Harry Potter and the Fractured Dragon

LV 4

monke6

it started off decently, but the problem is that its too slow paced- an example would be that theres too much chapters for each day, so we're barely seeing any character progression and we have no idea of his past, which is the biggest problem seeing as hes describing his monster inside of him yet we have no idea why hes like that or what his mission is that he has to do if he wants to live.

LV 4

J2407

Can you pass this FF to Scribble Hub and also continue there, what webnovel have done to force us to download the app and no consider a lot of us use laptops or PC that are no compatible is just stupid.

LV 4

MarliNebula

I’ll be real; this is my first review on a novel. First 42 chap will be introducing the Mc, his family and how his personality is. For me i like a slow paced novel since it lets me relax and enjoy it. Author mentioned Mc will go to Hogwarts on the 42 chapter so just review is for the people who like face pace novels since this isn’t for you i guess. Great novel brother Author🫡❤️

LV 4

FlamePhoenix283

Once upon a time in a faraway land, there was a tiny kingdom. Peaceful, prosperous and rich in romance and tradition. Here in a stately chateau, there lived a widowed gentleman and his little daughter, Cinderella. Although he was a kind and devoted father, and gave his beloved child every luxury and comfort, yet he felt she needed a mother's care. And then he married again, choosing for his second wife, a woman of good family with two daughters just Cinderella's age, by name, Anastasia and Drizella. It was upon the untimely death of this good man, however, that the stepmother's true nature was revealed…cold, cruel and bitterly jealous of Cinderella's charm and beauty, she was grimly determined to forward the interests of her own two awkward daughters. Thus, as time went by, the chateau fell into disrepair, for the family fortunes were squandered upon the vain and selfish stepsisters, while Cinderella was abused, humiliated and eventually forced to become a servant in her own house. And yet, through it all, Cinderella remained ever gentle and kind, for with each dawn she found new hope that someday, her dreams of happiness would come true.

LV 4

Jeet_Chattopadhyay

I don't hate it I don't like it I think this story is a very unsatisfying read for someone like me The author has just put too many mysteries without any answers for a long time I don't really like how the charector acts it's very weird and so far we haven't got any explanation about it the charector intrigues me but is very unsatisfying to read I don't like the mc creating a persona of acting cute around him when he shouldn't act like that if he is mature then he should act mature all the time also I don't like Hermione so Hermione obsession is not something I like I can understand 11 year old girl not being able to get a joke but I don't think mc needs to share his knowledge just for some joke your story amazingly confuses me and is very unsatisfying read

LV 2

Arion_Sturmklinge

You should revise the chapter headings, it's not just a bit confusing ____________________________________________________________________________________________________

LV 13

Aydehan

A well-deserved series. Pretty and good, the main character is pretty smart. I love this series, I hope it continues.

LV 14

EdgeOfTime

The story is really nice! The character is a bit quirky in his actions but the interaction don’t feel forced. A suggestion would be changing the chapter titles because as I read the chapter and the title of the chapter they usually don’t encompass the entirety of it.

LV 1

IINeeRoII

Nothing to say about the grammar and the syntax of the sentences, there are errors but they are really unimportant. On the other hand, I am surprised by the author's dedication to reducing the chapters, to facilitate reading, it is a task that requires work and time, for that reason it is appreciated. Personally, I had left it since the slowness with which it progressed was tedious, but now I think an opportunity would not hurt. (Google translate)

LV 1

Gesonel_The_Duck

It's pretty good, is incredible how the author develops the characters and their mysteries.The history has a smooth but slow development. I think the novel got re-written, so give it a chance.

LV 14

DetachedDreamer

I honestly really like the story and for the most part have no issues I can point out except one. Hes an orphan in slytherin. Every author thats does this is just a bit too desperate to be different. Destroys a lot of the immersion with how unlikely it'd be to happen even in a fictional world. thats the only reason I deducted a point but it affects the whole story so I think its reasonable. especially with him being a beast and friends with Remus. him and Snape couldn't find a middle ground with that background. More important things than being unique. Other than that the story is written really well, the MC seems to be written well. a few weird mood swings but that might be explained in the future. updating speed and world background is topnotch. I love his weird family dynamic and I like who he has chosen to interact with. story has potential so far.