"They're everywhere! They're out for blood," one of the mages cried.
"We can't hold on much longer."
"What was that shaking?"
"The moon, look at the moon!"
Magic: mysterious or supernatural forces influencing a course of events. Decades of arcane practice could not begin to explain, in Lance's mind, the unnatural phenomenon unfolding before his very eyes. It was as if he had stepped into an ancient epic, a myth. Hordes of demons, frothing at the mouth, flew through the gaping hole in the ceiling and were silhouetted by bloody moonlight.
"All units, charge!" Zolgon bellowed. "I want every angle to be swarming with my army! Those damned crystal barricades can no longer stop us! Make them suffer! Make them pay! The Head Mage was just a start!"
I know I am bad at multiple viewpoints (Seriously, REALLY bad). I still have a long way to go. If I was SUPER good at them, I would be able to intertwine Doevm's fight with the Grand Shaman, the Demi's battle with the demon horde, and the group of surviving mages because they are all happening at relatively the same time. Kind of like in avatar: the last airbender with the last episodes. The frustrating part is that this is my practice, but I still have to write a good book. I want to end this arc with a bang and go onto the next, and practice some more. That's why I wrote over the original chapter. If you didn't know, the first draft was essentially a flashback, instead of adding on to events that already happened. I reject my weakness. I won't let it hold me back anymore.
If you have any questions, let me know.