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La gramática es excelente. La actualización es lenta. La historia es narrada casi siempre desde un punto de vista de tercera persona. Los diálogos entre personajes son muy pocos, incluso en algunos capítulos ni diálogos hay. Los personajes no están profundizados, no hay buen desarrollo, no hay detalle, es nombrar al personaje, mencionar su edad y altura del MC y nada más. Falta casi total de emoción en los personajes. El fondo o el escenario es igual de superficial que la misma historia. En resumen, otro fanfic mediocre de Modern Family.
This is pretty good and enjoyable enough to read here is how i would make it better.First i have NO idea what the MC looks like i know hes kinda tall but after some time skips you never tell us how tall he is. Then there is a part where he asks his mom how he looks in an outfit. But you give us no description of it. You say he had his charm increase but you dont tell us how he looks. Its very bad that we dont know what the color of our MC hair even is.Next the novel needs to go more indepth in description of the world in the last chapter it says he went to pick up gigi but doesn't say he went in a car doesn't tell whos car or what kind of car. Then the updates. Its currently been 9 months im guessing this is dropped but i put this here incase you continue.
Well... The grammar starts out terrible, gets a bit better later on. The story ends more or less when the plot starts, the whole thing becomes a copy paste of the script of the episodes, you can easily tell this even if you don't watch MF as the writing style changes completely. There is only Basketball, nothing else. It feels like the author is in a rush to move the timeline through. While it is past the point of mattering, I have to say that author should've done a Modern Family type writing. Something happens the family or those involved in the subject shows their reactions or meanings behind their actions in an entertaining way.
amazing fanfic , smoothest one I saw of the modern family ones , story doesn't feel forced ; though the wishes had no place in the story , he didn't have to be a genius and he was good in basketball even in has last life . I also really enjoyed seeing Gigi , though I wished we had seen her playing volley ball like she did in real life . I implore author to continue writing , hoping another wave of inspiration hits .
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hey........ you dead????? [img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why]
i quite like this fic . but after author changes his/her writing style in arc 2 its kinda throw me up. its like different person who write that. if u curious author use () for describing something like (slam the door) or ( decided to eat) something like that. i hope author changes his writing style back . despite that i like the story thus far and he seems upload some chapter today i hope author can get the motivation back to write this fic again cos i want to see mc in NBA scenes -megane-
pls update more chapters[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
So I'm only leaving a review cuz I almost lost my breath reading this novels title (Rofl). And the novels rating seems promising so Imma read it. My review can be skipped don't bother reading this.
I like this fic actually I like all the modern family first that I'm reading but this is the first that really made me look at them.
Please don't drop, for one time i found a good fanfic that isn't cringe and the mc has an actual personality
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doing a goodjob here , keep it up . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
it's good, update more............ .........................................................................................................
The biggest problem with the novel is that the author isn’t writing a story but a recap. He tells you what is happening with no dialogs, no emotions, no nothing. I think the author needs to watch some videos about ‘Show don’t Tell’ because right now he is telling evyrithing to the point that is really boring to read. Honestly, some chapters reads like the timeline that i use to not getting lost when i write. I don’t know if it is a lack of book reading, the author being to young or just laziness, but you need to stop doing recaps. Anyway, i think the novels idea is great, i think that you could use what you had written as guide to actually make a story. I’m not joking when i said that they look like a recap, some paragraphs are so condensed that i could probably make like 10 chapters or even a whole arc out of them. There are great videos tutorials online. I will keep reading this and hope to see you improve, the first step for writing is start writing and you are already doing it, now is about making your craft better. Cheers author and good writing journey.
Best modern family fanfiction. I know people keep complaining about the English but if you want perfect English books then don't read free stuff😎😎😁
I love this masterpiece! I love the pairing between Nate and Gigi, there are so cute! I just can't get enough of this please update more author.
Please Upload the chapters regularly. It's one of the best ff I've read so far so please. More more more more more more more more more more more more....... We Want More............
Hi, i really like this. Hope u continue. Thanks very much. 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
So far this has been an amazing modern family story. It describes the characters and their interactions without being forced and it also does well to balance the system and his personal efforts
Good fanfiction. I need to write enough to give a review so jekskdbxkflekenekdkdkfkfkfkfkfkdkwowl2oxicjckrldkckxlekfixkdkdlrbrkcoeltbtkrlrkd
this is a good novel I hope you don't drop it ==============================================================================================
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Kkkkkeed and he said that oooooo you can see his tweets in my profile too I just wanted you guys in there and you guys did enriched djxyd dndi dvd dish’s didisysjs skids d did d d Jsushsjd n ndkxhdbd didusgdb dodidhdb dkdjdhd. No bdmd It’s great super great
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La gramática es excelente. La actualización es lenta. La historia es narrada casi siempre desde un punto de vista de tercera persona. Los diálogos entre personajes son muy pocos, incluso en algunos capítulos ni diálogos hay. Los personajes no están profundizados, no hay buen desarrollo, no hay detalle, es nombrar al personaje, mencionar su edad y altura del MC y nada más. Falta casi total de emoción en los personajes. El fondo o el escenario es igual de superficial que la misma historia. En resumen, otro fanfic mediocre de Modern Family.
This is pretty good and enjoyable enough to read here is how i would make it better.First i have NO idea what the MC looks like i know hes kinda tall but after some time skips you never tell us how tall he is. Then there is a part where he asks his mom how he looks in an outfit. But you give us no description of it. You say he had his charm increase but you dont tell us how he looks. Its very bad that we dont know what the color of our MC hair even is.Next the novel needs to go more indepth in description of the world in the last chapter it says he went to pick up gigi but doesn't say he went in a car doesn't tell whos car or what kind of car. Then the updates. Its currently been 9 months im guessing this is dropped but i put this here incase you continue.
Well... The grammar starts out terrible, gets a bit better later on. The story ends more or less when the plot starts, the whole thing becomes a copy paste of the script of the episodes, you can easily tell this even if you don't watch MF as the writing style changes completely. There is only Basketball, nothing else. It feels like the author is in a rush to move the timeline through. While it is past the point of mattering, I have to say that author should've done a Modern Family type writing. Something happens the family or those involved in the subject shows their reactions or meanings behind their actions in an entertaining way.
amazing fanfic , smoothest one I saw of the modern family ones , story doesn't feel forced ; though the wishes had no place in the story , he didn't have to be a genius and he was good in basketball even in has last life . I also really enjoyed seeing Gigi , though I wished we had seen her playing volley ball like she did in real life . I implore author to continue writing , hoping another wave of inspiration hits .
Revelar spoiler hey........ you dead????? [img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why][img=Why]
i quite like this fic . but after author changes his/her writing style in arc 2 its kinda throw me up. its like different person who write that. if u curious author use () for describing something like (slam the door) or ( decided to eat) something like that. i hope author changes his writing style back . despite that i like the story thus far and he seems upload some chapter today i hope author can get the motivation back to write this fic again cos i want to see mc in NBA scenes -megane-
pls update more chapters[img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
So I'm only leaving a review cuz I almost lost my breath reading this novels title (Rofl). And the novels rating seems promising so Imma read it. My review can be skipped don't bother reading this.
I like this fic actually I like all the modern family first that I'm reading but this is the first that really made me look at them.
Please don't drop, for one time i found a good fanfic that isn't cringe and the mc has an actual personality
update.................................................................................................................................................
doing a goodjob here , keep it up . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
it's good, update more............ .........................................................................................................
The biggest problem with the novel is that the author isn’t writing a story but a recap. He tells you what is happening with no dialogs, no emotions, no nothing. I think the author needs to watch some videos about ‘Show don’t Tell’ because right now he is telling evyrithing to the point that is really boring to read. Honestly, some chapters reads like the timeline that i use to not getting lost when i write. I don’t know if it is a lack of book reading, the author being to young or just laziness, but you need to stop doing recaps. Anyway, i think the novels idea is great, i think that you could use what you had written as guide to actually make a story. I’m not joking when i said that they look like a recap, some paragraphs are so condensed that i could probably make like 10 chapters or even a whole arc out of them. There are great videos tutorials online. I will keep reading this and hope to see you improve, the first step for writing is start writing and you are already doing it, now is about making your craft better. Cheers author and good writing journey.
Best modern family fanfiction. I know people keep complaining about the English but if you want perfect English books then don't read free stuff😎😎😁
I love this masterpiece! I love the pairing between Nate and Gigi, there are so cute! I just can't get enough of this please update more author.
Please Upload the chapters regularly. It's one of the best ff I've read so far so please. More more more more more more more more more more more more....... We Want More............
Hi, i really like this. Hope u continue. Thanks very much. 😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁😁
So far this has been an amazing modern family story. It describes the characters and their interactions without being forced and it also does well to balance the system and his personal efforts
Good fanfiction. I need to write enough to give a review so jekskdbxkflekenekdkdkfkfkfkfkfkdkwowl2oxicjckrldkckxlekfixkdkdlrbrkcoeltbtkrlrkd
this is a good novel I hope you don't drop it ==============================================================================================
-----‐-----------------‐-----------..........................................................................................••••••••••••••••••• please update more chapters and don't you dare think of leaving it incomplete review:: a good webnovel good story interesting topic modern family fanfiction
Kkkkkeed and he said that oooooo you can see his tweets in my profile too I just wanted you guys in there and you guys did enriched djxyd dndi dvd dish’s didisysjs skids d did d d Jsushsjd n ndkxhdbd didusgdb dodidhdb dkdjdhd. No bdmd It’s great super great
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