvement that you won't notice, second, I would say thanks to author to maintain this level of updating stability, which is very rare, so readers generally don't get cut out of story, third, the route of story is very interesting that it may take time to get used to but once did, you will enjoy it everyday, fourth, it may not be more important of all things but the setting due to the protagonist is being shown cautious or paranoid in his actions, example would you set out to kill lvl 100 boss when at 1 lvl, fifth, all left to express my gratitude to author for bringing such a story, thank you.
I've always been bad with reviews, so I'm just gonna say that it is worth reading. [img=Relaxed][img=Relaxed][img=Moneybags]
[Basic Shamanic Summoning Arts] refers to a foundational skill that allows the user to tap into the unique summoning abilities traditionally practiced by orcs. These summoning arts were initially modified by the Sage of Erudition to suit human summoners, creating a more accessible version of orcish summoning techniques. The skill enables the user to summon creatures known as Orcbeasts, which are beasts specifically trained and tamed by orcs to aid them in battle. Key features of [Basic Shamanic Summoning Arts] include: Summoning Orcbeasts: The skill allows the user to summon Orcbeasts, such as the Arx'has Boar mentioned, to accompany them in combat. These summoned creatures scale in power based on the user's stats at the time of summoning. Control Options: The user has the option to either directly control every movement of the summoned Orcbeasts or give them simple orders that they will follow without hesitation. This flexibility allows for tactical adaptation during battles. Summoning Limit: The skill has a limit on the number of Orcbeasts that can be summoned simultaneously, with a maximum of two Orcbeasts allowed at a time. Cooldown and Cost: There is a cooldown period of 1 minute between summonings, and the cost of summoning depends on the specific Orcbeast being summoned. Overall, [Basic Shamanic Summoning Arts] provides the user with the ability to summon powerful allies from the orcish tradition, enhancing their capabilities in combat situations.
4+3+3+4+3)/5=3.4 a pretty good novel to be honest. relatively fun read. good moments between characters. but some events just DRRRRRAAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSGG out! the forging events tend to take more chapters than I'm interested in. lately, the inheritance Arc has been/is SUPER long! so long that I'd rather stockpile chapters than keep up with updates. so good novel. but some might say it's info dump heavy.
Author please tell I really want to read this but I dislike video game novel please tell me it the game will merge with the real world please respond
Author, I’m curious, does the mc hate Vera or something? How come she is left out of everything? He doesn’t say goodbye to her, and hasn’t added her to his friends list despite being a person he interacts with quite often?
Revelar spoiler mediocre... at the beginning the MC talks about how he wants to gain reputation and become stronger, in order to get people to join his future organization to win the fight they lost in his past life. then he proceeds to be hyper-paranoid about people not thinking he is a noob. what is the point of having past life experiences and knowledge if you are too scared to use it??? the author mentions that this scaredy cat, paranoid mindset is part of who he was at some point in his past life but there are no details surrounding it, it seems to just be said in passing. there is no character development in the first 125 chapters, the only thing is the mc is strong for his level that's it, he hides everything else. it's like he is living his first life ready to fail all over again. I hope it gets better but it isn't looking optimistic...
I only got through 12 chapters. So take the review for what it’s worth. The mc of this story is supposed to be someone who is reborn into the game world prior to the game going live. The mc is someone who was involved in the end battle between the game company and the resistance. This premise sets the character up as being a high level character who should know a lot about the game. What we get however is someone who seems to be fumbling around without a clear goal. Don’t worry though because almost every chapter he wants to plan what he is going to do. This story has a similar premise to legendary mechanic but unfortunately doesn’t hit the mark to keep readers interested. Many chapter comments say “boring”. I have to agree and it is primarily because the mc is bumbling around like someone who is playing the game for the first time in their life with a pro friend giving him hints on things to make his life easier like how to develop skills instead of being a veteran player himself. I had high hopes but I’m gonna pass on the rest of this one.
I really like the idea and concept of the novel so far up to which chapter I have read(278). Still there are a lot of inconsistencies in the novel. I feel. Firstly there are many unnecessary information in most of the chapters taking up a lot of unnecessary words which could be used somewhere else. Also, a proper world background is missing, with information here and there that does not make much sense. It is better to use an extra chapter before the novel begins like some novels here do, where they provide a general outlook to the whole world background. It will no doubt contain some spoilers but it will help the reader understand the world more. I suggest providing a chapter before the novel starts which consists of information regarding the power ranks and the levels they relate to. Also a chapter on the world background of the world the mc is in currently. It will help all readers going into the novel. I hope this suggestion maybe helpful a little.
I enjoy when a story isn't rushed and when it's well written, and these certainly apply to this story. It is eloquently worded and it spends much time on describing the interactions between characters as well as the thoughts of the main character. These are both the book's greatest strenths and weaknesses in my opinion. To illustrate this I will write two lines essentially describing the same thing: -"He could not help but allow the lurking smile at the back of his mind grow on his face as he expressed the feeling his thoughts gave him" -"He smiled at the thought" I enjoy these lengthy descriptions... but not when the book is full of them. Most of the descriptions are like the first option, and I got tired of it pretty quickly. The phrase "could not help but" is also unnecessarily abused to an almost hilarious degree. While I certainly cannot fault the author on their english, I wish they would consider the time to use these dragged out ways to say things that could be short and concise. Which brings me to my second point, the pacing. Dear lord is the pacing slow, which I also enjoy at times, but only if we get some action in between. Those who have read the book may be thinking "wasn't the monster wave enough action?" and to that I say, it should have been half as lengthy and have more fighting rather than pointless dialogue. Also, the monsters are literally only described as that, 'monsters'. Nothing is said about how the regular monsters look in the first couple of chapters of the fight. I'd say, give the book a chance, those of the same opinion as me regarding pacing and language will quickly realize it isn't for them, and for the less picky, I believe you will enjoy it. It certainly isn't bad by any means, but I will not be reading more than 60 chapters of it. Hope you can take some of the criticism to heart and improve author, flaws aside I think you have a good story in you.
Overall I would say give this novel a read. I was gonna address some things, but the author has already put out an updated review of their own addressing those issues. All the gripes I had were addressed in their update, so I only have positive things to say here. The concept and unique bits about this novel set it apart from other mmorpg releases. I could mention them all but you will realize a lot of them in the first few chapters. Give it a shot.
It is unfortunate but the fact that the entire world is a game takes the fun out of it for me… everything is decent enough though from writing to pace atleast on the first chapter, expressly for Webnovel so if anyone reads this and doesn’t care about my issue with it then most definitely read it.
I could not help but to make this review. I didn't read the other reviews yet, but im pretty certain im like number 105 making this joke. Anyways, good book so far :D
Read to chapter 112. I came to it hoping for a slightly worse legendary mechanic. I felt disappointed. The writing is good, no errors or anything, and I think the story has some interesting things to it, but I can't stand the MC. In particular, his indecisiveness on hiding or showing his power. It also feels like the MC is wasting a lot of his time and throwing away his advantage. He also doesn't seem to use his knowledge from his previous life a lot.
I just realised why I love this book so much. it's basically a mix between The Legendary Mechanic and Realm of Myths and legends which are 2 of the best books I've read. but author please stop saying "could not help but" every 5 sentences I beg you
2 chapters in. The Writing is bland like a soup of water. The characters are more dead than alive. Reading feels like having a joke explained to you halfway through the joke itself. @TrueDawn, pls fix.
Carbon copy of the legendary Mechanic series. Same world building, same starting. Basically a medieval world while the legendary Mechanic started in an urban world. Anyway if it's good like TLM then I have no complaints.
this by far one my absolute favorite books with story that pulls you into an an immersive and rich world. the character has a great and interesting path that leads him to gradually get stronger and stronger.
Honestly, all I can say about this novel is that the MC is a complete and utter hyper-paranoid idiot. We're constantly told how awesome he is and that he pretty much reached the peak of the game in the past, but he hardly shows it in the novel. He's constantly making himself mediocre so that no one takes a closer look at him yet he doesn't care that the Blacksmith's Guild gets a look at his 1st class and will send it to headquarters? Very inconsistent. He also reacts like a newbie to everything for the sake of the reader and it gets old fast. Also, I get that this is meant to be a VRMMO where the players develop the world, but it feels like all the NPCs have been whacked with the idiot stick a few hundred times. The system also makes virtually no sense in my opinion. It seems like the author ran with the first cool idea he had in his head and didn't bother to think of any of the implications. Only reason the review score isn't lower is because I never reached the current chapter so I have no opinion on the update stability. Honestly, I don't usually read VRMMO novels because I think they usually would suck as games and think they would be better served as isekai/regular LitRPG and this novel did nothing to dissuade me from this dislike. If anyone reading this novel wants to read a story where the MC goes back to the beginning and exploits it for all it's worth in an actual good way, read Night Ranger instead of this.
novel would be better if there was not a bunch of could not help but's in every chapter to the point someone made a comment with a counter that reaches 150 in 40 chapters. Also you have to force yourself to pretend that the mc is not a reincarnator to read it because the author apparently forgets that and shows the mc amazed or intrigued by information he should already know or he goes, oh yea I forgot that conveniently when it's something that no one would ever forget.
it's a solid novel, so far my biggest gripe is even though this is supposed to be like a reincarnation regression novel, it really doesn't feel like it is and the novel feels like it lacks a sense of direction half the time despite me knowing what the end goal of a certain arc/ situation is. other then that I'm always game for solid updates a decent main character and some solid writing quality itself
Okay, the MMORPG is a little overdone by now. However, the way the author approached this is something I haven't seen so far. The concept of this novel is great. Now for the criticism, the writing quality is good. Same with the update stability, but when it comes to the story? I kind of hate it, it's an MMORPG in the title. Now with the synopsis combined with the first chapter, I thought players were going to actually be a part of the story. I'm assuming it is, but if it's not the way you opened up the book is pretty much clickbait at this point. I think you should rewrite the synopsis as well as chapter one, and you should also re-write the title to reflect the mc living as an NPC. Now if that's not the main focus of the book, then overall this is terrible, there is way too much filler, the pacing of the book is far too slow, and I don't feel connected to these NPCs you're spending dozens of chapters developing with. Writing quality 4/5 Updates 5/5 Story 3/5 Charecter 4/5
Too many info dumps and useless paragraphs. This is too tedious to read, I should drop this after the first 5 chapters, but keep trying it. I really drop this after the tide. I can't help it, just too long and tedious.
author how come earth got destroyed when they fought in the game and how come they could fight against the admins? .....................................
I could not help but be a bit disappointed by this novel. It felt so good at first, but I could not help but notice that he feels like a complete noob at times, when he was supposed to be a pro who survived until the end. I also could not help but notice that in the first chapter, it was mentioned that he could rememeber anything if he just focused on it. I could not help but notice that he seemed oblivious to things that he should rememeber, or atleast have an idea of. An example being when he retrieved the pain relief pills through the menu. He was shocked they materialized infront of him, when after literal years of gameplay, he should have known that would happen for NPC’s. I could not help but notice that the technology tree seems highly limiting.
(This review has been made after I posted Chapter 315.) Hey there. It's been almost six months since I've started writing this novel, so I think it's about due time for me to give another review to this novel from my perspective. Of course, if you take a look at the latest reviews I've gotten, you'd see that a great portion of them say that MC acts incredibly cowardly and newbie-like for someone who has a lot of experience, with some of them even talking about how I rely on a certain phrase a lot of the time (the phrase in question is "could not help but"). From this point onward, there's a possibility that I might spoil a few things about the story, which I would like to apologize in advance for. However, I'll still try my best to not spoil it. First and foremost, let me talk about my reliance on a few key phrases, with the most glaring one you'd find while reading the story is the counter for "could not help but" in the paragraph comments. Then again, there are a few other key phrases I tend to use as a crutch throughout the novel, but let me point out that English is not my first language. Aside from that, I've taken a great portion of the inputs you've given me, which I sincerely appreciate, and have varied my usage of words ever since. From Chapter 200 onwards, rarely has the "could not help but" phrase ever been used. But alas, reviews mentioning it still pop up, so I guess worrying about is useless in the end. Moving on from that, let's talk about the MC's personality at the beginning of the novel. Similar to the active change I've made towards the omission of the usage of certain phrases, I've also taken action towards changing the MC's personality outright at Chapter 115 into something that was more in line with what people expect from someone with a lot of experience. But once again, I still get reviews about how they don't like MC's personality at the beginning and how they call him multiple names under the sun. Believe me when I say I've already taken note of it and that I am planning to rewrite the beginning of the story once I graduate college (which would happen hopefully a few months after I post this review). I'm not oblivious towards MC's personality at the beginning, especially if I know why he acts like that in the first place. In the end, I just wanted to make this review to tell everyone who is reading and who is planning to read this novel a couple of things. For those who have read my novel up to the latest chapter and are continuing to read it, I thank you from the bottom of my heart. And for those who are planning to pick up the book from the title and the synopsis, just keep an open mind. It's part of the reason why I made at least 90 chapters of the novel free, after all. Of course, I'd like it if you get to around Chapter 115 at the very least, but I won't hold it against you if you don't. Once again, I would like to thank everyone who has given me support and constructive criticism of what I've been writing thus far, making me realize that I still have a lot to improve on. I hope you enjoy the journey the novel shall take you on. (This review shall be removed once the beginning of the story has been rewritten to fit the overall narrative better.)