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the story is good but with so many time skips and overpowered abilities, it lost a lot of its good points. Lower the use 3rd person to make the readers relate to the characters more and have the characters interact more to increase relatability to the readers but the idea is great and can be developed to greater heights.
Writing can improve but what caught me was the intimacy after marriage. Hardly see any stories like that nowadays and I share the same sentiments as author. Nice to see it.
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I love it.. love your novel.. i have this feeling that feeling.. plzzz dont drop this novel.. if the mc is becoming to over power then bring the BIG GUYS the cosmic being, celestials, eternals, realm lords, and more into the mix. There are a lot of cosmic event that happen in the MCU not just avengers.. why not bring a cosmic war and a conspiracy of all the dark lord to bring chaos. Or make a new plot to your liking in the story. You dont have to follow the comics and create your own event just make sure to that the character is represent well from characteristics and power.. writing your own event... Hahahahha im just babbling but well you consider. Love you novel... Most fanfic is limits there imagination there is a wall called avengers only.... But im still loving this novel... U got my vote...
The writing is so bad, that words get replaced. from=front , from=?? Arrogant,shameless author. too many emojis and incoherent mess of words The power of wells is strong in this one how many dialogues start with "well"? sometimes btw does not mean btw Author likes to add a few words of his own on each chapter without actually separating it with at least a cursive or bold text, making everyone think it is part of the chapter. Slow progress MC has wood attribute and eidetic memory, japanese protagonist sissy attitude when it comes to women and likes to wait several centuries, ignores his woman for long periods of time and expects her to not be mad, stupid and stubborn and many more faults
i enjoy it reading it but emoji fcked it up for me...i stop reading it at chap 8, might continued reading it in the future or might not.....
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Havent read yet but concepT iS very original and creative so i think ill enjoy this C B bc Bc
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For your first story this is not that bad, we can see that your improving with each chapter the only thing that I would say need major improvement is your character designs you need to give them more interactions with your mc like thor for example could have been done better more integrations with the mc like when he fought odin and showed his "True" power I thought there would be a chapter where to see how thor would react instead you rushed passed it with a time skip. (But any way the stroy is great start so you get a 4 stars from me :D)
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1.the writing is bad 2.is a pointless story .... the rest is just below average⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀
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I'm loving it although it fast it's very fast it's flash fast it's god of speed fast I crossing I'm I'm crossing hundreds of years in the blink of an eye and theme that is even faster than the speed of light like I got your last chapter I started from the first one under 30 minutes
the story is good but with so many time skips and overpowered abilities, it lost a lot of its good points. Lower the use 3rd person to make the readers relate to the characters more and have the characters interact more to increase relatability to the readers but the idea is great and can be developed to greater heights.
Writing can improve but what caught me was the intimacy after marriage. Hardly see any stories like that nowadays and I share the same sentiments as author. Nice to see it.
Revelar spoiler I love it.. love your novel.. i have this feeling that feeling.. plzzz dont drop this novel.. if the mc is becoming to over power then bring the BIG GUYS the cosmic being, celestials, eternals, realm lords, and more into the mix. There are a lot of cosmic event that happen in the MCU not just avengers.. why not bring a cosmic war and a conspiracy of all the dark lord to bring chaos. Or make a new plot to your liking in the story. You dont have to follow the comics and create your own event just make sure to that the character is represent well from characteristics and power.. writing your own event... Hahahahha im just babbling but well you consider. Love you novel... Most fanfic is limits there imagination there is a wall called avengers only.... But im still loving this novel... U got my vote...
The writing is so bad, that words get replaced. from=front , from=?? Arrogant,shameless author. too many emojis and incoherent mess of words The power of wells is strong in this one how many dialogues start with "well"? sometimes btw does not mean btw Author likes to add a few words of his own on each chapter without actually separating it with at least a cursive or bold text, making everyone think it is part of the chapter. Slow progress MC has wood attribute and eidetic memory, japanese protagonist sissy attitude when it comes to women and likes to wait several centuries, ignores his woman for long periods of time and expects her to not be mad, stupid and stubborn and many more faults
i enjoy it reading it but emoji fcked it up for me...i stop reading it at chap 8, might continued reading it in the future or might not.....
Yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yup yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yup yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes yes I yes yup yup yes
Havent read yet but concepT iS very original and creative so i think ill enjoy this C B bc Bc
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For your first story this is not that bad, we can see that your improving with each chapter the only thing that I would say need major improvement is your character designs you need to give them more interactions with your mc like thor for example could have been done better more integrations with the mc like when he fought odin and showed his "True" power I thought there would be a chapter where to see how thor would react instead you rushed passed it with a time skip. (But any way the stroy is great start so you get a 4 stars from me :D)
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1.the writing is bad 2.is a pointless story .... the rest is just below average⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀⠀
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I'm loving it although it fast it's very fast it's flash fast it's god of speed fast I crossing I'm I'm crossing hundreds of years in the blink of an eye and theme that is even faster than the speed of light like I got your last chapter I started from the first one under 30 minutes