Ozania Odyssey

Incredible Incredible story. I like the characters, all of them. Navar is a great protagonist, I just like the vibe he gives off as a character. Then you have Miri and Jax who are also great counterparts to Navar's character. The worldbuilding is also great, there's so much to know and learn and I take it there's a TON of lore left to explore. With all that being said I do think there are a few tweaks you can make that would turn this from Great to Masterpiece. First, I suggest using a paragraph or more spaced out format. Some people find it hard to follow writers who jumble the whole entire paragraph into one. Another problem is the dialogue can feel repetive from time to time. Other than that, I'm liking how this story's looking. Keep it up👍💯

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Daniel_Lane_4048

This is where I think my story is currently at. Also I'd like to add chapters will be added on here weekly rather than daily. If you have any constructive criticism or positive comments I will take them. Thanks🙏

very good i like the story and the caracters in the story its good pacing to my favorite caracter would be navar i like how he thinks and makes decisions thats all for me

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purgism

incredible opening to the story. it has an incredibly promising plot with great character dialogue. so far i have no complaints and i hope the ending is just as satisfying.

Wow, I'm thoroughly impressed by the quality of this novel. Great characters all around and a mesmerizing concept of world building that's pulled off greatly. This feels like a shonen manga with a touch of your superhero comic book. It's a great blend. I'm going to be amped up to read more!

Overall I really love the story and the development in each character. I can perfectly picture everything as I’m reading the story. Keep up the great work bro, much love.