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Overall Rating: Subpar at best. WQ: With less to no mistake grammatical errors. 4/5 SD: Too lame! as author-san follows the cannon too much which greatly decrease the story & MC progression. 1/5 CD: Author/MC breaks the most important unwritten rule of all reincarnators/transmigrators "Kiss & Tell". 1/5 US: Author-san must've encountered the well known disease of a mental/writer's block. 3/5 WB: The storys setup is well thought as the wishes is not the OP & it kinda still follows the rule of the world 'excluding' system. 4/5 Could've been a great FF of TWD if author-san didn't follow the route of kiss & tell as it shows lack of understanding pertaining to reincarnation/transmigration which created tons of plot holes. I highly recommend reading several isekai's novel to further improve your creative writing and understanding of the said subject.
Неплохо, хоть и первые три главы, заставляют словить кринж.............................................................................................
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Gave it 3 stars due to not reading it what put me off 1 mc being some sort of super fighter 2 3 wishes 3 have a logical reason for who they partner with even if harem have the characters reasons they are open to it logical 4 that was it I'd be happy to read a fan fic of walking dead with their own shift in story due to future knowledge etc Not bothered by harem as long as it fits description of said characters I'd be fine if mc had some perk for example they could be granted knowledge/ abilities of 1 fictional character within limits example (knowledge and or abilities of 1 of following John wick Alejandro gillick Katness everdeen Maximus Decimus Meridius: The punisher) Those are examples, all highly capable in certain fields mainly killing or fighting but they still have limits and are not practically universally talented for example batman That for me would make a good fan fic
I really like the story hope you keep writing…And it’s literally a walking dead fanfic even if the mc has a bunker is the story supposed to take place inside? And the whole reincarnation thing with the OC isn’t really that big of a deal the story flow is great, the mc isn’t a moron and it has room for potential if it’s not to your liking no point writing a bad review complaining just leave it. Author keep it up and I look forward to more👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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MC idiot. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Me agrada mucho el diseño del personaje y como poco a poco va creciendo mediante las situaciones por que es algo diferente ver la serie que vivirla ( Me agrada que solo tenga solo tres mujeres) por que luego hay harem de 20 personas y pues no le da la importancia a cada una, pero tuviste la buena idea de solo tres 👌🥺
The Writing quality is good. MC wished for a supersoldierserum and a system with higher comprehension, but it he apparently doesnt really use it and seems like a slightly stronger human and he has years to prepare for what ia to come and only builds bunkers. In the early chapters he brings emotionally bonded people knowingly in useless danger. story also retty much follows the canon till i read it. its ok but not so interesting with much change and MC appearing relatively normal as a background narrator
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Of course, I'm a little upset that the MC decided to reveal all of his secrets to another person. But in general, the fanfic itself turns out to be quite good. And if you, the author, limit the number of MCs enlightened in the secrets of only one girl (from the 4th chapter), then I will give you 4+ in advance. Come on bro, light it up properly.
Mc dude reincarnated, just adopt an oc girl out of nowhere, tells her all the secrets and its just doesnt match all the good staff about reincarnation, its cringe and I just cannot read It, all the best to author but thats just hard to read personnaly for me, maybe someone else would appreciate the novel more but i hope it would be rewritten
Revelar spoiler
The mc tells an oc (who I believe is a love interest) about the fact that he is a reincarnated being with a system, and special powers. enough said
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you said you wanted a good fic but you broke it from chapter 4 with telling her he reincarnated which doesn't make much sense to me even if you trust someone it doesn't make sense to tell them that I hoped you would change it see in all the bad review it got I don't see a point in telling a person you got a system and you RE it just break the flow in the fic
i d'ont know if the author will delet what i'm going to express here... i got an honest view here... its a trash one... the mc adopt the girl for no reason and tells the girl he is from another world and he got a system. the mc is trash in general... you will understand what i mean if you read the first 4 chapters.
Creo que en CDC podrías comprar combustible con el sistema para que funcione más tiempo, decirle todo a Edward y que en ves de explotar que cree una falsa alarma de descontamonacion obligando al grupo a salir si te parece viable
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Harém: Maggie, Andrea, Amy, Chloe. HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM
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Overall Rating: Subpar at best. WQ: With less to no mistake grammatical errors. 4/5 SD: Too lame! as author-san follows the cannon too much which greatly decrease the story & MC progression. 1/5 CD: Author/MC breaks the most important unwritten rule of all reincarnators/transmigrators "Kiss & Tell". 1/5 US: Author-san must've encountered the well known disease of a mental/writer's block. 3/5 WB: The storys setup is well thought as the wishes is not the OP & it kinda still follows the rule of the world 'excluding' system. 4/5 Could've been a great FF of TWD if author-san didn't follow the route of kiss & tell as it shows lack of understanding pertaining to reincarnation/transmigration which created tons of plot holes. I highly recommend reading several isekai's novel to further improve your creative writing and understanding of the said subject.
Неплохо, хоть и первые три главы, заставляют словить кринж.............................................................................................
I love it so much ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️!!! I love it so much ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️!!! I love it so much ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️!!! I love it so much ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️!!! I love it so much ❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️!!!
Gave it 3 stars due to not reading it what put me off 1 mc being some sort of super fighter 2 3 wishes 3 have a logical reason for who they partner with even if harem have the characters reasons they are open to it logical 4 that was it I'd be happy to read a fan fic of walking dead with their own shift in story due to future knowledge etc Not bothered by harem as long as it fits description of said characters I'd be fine if mc had some perk for example they could be granted knowledge/ abilities of 1 fictional character within limits example (knowledge and or abilities of 1 of following John wick Alejandro gillick Katness everdeen Maximus Decimus Meridius: The punisher) Those are examples, all highly capable in certain fields mainly killing or fighting but they still have limits and are not practically universally talented for example batman That for me would make a good fan fic
I really like the story hope you keep writing…And it’s literally a walking dead fanfic even if the mc has a bunker is the story supposed to take place inside? And the whole reincarnation thing with the OC isn’t really that big of a deal the story flow is great, the mc isn’t a moron and it has room for potential if it’s not to your liking no point writing a bad review complaining just leave it. Author keep it up and I look forward to more👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
Revelar spoiler MC idiot. [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]
Me agrada mucho el diseño del personaje y como poco a poco va creciendo mediante las situaciones por que es algo diferente ver la serie que vivirla ( Me agrada que solo tenga solo tres mujeres) por que luego hay harem de 20 personas y pues no le da la importancia a cada una, pero tuviste la buena idea de solo tres 👌🥺
The Writing quality is good. MC wished for a supersoldierserum and a system with higher comprehension, but it he apparently doesnt really use it and seems like a slightly stronger human and he has years to prepare for what ia to come and only builds bunkers. In the early chapters he brings emotionally bonded people knowingly in useless danger. story also retty much follows the canon till i read it. its ok but not so interesting with much change and MC appearing relatively normal as a background narrator
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Of course, I'm a little upset that the MC decided to reveal all of his secrets to another person. But in general, the fanfic itself turns out to be quite good. And if you, the author, limit the number of MCs enlightened in the secrets of only one girl (from the 4th chapter), then I will give you 4+ in advance. Come on bro, light it up properly.
Mc dude reincarnated, just adopt an oc girl out of nowhere, tells her all the secrets and its just doesnt match all the good staff about reincarnation, its cringe and I just cannot read It, all the best to author but thats just hard to read personnaly for me, maybe someone else would appreciate the novel more but i hope it would be rewritten
Revelar spoiler The mc tells an oc (who I believe is a love interest) about the fact that he is a reincarnated being with a system, and special powers. enough said
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you said you wanted a good fic but you broke it from chapter 4 with telling her he reincarnated which doesn't make much sense to me even if you trust someone it doesn't make sense to tell them that I hoped you would change it see in all the bad review it got I don't see a point in telling a person you got a system and you RE it just break the flow in the fic
i d'ont know if the author will delet what i'm going to express here... i got an honest view here... its a trash one... the mc adopt the girl for no reason and tells the girl he is from another world and he got a system. the mc is trash in general... you will understand what i mean if you read the first 4 chapters.
Creo que en CDC podrías comprar combustible con el sistema para que funcione más tiempo, decirle todo a Edward y que en ves de explotar que cree una falsa alarma de descontamonacion obligando al grupo a salir si te parece viable
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Harém: Maggie, Andrea, Amy, Chloe. HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM HAREM
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it doesn't make sense at all just terrible