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not bad for a book. wished to have more stories about their daughter growing up and join the father in fighting or join up with mom to invent more stuffs.
Very bad grammar and many mistakes but at the same time very sweet story. characters feel real. as story continues bulma and Goku matures a lot. and Goku actually becomes a responsible parent. you will become emotionally attached to them. even those who have not seen the original can read and enjoy this. (also I can edit the chapters if you want, then again if i remember right you can't add or edit chapters(?) if book status is completed)
Very bad grammar and many mistakes but at the same time very sweet story. characters feel real. as story continues bulma and Goku matures a lot. and Goku actually becomes a responsible parent. you will become emotionally attached to them. even those who have not seen the original can read and enjoy this.
a bulma e o goku juntos, acho que seria realmente melhor, para o mundo, ele teria bem mais acesso a meios de treinamento com as criações do pai da bulma e dela, assim quem sabe nem morrendo contra o irmão, mudaria muitas coisas e ao meu ver seria algo bom
Note: when reading this, note that he/she are going to be where you’d usually find an ‘it’ in place of an object and it’s because author’s OG language had gender based nouns (ex: a book could be a feminine noun so when referring to the object when it’s the subject they’d say ‘she’ instead of ‘it’ “where’s the book?” “Oh, she’s on the table”) also, to note, is that he/she gets mixed up with characters too, but I think that’s just a writing mistake. Once you get used to that, and remember that the writing quality gets much better as the story progresses, it’s adorable. It’s heartwarming. Honestly, I wish this ship was canon. It’s rather well done and if the author rewrites it I’d think it’d be definitely good enough to post on somewhere like AO3.
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An interesting ff to read. Only i have a dude about the time betwen chapters uu . I consider that is good and have a lot of potential. :"):"):"):")
This is really good but grammar could use work He/Her are def switched a lot, it's still readable and def not as bad as some other fanfics. other than that I don't really have a problem so keep up the great work
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Revelar spoiler Sorry guys !! Even though I am the author, I need to give a review of my story: even though the author is not English-speaking, I think he has a good level in terms of narration and spelling (although there is confusion of pronouns), and the characters are faithfully represented as to Dragon Ball canon :)
A fun fanfic and brings with it a joyful romance in the world of dragon ball. I'm waiting for more chapters and will be following the updates.
Un historia que demuestra que el más pequeño cambio puede hacer que las cosas sean completamente diferente demostrando el efecto mariposa en su máximo éxplendor, además el autor es fiel al carácter original de Goku y Bulma llevando está historia con un desarrollo de trama profundo y entretenido espero poder seguir leyendo esta magnífica historia.
Good history so far is innovative about the others that I have seen from this theme and although spelling can improve the narrative quality is excellent and there are constant updates so far... upfate soon please.
i like this i hope you have bulla as the first child instead of trunks or gohan, and hopefully you make it so she can go ssj1 cause we still haven't seen a female ssj besides U6. the only issue i have is you need to work on your He/She usage other than that keep it up👍👍👍👍👍
It was a very good story, one that we'd like to see continue, but it was the perfect time for the end. In short, I really liked it.
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Revelar spoiler not bad for a book. wished to have more stories about their daughter growing up and join the father in fighting or join up with mom to invent more stuffs.
Very bad grammar and many mistakes but at the same time very sweet story. characters feel real. as story continues bulma and Goku matures a lot. and Goku actually becomes a responsible parent. you will become emotionally attached to them. even those who have not seen the original can read and enjoy this. (also I can edit the chapters if you want, then again if i remember right you can't add or edit chapters(?) if book status is completed)
Very bad grammar and many mistakes but at the same time very sweet story. characters feel real. as story continues bulma and Goku matures a lot. and Goku actually becomes a responsible parent. you will become emotionally attached to them. even those who have not seen the original can read and enjoy this.
a bulma e o goku juntos, acho que seria realmente melhor, para o mundo, ele teria bem mais acesso a meios de treinamento com as criações do pai da bulma e dela, assim quem sabe nem morrendo contra o irmão, mudaria muitas coisas e ao meu ver seria algo bom
Note: when reading this, note that he/she are going to be where you’d usually find an ‘it’ in place of an object and it’s because author’s OG language had gender based nouns (ex: a book could be a feminine noun so when referring to the object when it’s the subject they’d say ‘she’ instead of ‘it’ “where’s the book?” “Oh, she’s on the table”) also, to note, is that he/she gets mixed up with characters too, but I think that’s just a writing mistake. Once you get used to that, and remember that the writing quality gets much better as the story progresses, it’s adorable. It’s heartwarming. Honestly, I wish this ship was canon. It’s rather well done and if the author rewrites it I’d think it’d be definitely good enough to post on somewhere like AO3.
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An interesting ff to read. Only i have a dude about the time betwen chapters uu . I consider that is good and have a lot of potential. :"):"):"):")
This is really good but grammar could use work He/Her are def switched a lot, it's still readable and def not as bad as some other fanfics. other than that I don't really have a problem so keep up the great work
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Revelar spoiler Sorry guys !! Even though I am the author, I need to give a review of my story: even though the author is not English-speaking, I think he has a good level in terms of narration and spelling (although there is confusion of pronouns), and the characters are faithfully represented as to Dragon Ball canon :)
A fun fanfic and brings with it a joyful romance in the world of dragon ball. I'm waiting for more chapters and will be following the updates.
Un historia que demuestra que el más pequeño cambio puede hacer que las cosas sean completamente diferente demostrando el efecto mariposa en su máximo éxplendor, además el autor es fiel al carácter original de Goku y Bulma llevando está historia con un desarrollo de trama profundo y entretenido espero poder seguir leyendo esta magnífica historia.
Good history so far is innovative about the others that I have seen from this theme and although spelling can improve the narrative quality is excellent and there are constant updates so far... upfate soon please.
i like this i hope you have bulla as the first child instead of trunks or gohan, and hopefully you make it so she can go ssj1 cause we still haven't seen a female ssj besides U6. the only issue i have is you need to work on your He/She usage other than that keep it up👍👍👍👍👍
It was a very good story, one that we'd like to see continue, but it was the perfect time for the end. In short, I really liked it.