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Noooo!!! When will be the next update I can't wait for moore please author continue this story
Biggest issue with it is the awful writing and grammar making it hard to follow the story as it jumps about or is plain unreadable due to the grammar and sentence structure being a chaotic mess.
история ужэ год без обновлений ничего сказать 1 бал большэ поставить не могу птица обломинго не позволяет читаешь читаешь и облом продолжэния
please 🙏 COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK
Elle est incroyable ! Elle se bat contre une armée seule et en plus elle est parfaitement calme ! Comment elle fait !? Elle est putain de trop forte ! Sa volonté est vraiment admirable. J'attends avec impatience son combat contre Madara.
The novel was nice to read at first. Despite some few grammatical errors, the plot was quite creative and fun to read. However the mc is too OP so it kinda ruins it for me. She got strong TOO FAST. I mean like she basically can destroy Kaguya Otsutsuki already when Madara wasn't even revived yet. That's all.
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Why does the main character constantly get given random new powers that have no build up or proper explanation? Why do none of the characters have any development? Why is the female main character refered to as a he or himself all the time? Why do all the characters from naruto either act stupid or completely contrary to what we saw of their personalities in the series? Why does the story line despite being coherent not actually make much sense? To get all these questions and more stuck in your head read this story!
There are a lot of problems. 1. Grammar mistakes, while I don't really mind them, having a lot of them really disrupts the flow of reading. Especially when the POV keeps changing. 2. Unable to use taijutsu. I mean, seriously? Taijutsu is literally just punching, what next? Can't walk without performing a breathing technique? 3. A normal girl in her past life and has managed to sense chakra already, even when she's only days old. Chakra = Physical + Spirit. Let's say you have a lot of spiritual energy in you, but your physical energy is lacking, so the mc being able to sense it is nonsensical. 4. The Mc and Author might be on "cra*k", hence the Mc's Chakra is called Crakra Overall? It had a solid foundation, but was terribly added upon. Child of Uchiha, but can't use GENJUTSU, THE THING THAT THE UCHIHAS ARE KNOWN FOR. And why does the Mc want to be a Shinobi when you cant use taijutsu? An enemy could literally just steal your sword then what? You can only run around evading cause you can't punch nor kick.
I really enjoy the overall concept of the story and the characters. The only problem is that the author as a big problem with the pronouns of the characters. Pronous change between paragraphs and sometimes sentences. Makes it hard to read.
This is a fantastic book that actually goes into detail about the moves they use, even if it taken from an anime/manga. This is also not the standard MC who lives in Konoha but somewhere else for once. The only suggestion for the author is to include moon breathing. Anyway, thanks author for making this, and I hope you don't drop this.
When I first read this story, I thought it was boring, but uppon reaching chapter 30 to 40 it ’s started to become interesting, so that good and all. the only issue that I have is the bad grammar and gender of the mc. Don’t get me wrong, I know the gender of the Mc since the beginning, but just please correct your grammar to make us easier to read. I love demon slayer and this is one of the fanfic I see of it, so don’t drop please. If you are reading this Author-san, I hope you took my advice and get better. Maybe I drop the review and make a better review for you. I hope you make her use demon blood art too. Your fan of this fanfic.
this is a good read, you will enjoy it as much as I did. ..............................!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I just hate posting reviews
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At first it was interesting under the premise of birthplace and skills, but the further the story progresses as it becomes a bit strange that all of the FC attacks are final. and the handwriting problems do not help ... well it is a good fic but it must be taken with a grain of salt and a lot of patience
Gostei bastante, tem alguns problemas com a escrita e tals, mas está cada vez melhor... Inicialmente estava meio desleixado, mas vejo que começou a pegar o jeito para escrever... Continue com um bom trabalho!!!
a good novel if you compare them with MTL. i like the story progression and MC emotional change. But still, 3 star for world building and 2 for updates is very must.
I wholly like the book but not for the yuri or anything like that. I like the unique idea. The author will sometimes mess up the him or her but it's fine, minor mistakes. Though, I really hope the author updates more consistently, like 2 chapters a week. So as long as author doesn't turn novel into a p*** novel with terrible writing, this will be on my top 30 novels.
I love this book! the character, the story— EVERYTHING!! it blends together so well! the only problem is the grammar and some chapter's a bit confusing
I honestly loved the story, I was a little confused at first if it was before the 2nd ninja war or the 3rd war, but other than that I really liked it a lot, mainly because I've never seen one like this about breathing naruto, looking forward to more, please continue > . <
Great story so far but the grammar is whats really turning me off but i wouldnt mind trying to fix that if u gave me a chance I’ll even do the first chapter for free to see if you like my work if youre interested reply with you’re discord or something idk.
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Only problem in this story is the grammar. That aside the story is exellent, the mc is especially well written. Looking forward to more chapters
no being able to use ninjutsu ,genjutsu and fuuinjutsu is alread stupid but taijutsu realy? theres some grammar errors and overall is not so bad but i didn't like
Noooo!!! When will be the next update I can't wait for moore please author continue this story
Biggest issue with it is the awful writing and grammar making it hard to follow the story as it jumps about or is plain unreadable due to the grammar and sentence structure being a chaotic mess.
история ужэ год без обновлений ничего сказать 1 бал большэ поставить не могу птица обломинго не позволяет читаешь читаешь и облом продолжэния
please 🙏 COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK COME BACK
Elle est incroyable ! Elle se bat contre une armée seule et en plus elle est parfaitement calme ! Comment elle fait !? Elle est putain de trop forte ! Sa volonté est vraiment admirable. J'attends avec impatience son combat contre Madara.
The novel was nice to read at first. Despite some few grammatical errors, the plot was quite creative and fun to read. However the mc is too OP so it kinda ruins it for me. She got strong TOO FAST. I mean like she basically can destroy Kaguya Otsutsuki already when Madara wasn't even revived yet. That's all.
give me more!!!!! SPAM KFKFKXKXXKNXKXKXKXKXKXXX C X C VC C CCLCKCKCKCKCLC CKCKCKCLCKLCLCLCLCLCLCLC KGICO OGOGOGOGOGOOGOG FLFKFKKXKXKXXD
pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat pokračovat
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Why does the main character constantly get given random new powers that have no build up or proper explanation? Why do none of the characters have any development? Why is the female main character refered to as a he or himself all the time? Why do all the characters from naruto either act stupid or completely contrary to what we saw of their personalities in the series? Why does the story line despite being coherent not actually make much sense? To get all these questions and more stuck in your head read this story!
There are a lot of problems. 1. Grammar mistakes, while I don't really mind them, having a lot of them really disrupts the flow of reading. Especially when the POV keeps changing. 2. Unable to use taijutsu. I mean, seriously? Taijutsu is literally just punching, what next? Can't walk without performing a breathing technique? 3. A normal girl in her past life and has managed to sense chakra already, even when she's only days old. Chakra = Physical + Spirit. Let's say you have a lot of spiritual energy in you, but your physical energy is lacking, so the mc being able to sense it is nonsensical. 4. The Mc and Author might be on "cra*k", hence the Mc's Chakra is called Crakra Overall? It had a solid foundation, but was terribly added upon. Child of Uchiha, but can't use GENJUTSU, THE THING THAT THE UCHIHAS ARE KNOWN FOR. And why does the Mc want to be a Shinobi when you cant use taijutsu? An enemy could literally just steal your sword then what? You can only run around evading cause you can't punch nor kick.
I really enjoy the overall concept of the story and the characters. The only problem is that the author as a big problem with the pronouns of the characters. Pronous change between paragraphs and sometimes sentences. Makes it hard to read.
This is a fantastic book that actually goes into detail about the moves they use, even if it taken from an anime/manga. This is also not the standard MC who lives in Konoha but somewhere else for once. The only suggestion for the author is to include moon breathing. Anyway, thanks author for making this, and I hope you don't drop this.
When I first read this story, I thought it was boring, but uppon reaching chapter 30 to 40 it ’s started to become interesting, so that good and all. the only issue that I have is the bad grammar and gender of the mc. Don’t get me wrong, I know the gender of the Mc since the beginning, but just please correct your grammar to make us easier to read. I love demon slayer and this is one of the fanfic I see of it, so don’t drop please. If you are reading this Author-san, I hope you took my advice and get better. Maybe I drop the review and make a better review for you. I hope you make her use demon blood art too. Your fan of this fanfic.
this is a good read, you will enjoy it as much as I did. ..............................!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!I just hate posting reviews
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At first it was interesting under the premise of birthplace and skills, but the further the story progresses as it becomes a bit strange that all of the FC attacks are final. and the handwriting problems do not help ... well it is a good fic but it must be taken with a grain of salt and a lot of patience
Gostei bastante, tem alguns problemas com a escrita e tals, mas está cada vez melhor... Inicialmente estava meio desleixado, mas vejo que começou a pegar o jeito para escrever... Continue com um bom trabalho!!!
a good novel if you compare them with MTL. i like the story progression and MC emotional change. But still, 3 star for world building and 2 for updates is very must.
I wholly like the book but not for the yuri or anything like that. I like the unique idea. The author will sometimes mess up the him or her but it's fine, minor mistakes. Though, I really hope the author updates more consistently, like 2 chapters a week. So as long as author doesn't turn novel into a p*** novel with terrible writing, this will be on my top 30 novels.
I love this book! the character, the story— EVERYTHING!! it blends together so well! the only problem is the grammar and some chapter's a bit confusing
I honestly loved the story, I was a little confused at first if it was before the 2nd ninja war or the 3rd war, but other than that I really liked it a lot, mainly because I've never seen one like this about breathing naruto, looking forward to more, please continue > . <
Great story so far but the grammar is whats really turning me off but i wouldnt mind trying to fix that if u gave me a chance I’ll even do the first chapter for free to see if you like my work if youre interested reply with you’re discord or something idk.
I like the story, I'm looking for a female MC, but few are serious about making stories, so keep it up[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=update][img=update]
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Only problem in this story is the grammar. That aside the story is exellent, the mc is especially well written. Looking forward to more chapters
no being able to use ninjutsu ,genjutsu and fuuinjutsu is alread stupid but taijutsu realy? theres some grammar errors and overall is not so bad but i didn't like
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