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I am enjoying the story so far, but once I got to the 60th [or so] chapter, it prompted me to buy the rest of the book. I usually like to buy chqpters as I go.Is there a way to do so, or do I not have any option but to buy the rest of the chapters at once?
I was locked in it make me stop reading what I was reading before but the more I read the more I love it
not bad.. not bad at all.. we need more like this 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
This novel as so much potentials but it’s completely wasted. The writing may not be the best but the story’s interesting and same for the MC. But all these points are all wasted because the novel’s not finish and there a repeting chapter constantly. I don’t know why the autor stopped but it’s such a shame.
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I belive this story is around a 4 out of 5., Mostly because of the lack of explaining something’s, such as you stated something about humans being enticing, and the mc would feel pain from normal food.. But then it was not mentioned again, at least not mentioned to around chapter 60.. I’m not sure if it gets mentioned, but I’m assuming not.. But either way the story is great but a little slow..
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A ton of usless info. I am on like chapter 60 he still a kid like 1 years old or about that much. The quality of the writing isnt the best eather the onky good thing that i found is the updateing stability thats why this has 2 stars.
this novel is dumb and it makes you aggravated from the actions of the mc and the writing quality since the chapters are short and the author always puts useless info in there to make it longer.
Ok before writing this review, I read other reviews and there was a lot of not soo good comments, so first of all let's give my review. I can say this novel has too much big grammar, I can barely understand, I mean all kinds of people are going to read this novel, like those of a young age like me who can barely understand such grammars. I will say though author you have a wild imagination. There are just a few speck you can do to your writing: like make it in your own in a unique way, don't put too much things we see in other reincarnation novels, (better create) or change so it won't look like a FAN-FICTION. Try to change a few specks to the scene, but this novel is on the right direction. I'm sure u can be better. Also please do decrease the grammar a bit. *cough* 😓 I have to google to understand.👍
Wah!...... I am in chaper no 59 and this story is pretty good. The MC is able to live in a dark type world and able to defeat all the enemy's, that's the reson i said 'wah' in the start, keep improving and please update the world backround little bit.....
Alright, i droped this at chapter 22, why you can ask ? (some spoiler ahead ) Well it's simple and i think i'm not the only one who droped the story before it even really begin : The author made the mc too dumb (probably to make more chacarter developement later) , he doesn't make any rationals choices and is surprised over logical things everybody know. Let me explain : The mc get reincarnated in another world, (so far so good) but he is born as an half demon, then he get a system. The system force him to become a full fledged demon and he is now full of distrust toward the system. For this he decided... to stop drinking milk ?!? And then he is surprised that he will die in 8 days if he don't get sustainance ? Were you a human in your previous life (he was) or what ? And then just after that (really it should be in the same or next chap) he decide to explore the system and use a technique with the not at all ominous name "Demon might mystic technic" or something like that... And that just one example Bruh Another thing : the complete lack of imagination toward names, father = christopher, mother = chrystie... Still this story has some good points : the grammar, a big number of chapters, and an author who still read the comments of it's firsts chapters. If you can ignore the stupidity of the mc in the intial chapters, this should be your fit if you like demons and stuff (there is only so much i can take) But here is my honest advice to the author that i think could improve the story : First and foremost, rewrite the mc in the first chapters, this story has a lot of potential (just look at the comments) but the mc being dumb cost it too much. In the first twenty chaps, i saw the comments dwindle as i read. I dont know if the author has stats to see how many people read his story but i'm sure 50% of his inital readers (first chap) didnt pass the 20 chapters. Second, make more exotic name or least that don't sound the same (if you don't have any idea, use a generator on internet or just ask your community) And third, more descriptions : what i mean by that for example is the mc second pair of eyes : he get them when he become a full demon but where are they ? On his forehead, temples, cheeks ? Also are they pitch black like his normal eyes ? We don't get anymore info other that he growed a pair of eyes. That's all for me, thanks for the story
Ok so, first off I am still on free chapters, so I do not know the rest but from what I can see is that the story is slow but that is it as well as him being a baby, which is not the kind of thing I like (this is my PERSONAL opinion) I also believe that the world is kind of just ‘kill them they are not like us’ and it is repeating for me Now on to the objective part of the review (I will be using no emoptions for this or at least try not to) great character just can’t do much is very sentimental and wants to help people. Quality and updating stability are both consistent. Overall great book and wish I could spend money on it already, but it isn’t summer for me
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author why she you saying it is an original if it has demon slayer in it?? it can't be an original if you get worlds or characters from somewhere(anime,movies and so on)
look the book is great I'm just tired of authors having the character be a baby for the whole trial read there's no action I know the criticism but I like more action and at least a teenager character
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whats the connection of this story with kimetsu no yaiba? (demon slayer… . . . . . .… . . . . . . . . . .… . . . . . .… . . . . . . . . . . . .
I don't know what it looks like next, but the beginning looks painfully similar to the Supreme Magus, except for a few small changes (like the food-stealing brother being adopted instead of legitimate and magic being less common) in a different world, basically took 90% of what was good in the story and replaced it with bad parts. Sorry, it sounds too negative, but you can tell how I felt reading nearly 50 chapters of this work. Note: I don't know if this qualifies as a spoiler, so I'm putting this just in case. I'm also reading on Google Translator, so I won't be able to identify the quality of the writing, nor do I plan to follow up to see if I meet the post frequency, so I put 3 stars on both to be considered on average.
Revelar spoiler
So this is about our mc that is reincarnated into a demon spawn after being killed by a gang.So our mc first discovers this when he is in a baby body with wings.
There is a story here, however, the writing is very messy and often skips some things. Basically, it needs to be cleaned otherwise you will suffer from headaches when reading this.
Would be better if the reader didn’t Have to go tru everyday of a babies life to get some action story has massive Potential But it just doesn’t Deliver on the action very slow story development for now I’m Dropping This until it picks up
read 4 chapters and the grammar is extremely bad, can hardly understand anything that's happening because there are grammar mistakes literally everywhere, and yet he begs for golden tickets in the beggining, from the good reviews I've seen about flowing grammar and writing structure, I can tell he 1. deletes reviews or 2. writes his own reviews with different accounts, I cannot stress enough about how awful the grammar is, the story so far and how it's conveyed is great and character's feel like they have personality already... but the grammar ruins it all
The slowest fanfic I've ever seen, I think it's absurd for a fanfic to be so slow, at this rate how many chapters will have 10,000, if the author doesn't give up. Google translator
Good grammar and world development, I'm caught up in the story even though it's still in the baby phase. ..............................................................
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Since my previous review was deleted and I woke up like 5 minutes ago I will keep this short and simple. Characters: Entertaining and fleshed out. Chapter length: Just right. Story progression: A bit slow but completely fine. Thank you for letting me know that my previous review got deleted author sama. I highly recommend to new readers.
Interestiny characters and a non invasive system. what more could you want
The book is very nice to read. There are typos and grammar errors here and there, but that's every book. The story development is slow paced, but I like it like this. The MC is only a couple of months old as of now but hasn't made some astronomical growth in little time. I like the pacing because a lot of slow pace novels just have fast development of characters and/or powers with a slow story, but this one actually takes it slow. I havent seen Eternals but this barely feels like a fanfiction and more like an actual story. Some characters are a bit undeveloped like the MC's two sisters but I can relate to the characters although there has only been a few. The world background, well its a fanfiction so we don't really need it.
When it’s 50% off because it hasn’t been touched in over a year. No but seriously I’m halfway through it and he still just a demon. When is the tri going to kick in.
I am enjoying the story so far, but once I got to the 60th [or so] chapter, it prompted me to buy the rest of the book. I usually like to buy chqpters as I go.Is there a way to do so, or do I not have any option but to buy the rest of the chapters at once?
I was locked in it make me stop reading what I was reading before but the more I read the more I love it
not bad.. not bad at all.. we need more like this 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
This novel as so much potentials but it’s completely wasted. The writing may not be the best but the story’s interesting and same for the MC. But all these points are all wasted because the novel’s not finish and there a repeting chapter constantly. I don’t know why the autor stopped but it’s such a shame.
[img=recommend] I really [img=update] to read about this story!!!!! I highly recommend this book to anyone who likes story's with systems in it
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I belive this story is around a 4 out of 5., Mostly because of the lack of explaining something’s, such as you stated something about humans being enticing, and the mc would feel pain from normal food.. But then it was not mentioned again, at least not mentioned to around chapter 60.. I’m not sure if it gets mentioned, but I’m assuming not.. But either way the story is great but a little slow..
Revelar spoiler A ton of usless info. I am on like chapter 60 he still a kid like 1 years old or about that much. The quality of the writing isnt the best eather the onky good thing that i found is the updateing stability thats why this has 2 stars.
this novel is dumb and it makes you aggravated from the actions of the mc and the writing quality since the chapters are short and the author always puts useless info in there to make it longer.
Ok before writing this review, I read other reviews and there was a lot of not soo good comments, so first of all let's give my review. I can say this novel has too much big grammar, I can barely understand, I mean all kinds of people are going to read this novel, like those of a young age like me who can barely understand such grammars. I will say though author you have a wild imagination. There are just a few speck you can do to your writing: like make it in your own in a unique way, don't put too much things we see in other reincarnation novels, (better create) or change so it won't look like a FAN-FICTION. Try to change a few specks to the scene, but this novel is on the right direction. I'm sure u can be better. Also please do decrease the grammar a bit. *cough* 😓 I have to google to understand.👍
Wah!...... I am in chaper no 59 and this story is pretty good. The MC is able to live in a dark type world and able to defeat all the enemy's, that's the reson i said 'wah' in the start, keep improving and please update the world backround little bit.....
Alright, i droped this at chapter 22, why you can ask ? (some spoiler ahead ) Well it's simple and i think i'm not the only one who droped the story before it even really begin : The author made the mc too dumb (probably to make more chacarter developement later) , he doesn't make any rationals choices and is surprised over logical things everybody know. Let me explain : The mc get reincarnated in another world, (so far so good) but he is born as an half demon, then he get a system. The system force him to become a full fledged demon and he is now full of distrust toward the system. For this he decided... to stop drinking milk ?!? And then he is surprised that he will die in 8 days if he don't get sustainance ? Were you a human in your previous life (he was) or what ? And then just after that (really it should be in the same or next chap) he decide to explore the system and use a technique with the not at all ominous name "Demon might mystic technic" or something like that... And that just one example Bruh Another thing : the complete lack of imagination toward names, father = christopher, mother = chrystie... Still this story has some good points : the grammar, a big number of chapters, and an author who still read the comments of it's firsts chapters. If you can ignore the stupidity of the mc in the intial chapters, this should be your fit if you like demons and stuff (there is only so much i can take) But here is my honest advice to the author that i think could improve the story : First and foremost, rewrite the mc in the first chapters, this story has a lot of potential (just look at the comments) but the mc being dumb cost it too much. In the first twenty chaps, i saw the comments dwindle as i read. I dont know if the author has stats to see how many people read his story but i'm sure 50% of his inital readers (first chap) didnt pass the 20 chapters. Second, make more exotic name or least that don't sound the same (if you don't have any idea, use a generator on internet or just ask your community) And third, more descriptions : what i mean by that for example is the mc second pair of eyes : he get them when he become a full demon but where are they ? On his forehead, temples, cheeks ? Also are they pitch black like his normal eyes ? We don't get anymore info other that he growed a pair of eyes. That's all for me, thanks for the story
Ok so, first off I am still on free chapters, so I do not know the rest but from what I can see is that the story is slow but that is it as well as him being a baby, which is not the kind of thing I like (this is my PERSONAL opinion) I also believe that the world is kind of just ‘kill them they are not like us’ and it is repeating for me Now on to the objective part of the review (I will be using no emoptions for this or at least try not to) great character just can’t do much is very sentimental and wants to help people. Quality and updating stability are both consistent. Overall great book and wish I could spend money on it already, but it isn’t summer for me
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author why she you saying it is an original if it has demon slayer in it?? it can't be an original if you get worlds or characters from somewhere(anime,movies and so on)
look the book is great I'm just tired of authors having the character be a baby for the whole trial read there's no action I know the criticism but I like more action and at least a teenager character
Revelar spoiler whats the connection of this story with kimetsu no yaiba? (demon slayer… . . . . . .… . . . . . . . . . .… . . . . . .… . . . . . . . . . . . .
I don't know what it looks like next, but the beginning looks painfully similar to the Supreme Magus, except for a few small changes (like the food-stealing brother being adopted instead of legitimate and magic being less common) in a different world, basically took 90% of what was good in the story and replaced it with bad parts. Sorry, it sounds too negative, but you can tell how I felt reading nearly 50 chapters of this work. Note: I don't know if this qualifies as a spoiler, so I'm putting this just in case. I'm also reading on Google Translator, so I won't be able to identify the quality of the writing, nor do I plan to follow up to see if I meet the post frequency, so I put 3 stars on both to be considered on average.
Revelar spoiler So this is about our mc that is reincarnated into a demon spawn after being killed by a gang.So our mc first discovers this when he is in a baby body with wings.
There is a story here, however, the writing is very messy and often skips some things. Basically, it needs to be cleaned otherwise you will suffer from headaches when reading this.
Would be better if the reader didn’t Have to go tru everyday of a babies life to get some action story has massive Potential But it just doesn’t Deliver on the action very slow story development for now I’m Dropping This until it picks up
read 4 chapters and the grammar is extremely bad, can hardly understand anything that's happening because there are grammar mistakes literally everywhere, and yet he begs for golden tickets in the beggining, from the good reviews I've seen about flowing grammar and writing structure, I can tell he 1. deletes reviews or 2. writes his own reviews with different accounts, I cannot stress enough about how awful the grammar is, the story so far and how it's conveyed is great and character's feel like they have personality already... but the grammar ruins it all
The slowest fanfic I've ever seen, I think it's absurd for a fanfic to be so slow, at this rate how many chapters will have 10,000, if the author doesn't give up. Google translator
Good grammar and world development, I'm caught up in the story even though it's still in the baby phase. ..............................................................
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Since my previous review was deleted and I woke up like 5 minutes ago I will keep this short and simple. Characters: Entertaining and fleshed out. Chapter length: Just right. Story progression: A bit slow but completely fine. Thank you for letting me know that my previous review got deleted author sama. I highly recommend to new readers.
Interestiny characters and a non invasive system. what more could you want
The book is very nice to read. There are typos and grammar errors here and there, but that's every book. The story development is slow paced, but I like it like this. The MC is only a couple of months old as of now but hasn't made some astronomical growth in little time. I like the pacing because a lot of slow pace novels just have fast development of characters and/or powers with a slow story, but this one actually takes it slow. I havent seen Eternals but this barely feels like a fanfiction and more like an actual story. Some characters are a bit undeveloped like the MC's two sisters but I can relate to the characters although there has only been a few. The world background, well its a fanfiction so we don't really need it.
When it’s 50% off because it hasn’t been touched in over a year. No but seriously I’m halfway through it and he still just a demon. When is the tri going to kick in.