118Reseñas
4.52
- Calidad de escritura
- Estabilidad de las actualizaciones
- Desarrollo de la Historia
- Diseño de Personajes
- Antecedentes del mundo
Comparte tus pensamientos con los demás
Escribe una reseña
The most satisfying Naruto fanfic in recent times sooooooo -Proper updates -AU=no otsuksukis -about a person transmigrated as Obito The mc's believe at the start might be annoying but it slowly got fixed its really fun story with great easy grammer, nice story development and a cool mc with a really great pace of development and NO he is not shipped with Kushina and not picking girls like potatoes. The mc aint a weak willed person and adapts really fast. AHH i am so hyped about the development SO HERES UR REVIEW:)
So yeah, I have been reading your story from basically the start. And I like what you did with it. The first few chapters (around 20 to 25) weren’t the best. It was good, as you explained about the world building, the different political factions that the MC needs to look out for, the introduction of other characters (That are not cardboard cut outs, and have their own lives and problems.), explaining why he thinks he could start training later (cause of still feeling that Naruto world works like the real world, of course, we won’t see five-year-old training themselves in the gym.) The later chapters, even the recent ones are just gold. Obito changes quite a lot after the Hospital Incident… he doesn’t want to help people at first… as he wants to survive, but then he looks at all the things that they did for him. And gets grips with the situation and goes for it. Sure he had help for the goat Kagami. I like the character development. How he sees his own flaws in thinking. I really like how you made a believable character. One who does mistakes and learns from them. It was great. And then later on, (after awakening his Sharingan) how people mainly the village and Uchiha clan start treating him differently. How clans that aren’t Uchiha are also expanded on. And I also like what you are doing with the Rokushiki techniques. Not just learning it by yourself, as you are making Might Duy and Guy rework the technique. (Of course, One Piece techniques shouldn't work perfectly right off the bat in the Naruto world, things should be different. And a good fighter can rework it. And I like the concept) All in all a great story. The grammar needs a bit of work. But I can see you fixing things here and there. As a writer myself, I kinda know how it’s hard to fix grammar issues when you are not a native speaker. Anyway, I will like the story to be a non-harm. But you can add two or even three wifus, I don’t think that counts as being in the haram category. But meh… your choice.
The story was a bit out there, but it was also fun to read and really engaging. I hope that it being taken down is a rewrite or temporary.
Please don’t delete this story. Even if your not going to update it anymore I still love going back and reading it.
its goooone, nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
My only complaint is with the writing quality. It's bad. Really bad, and it only seems to get worse as the story progresses. Other than that, it's a good 4 star fanfic
it's good but i wonder who will obito get with just think about it obito with a lot of wife's and kakashi and rid is good to ok il come back when there is more bye.
bring back live of this series [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Really good work amongst the many mediocre Naruto fanfics. Good character development, AU story & focus on plotting, a Tobi specialty, while decent power scaling. Looking fwd to more updates! Thanks fallen_crown!
great story! can you update soon, and please don't turn into harem... there's enough of those
Author is breaking immersion regularly. This is not a spoiler because it happens in the opening part of the story. It breaks immersion when author repeats the world looks like MC is in an animated cartoon. The world looks like boruto anime, etc and MC can see glitches in the world. We read books to get immersed in fantasy world; and to do that authors try very hard to create their own fantastical ecosystem, fictional economy, fictional culture, etc. Naruto's mangaka has already done the hard work to immerse people into the naruto world and the author is trying to make it difficult for people to immerse in the naruto world. I can understand changing the plot, characters, etc but MC being able to see glitches makes this story a mystery story.(If this is not mystery story then glitches dont need to appear in this world). If the Author is trying to make this a mystery story; when most fans on webnovel want a grammatically correct story with good plot that they can enjoy binging. I can read sanderson, abercrombie, martin, etc if I want complicated stories. I am not reading fanfics for that. Guess I'll go read tress of emerald sea. Havent found new good naruto, one piece adventure fanfic. I liked this author's one piece fanfic until characters started getting powers like that from xmen. Similar characters from children cartoons appeared. These break immersion. The one piece fanfic was good and I know the author wanted to tap into the wacky and absurd one piece comedy but adding similar powers from other cartoons break immersion of one piece. These kinds of 4th wall breaking things must be used carefully. This is my major criticism of this fanfic as well as the author. I either hope he makes mystery fanfics or he makes adventure fanfics but he/she doesn't has the skill currently to mash these genre together. I think the author is trying to do something different in already similar fanfics genre but currently this fanfic as well as one piece fanfic is neither generic weak to strong, adventure isekai nor it is a mystery fanfic where readers are constantly trying to piece together how mc transported, why mc sees glitches, why world looks liek cartoon. I guess, it is because, an intelligent system, aliens, god(s), etc isekaied MC or he is in VR, or in coma, etc etc. Already seen these kinds of tropes done, sosthe mystery is not also that intriguing. Author might have something else that could blow our minds but from what I haev read and from my gut feeling, I dont think so.
I give this fanfic a 5-star review. I already like how Mc/Obito isn’t powerful right from the start he has to work hard to get where he is currently and is not talented like the other Uchiha.
I don’t know what to write here for 140 words, but I will say that this is one of the most suitable stories that I have read, I will definitely look forward to continuing))
I PUT THIS NARUTO FANFICTION IN THE TOP 2. THE AUTHOR WAS NOT AFRAID TO LEAVE THE ORIGINAL PLOT AND MADE HIS OWN WORLD AND EVENTS. I WILL BE HONEST, I LOVED THIS STORY, I JUST HOPE THE AUTHOR DOESN'T STOP THE WORK, THANKS FOR THE GREAT READING AND KEEP UP WITH THE GOOD WORK
I really liked it upto ch100 but the whole saving jugo clan arc felt cringy af. Also, am i the only one who thinks his plan of collecting all dojusu and sealing them in his eyes like taliled beast seems unrealistic plotarmor and creepy? sigh, another good book goes down the drain by random plot development.
I usually read the entire story before rating, but this is basically an original story with naruto characters. The author completely changed the background of the world. (Google translator)
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Отличная история хорошее развитие персонажей и сюжета хотя было бы интересно🤔💭 если он притащил голову МИЗУКАГЕ и теруми Мэй в Коноху для повышения звания до Санина чтобы обойти Какаши
best obito fic ive read in a while nice personalty also i love that there is no otsuki i hated that they put that into the lore of naruto but amazing story keep it up
No tiene kamui........................................ ...................................................................................................................................
Finally someone actually uses the ketsuryugan. One of my favorite doujutsus that was barely even shown. I'm glad that the author decided to use it and I am hoping that the mc continues to bring out its full potential!!!!
Revelar spoiler
Interesting read and I love it so far. A S-I Obito as the main character is something that I always want to read and interested in. I hope it gets better and better [img=recommend]
The most satisfying Naruto fanfic in recent times sooooooo -Proper updates -AU=no otsuksukis -about a person transmigrated as Obito The mc's believe at the start might be annoying but it slowly got fixed its really fun story with great easy grammer, nice story development and a cool mc with a really great pace of development and NO he is not shipped with Kushina and not picking girls like potatoes. The mc aint a weak willed person and adapts really fast. AHH i am so hyped about the development SO HERES UR REVIEW:)
So yeah, I have been reading your story from basically the start. And I like what you did with it. The first few chapters (around 20 to 25) weren’t the best. It was good, as you explained about the world building, the different political factions that the MC needs to look out for, the introduction of other characters (That are not cardboard cut outs, and have their own lives and problems.), explaining why he thinks he could start training later (cause of still feeling that Naruto world works like the real world, of course, we won’t see five-year-old training themselves in the gym.) The later chapters, even the recent ones are just gold. Obito changes quite a lot after the Hospital Incident… he doesn’t want to help people at first… as he wants to survive, but then he looks at all the things that they did for him. And gets grips with the situation and goes for it. Sure he had help for the goat Kagami. I like the character development. How he sees his own flaws in thinking. I really like how you made a believable character. One who does mistakes and learns from them. It was great. And then later on, (after awakening his Sharingan) how people mainly the village and Uchiha clan start treating him differently. How clans that aren’t Uchiha are also expanded on. And I also like what you are doing with the Rokushiki techniques. Not just learning it by yourself, as you are making Might Duy and Guy rework the technique. (Of course, One Piece techniques shouldn't work perfectly right off the bat in the Naruto world, things should be different. And a good fighter can rework it. And I like the concept) All in all a great story. The grammar needs a bit of work. But I can see you fixing things here and there. As a writer myself, I kinda know how it’s hard to fix grammar issues when you are not a native speaker. Anyway, I will like the story to be a non-harm. But you can add two or even three wifus, I don’t think that counts as being in the haram category. But meh… your choice.
The story was a bit out there, but it was also fun to read and really engaging. I hope that it being taken down is a rewrite or temporary.
Please don’t delete this story. Even if your not going to update it anymore I still love going back and reading it.
its goooone, nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
My only complaint is with the writing quality. It's bad. Really bad, and it only seems to get worse as the story progresses. Other than that, it's a good 4 star fanfic
it's good but i wonder who will obito get with just think about it obito with a lot of wife's and kakashi and rid is good to ok il come back when there is more bye.
bring back live of this series [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Really good work amongst the many mediocre Naruto fanfics. Good character development, AU story & focus on plotting, a Tobi specialty, while decent power scaling. Looking fwd to more updates! Thanks fallen_crown!
great story! can you update soon, and please don't turn into harem... there's enough of those
Author is breaking immersion regularly. This is not a spoiler because it happens in the opening part of the story. It breaks immersion when author repeats the world looks like MC is in an animated cartoon. The world looks like boruto anime, etc and MC can see glitches in the world. We read books to get immersed in fantasy world; and to do that authors try very hard to create their own fantastical ecosystem, fictional economy, fictional culture, etc. Naruto's mangaka has already done the hard work to immerse people into the naruto world and the author is trying to make it difficult for people to immerse in the naruto world. I can understand changing the plot, characters, etc but MC being able to see glitches makes this story a mystery story.(If this is not mystery story then glitches dont need to appear in this world). If the Author is trying to make this a mystery story; when most fans on webnovel want a grammatically correct story with good plot that they can enjoy binging. I can read sanderson, abercrombie, martin, etc if I want complicated stories. I am not reading fanfics for that. Guess I'll go read tress of emerald sea. Havent found new good naruto, one piece adventure fanfic. I liked this author's one piece fanfic until characters started getting powers like that from xmen. Similar characters from children cartoons appeared. These break immersion. The one piece fanfic was good and I know the author wanted to tap into the wacky and absurd one piece comedy but adding similar powers from other cartoons break immersion of one piece. These kinds of 4th wall breaking things must be used carefully. This is my major criticism of this fanfic as well as the author. I either hope he makes mystery fanfics or he makes adventure fanfics but he/she doesn't has the skill currently to mash these genre together. I think the author is trying to do something different in already similar fanfics genre but currently this fanfic as well as one piece fanfic is neither generic weak to strong, adventure isekai nor it is a mystery fanfic where readers are constantly trying to piece together how mc transported, why mc sees glitches, why world looks liek cartoon. I guess, it is because, an intelligent system, aliens, god(s), etc isekaied MC or he is in VR, or in coma, etc etc. Already seen these kinds of tropes done, sosthe mystery is not also that intriguing. Author might have something else that could blow our minds but from what I haev read and from my gut feeling, I dont think so.
I give this fanfic a 5-star review. I already like how Mc/Obito isn’t powerful right from the start he has to work hard to get where he is currently and is not talented like the other Uchiha.
I don’t know what to write here for 140 words, but I will say that this is one of the most suitable stories that I have read, I will definitely look forward to continuing))
I PUT THIS NARUTO FANFICTION IN THE TOP 2. THE AUTHOR WAS NOT AFRAID TO LEAVE THE ORIGINAL PLOT AND MADE HIS OWN WORLD AND EVENTS. I WILL BE HONEST, I LOVED THIS STORY, I JUST HOPE THE AUTHOR DOESN'T STOP THE WORK, THANKS FOR THE GREAT READING AND KEEP UP WITH THE GOOD WORK
I really liked it upto ch100 but the whole saving jugo clan arc felt cringy af. Also, am i the only one who thinks his plan of collecting all dojusu and sealing them in his eyes like taliled beast seems unrealistic plotarmor and creepy? sigh, another good book goes down the drain by random plot development.
I usually read the entire story before rating, but this is basically an original story with naruto characters. The author completely changed the background of the world. (Google translator)
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Отличная история хорошее развитие персонажей и сюжета хотя было бы интересно🤔💭 если он притащил голову МИЗУКАГЕ и теруми Мэй в Коноху для повышения звания до Санина чтобы обойти Какаши
best obito fic ive read in a while nice personalty also i love that there is no otsuki i hated that they put that into the lore of naruto but amazing story keep it up
No tiene kamui........................................ ...................................................................................................................................
Finally someone actually uses the ketsuryugan. One of my favorite doujutsus that was barely even shown. I'm glad that the author decided to use it and I am hoping that the mc continues to bring out its full potential!!!!
Revelar spoiler
Interesting read and I love it so far. A S-I Obito as the main character is something that I always want to read and interested in. I hope it gets better and better [img=recommend]