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It's a good fanfic, with good vocabulary, using various expressions and words, not just the same set over and over again. (Bear in mind that the author uses his phone to make this, not a computer, making it harder) in the grammar was the punctuation (overly using "," instead of proper points ".") The only mistakes I found which he could have used more to separate sentences and how he sometimes forgets to put capital letters after punctuation and the beginning of paragraphs and dialogues. The paragraphs are structured well enough. I would suggest Grammarly to correct some mistakes, it's a really convenient tool. The story has an original beginning (in the DB world) and a nice plot overall. The human as a choice of race is always cool since it forces the protagonist to not rely on OP transformations, so it's nice. For all fans of Dragon Ball, It's worth reading.
this story is good so far and I'm looking forward for more chapters and how the story will progress. please keep up the good work cuz I don't want see this dropped.
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Am not someone that gives perfect reviews but this should be perfect enough. Anyway let's talk about this fic shall we?. It has it flaws as I know most of the other readers know. The Grammer and use of words is quite decent but it needs heavy work that am sure the author can work on. The plot right now doesn't have much... how can I say this... 'Impact' so to say. I can also see that the author is not going for the op from the start as and actually wants the mc to be strong but not overly so. And with what am seeing as of now I hope new and interesting antagonists appear and not make the story boring... -From your one and only Boltzthe one.
The only really interesting thing so far was the clan and thAt was destroyed in the first couple chapters everything else is basic dragon ball fanfic stuff nothing really different so it a ok read if your bored
different with another dragonball fanfic, i love it. mc not a saiyan is really good idea and you dont make another cliche novel. fighting!! fighting fighting!!!
3,8/5 for now (chapter 12) Pace is very fast and a bit plot armored, the wish are ok since he didn't get a huge cheat from the beginning (i am considering the lvl of power of the bad guy in the end the manga, MC is not overcheated right now but still strong ). I think that 13 years before the start is a bit too much because he will already be an adult if compare with goku/krilin and you miss the opportinity of making the mc train under Master Roshi with goku/krilin/yamcha but why not . Finally, the fact that he already know the plot of dragonBall isn't really impactfull for now, and i think that's a bit sad considering it's a reincarnation fanfic hope it was readable , have a nice day , see ya
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the fic is awesome its not going for the character being super overpowered right off the start and the story is already good enough and different from the other DragonBall fics which makes it so much better can't wait for more keep up the great work😆😆
well let's see here. Writing quality: I will like to say am pretty decent for someone that is typing on a phone. Story development: Right now I think it's going in a slow/normal pace from what the readers are saying. World background: it's dragonball with a bit of au here and there. Updating stability: well am about to start getting busy irl but if time allows, I can post at least three to five chapters a week, oh and I won't be posting on weekends but expect them on weekdays. A more detailed explanation of the mc and how stuff came to be: mc is a normal with an abnormal mind that lets him understand/ learn stuff at a rapid pace, after some stuff he answers some questions on a questionare that appeared on his PC not knowing that it was going to come true after dieing in his sleep and appearing in the dragonball world. Read the book if you wanna know the "stupid wishes" made my the mc :/ Btw who is everybody's fav dragonball character and waifu.
It's a good fanfic, with good vocabulary, using various expressions and words, not just the same set over and over again. (Bear in mind that the author uses his phone to make this, not a computer, making it harder) in the grammar was the punctuation (overly using "," instead of proper points ".") The only mistakes I found which he could have used more to separate sentences and how he sometimes forgets to put capital letters after punctuation and the beginning of paragraphs and dialogues. The paragraphs are structured well enough. I would suggest Grammarly to correct some mistakes, it's a really convenient tool. The story has an original beginning (in the DB world) and a nice plot overall. The human as a choice of race is always cool since it forces the protagonist to not rely on OP transformations, so it's nice. For all fans of Dragon Ball, It's worth reading.
this story is good so far and I'm looking forward for more chapters and how the story will progress. please keep up the good work cuz I don't want see this dropped.
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Am not someone that gives perfect reviews but this should be perfect enough. Anyway let's talk about this fic shall we?. It has it flaws as I know most of the other readers know. The Grammer and use of words is quite decent but it needs heavy work that am sure the author can work on. The plot right now doesn't have much... how can I say this... 'Impact' so to say. I can also see that the author is not going for the op from the start as and actually wants the mc to be strong but not overly so. And with what am seeing as of now I hope new and interesting antagonists appear and not make the story boring... -From your one and only Boltzthe one.
The only really interesting thing so far was the clan and thAt was destroyed in the first couple chapters everything else is basic dragon ball fanfic stuff nothing really different so it a ok read if your bored
different with another dragonball fanfic, i love it. mc not a saiyan is really good idea and you dont make another cliche novel. fighting!! fighting fighting!!!
3,8/5 for now (chapter 12) Pace is very fast and a bit plot armored, the wish are ok since he didn't get a huge cheat from the beginning (i am considering the lvl of power of the bad guy in the end the manga, MC is not overcheated right now but still strong ). I think that 13 years before the start is a bit too much because he will already be an adult if compare with goku/krilin and you miss the opportinity of making the mc train under Master Roshi with goku/krilin/yamcha but why not . Finally, the fact that he already know the plot of dragonBall isn't really impactfull for now, and i think that's a bit sad considering it's a reincarnation fanfic hope it was readable , have a nice day , see ya
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the fic is awesome its not going for the character being super overpowered right off the start and the story is already good enough and different from the other DragonBall fics which makes it so much better can't wait for more keep up the great work😆😆
well let's see here. Writing quality: I will like to say am pretty decent for someone that is typing on a phone. Story development: Right now I think it's going in a slow/normal pace from what the readers are saying. World background: it's dragonball with a bit of au here and there. Updating stability: well am about to start getting busy irl but if time allows, I can post at least three to five chapters a week, oh and I won't be posting on weekends but expect them on weekdays. A more detailed explanation of the mc and how stuff came to be: mc is a normal with an abnormal mind that lets him understand/ learn stuff at a rapid pace, after some stuff he answers some questions on a questionare that appeared on his PC not knowing that it was going to come true after dieing in his sleep and appearing in the dragonball world. Read the book if you wanna know the "stupid wishes" made my the mc :/ Btw who is everybody's fav dragonball character and waifu.