The Universal Villain[Old]

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TOFIE

[Reveiw from Ch 36.] This Novel Should be called. " The Interfering Attention Seeker." Why? Let me explain. We have someone who finds himself in a new world, And then figures out he is in an anime. What does he do well the first moments of his life in this world. He on the spot decides to become the Villan? Why? There is no reason he just decides to be the villan of the Bleach story for no reason at all. This is what makes a beta Villan in my books. And this Mc is a Japanese Beta in my mind, He has not motivation and what makes an effective villan is their motivation. The Mc dosen't have that. And he has a system which makes him less intelligent and non inspiring from these aspects. I can tell the Authour has no goal and is on acid while using his Mc for the power trip. There is no plot in this story aswell. Every single goddamn interaction and action the Mc makes is following canon, but he interferes with every important scene involving Ichigo, so he gets the protaginist spot light. The Menos invasion in the human world, Rukia being taken by her brother and Renji, The soul society rukia arc. Every single important event, This Beta ass interferes just for the spot light and to what prove that he is a villan. Listen. And I mean listen, I've read my shares of novels on this site and I can tell you 80 percent of the Authours don't have the balls to create official terrifying villans, The only impulsive emotion you can bring out from readers on this site to make them hate your novel" Is for your Mc to get cucked" Why? Because the people on this site are possesive and want to feel in power and this is exactly what you need to understand about human beings when writing villans they have triggers. And for you to create this Attention Seeking Villan is blashphemy and Humouring to me, because I could already categorize your work below Chinese fanfictions and that's making a point. You have a Main character with no motivation thrown into a new world where he mysteriously can over power people, because of a system and I already know where you got this inspiration from. Xenoverse the game. Everything works out for him, How? Don't know, Is he some sort of stalker who already knows the events and is just waiting for whenever Ichigos screen time just to pop in. Yep, That's what he is an Ichigo stalker who dosen't know what villanous actions to take besides looking for the next Ichigo route to follow. Honestly, You are lazy and just following canon, but placing in your very ******* villany twists where he just steals the moments of every fucking thing. You didn't give him his own ambition to work to. What he will grow stronger then what? Play your petty manipulations in the story to make him seem more well cemented as a wannabe villan. He has not done a single action which leads him to being someone hateful and the fact you also downgrade Aizen character making him seem manipulative when he is just someone pulled out from a cliche Pg rated Marvel comic makes me wonder. What is wrong with this site. Fanfiction.net is good, because the authours are not afraid, despite having bad grammar and bad plotting. They atleast have the balls to do very terrible things, but your main character, no. You. You have no balls and no spice. The only reason you make your character follow Ichigo has nothing to do with plot, but because you are narrow minded with no imagination, because the very moment Ichigo dies you don't know what else to right, because he is the main character. This bull**** with. " Oh no I am going wait till you grow then when you are like the future self I know, then it will be the ultimate battle for Xp and Sp." ??? [ oh, please.] Go watch some hentai or some ****, Like seriously I request you do and fill your mind with filfthy thoughts to blackened your mental state. Why? Because the villans in those videos are real, I'm sorry do you read the garbage you write, because I do and judging by the later chapters and their shorten words. You are a lazy parasite What your Main character does in 35 chapters. A villan in some hentai video gets his **** down in 4 seconds of rape. When your character has not done a single thing. For future readers who are actually looking for a piece of fresh air. You will not find it here. this story is lighthearted and has nothing to do with villans. It's hopless and I've given up. This a tale of an Attention Seeker with the Dragon Ball system in a bleach world doing child play villany.. I'm sorry thats the entire summary of this story. Anyone saying, Sir this is to harsh, The Authour won't grow from this review. Shut up. Lietrally, Do you think I care wether he improves or not? People write **** and don't put much thought into their writing. [ But it's only a fanfiction, I am not even trying.] Fanfiction or Original, The fact you never put any effort into your work shows your slotful nature. I don't care wether you improve or not, You wrote something and I critic it to my likings. I hate your novel, because you didn't deliver and here is the consequence of your actions. If I were to rewrite this story. I would kill your main character and inlist a hentai villan into this story, because he will have ambition, sure it's unethical and morally unacceptable to Webnovels standards, but anything than your lowzy lazy Main character who gets **** no from his intelligence or hard work, but from a system that provides him everything. Cut the system from his life and he is nothing more than an average human. With no powers. Do you understand? Without the system your Mc has no qualities to himself, He will be nothing more than a person day dreaming of being a villan. And do you realise that humans who actually day dream of killing people in my opinion is more sinister than your toad mc. Have a think about it, People are violent and they don't need some wannabe anime or event to be the dark ****ts I know they can be. [ Delete this review. And I will just post it up again. After all I have taken the time out of my life to review this story. So, delete it and I will be just like your dumb protaginist an interfering attention seeker.]

LV 14

50ShadesOfAss

Evil Mc , isn’t afraid to kill or change the plot , not a wuss and doesn’t waste system points on dumb pointless abilities 👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼😈

LV 3

Voltigod

What a great fanfic, I really REALLY LIKE IT. I will never forgive you if you drop this since this fanfic is godsent aka perfect. Anyway 5 stars, obviously, no thinking regarding that. Peace out

LV 4

MALAKITITI

Mc is just a brat that likes to get attention so much. The fvk with this title universal villain?? He's just like the villain in Pokemon team rocket. Fvking lame .

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AdrianVeidt

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LV 3

DG2

This story is one of the better ones. It flows rather well and has everything building up linearly. My problems would have to be how the MC doesn't ever use this worlds powers. Instead he uses stupid DBZ OPness to win battles all the time. It takes all the ******* out of the story when the MC can out maneuver even Aizen and defeat captains in less than a month. He doesn't even train his powers and only grinds for xp. Honestly my expectations are rather satisfied for this kind of fic. It's a wish-fulfillment and a good one at that. I only hoped the author took more time to make his writing more detailed and believable.

LV 12

leo26

So far it's good and I am also interested in seeing how he will be in the future.Man I hope he becomes like Aizen.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍

LV 10

Primordial_Phoenix

I don't know why people got so mad with the MC not being super super evil People need to calm the f*** down the world is not black and white there's different tiers of evil and good people not every villain is a psycho rapist that kills every single person he comes by and not every hero or good person is going to help everybody no matter the situation It's not a terrible novel was not my taste though cuz I prefer good MCs over bad ones but it's definitely not terrible some people just need to calm down

LV 4

Movezbatch

It's disturbing how amazingly stupid mc is. He is like a 3rd rite villain but worse. I don't mind evil mc I actually like it but this is just cartoon level dumbness. Fights are drawn long, lots of fillers and most certainly mc is really badly written.

LV 10

dealylazer

Hello, First of all, the writing quality and stability of the fanfic are excellent (1 chap per day, notices when the author is not uploading chapters, etc). But i have several problems with a couple of things, lots of canon characters are in a way that seems to me not natural, for example, the captain of the first division, for me him deciding to not interfere in the final battle seems a lot, not cannon (in the battle against Aizen he acted but still not used it's Bankai, the captain had always a twisted sense of balance between worlds, he would definitely interfere and make sure that the threat is eliminated even if it meant killing himself, 2-3 captains. Another thing the World Background is definitely nonexistent, don't tell me he didn't see things that were not present in the manga or anime because a world like bleach is pretty large and has multiple dimensions . I don't know if it's a lack of imagination or a lack of determination and honestly, it's a shame because having a beautiful background story to the world would add urgency to the hero and a twisted sense of accomplishment to the villain. However, the author has made really good use of powers and reaction to it . But for me, it lacks depth. It still needs works but it's a good start.

LV 5

_Kaitlin_

Duh, duh, duh! I love it! BOOM! I love it! It’s on a different plane! It’s not even close to space! I am addicted to this lore! I got no time to waste! I must read it! I must read it all! SO GOOD! Thanks author!!

LV 4

GreedAF

I LOVE IT, I LOVE MC, but the part about being so cold when killing and don't giving a **** about others is bad but good at the same time...hmmm... maybe a companion could balance it... not that typical companion just a side character like a underling or minion maybe a little closer

LV 1

Master_Of_gu

One day evil will spread in the fictional world as it prevailed in reality hahahaha good novel it was fun frankly, you have to reduce the powers of the hero it is too much, a lot of supernatural abilities leads to confusion, thanks for your hard work the most important thing is that the hero is evil, because it will cover the story Even if it's bad

LV 3

FlipFlopFckBoy

I simply like this, except for its update rates. If you grown tired with a heroic MC, protected by countless plot armor, while filled with cliche abusive plot. Then try this one. This fanfic really freshen up your reading taste, while also make you feel harder to find an enjoyable fanfics lmao.

LV 2

Carla_Santos

Great fanfic . The thing i love most about it is that the mc is evil The updatings could be a litle quicker but its a good fanfic none the same Keep up the good work 😇

LV 5

_Kaitlin_

This book is like a beautiful chorus of heavenly beings singing “Aw!” I love every bit of it! It seems to be well paced an the details aren’t just thrown at your face all at once. It gives you time to adjust. It also gives you plenty of world knowledge so even a newb can understand this.

LV 4

Vitor_Gamer_Br

🤗😍🤗😋🤗😍🤗😍🤗😊🤗🤗😋😴😍😋😋🤗😋🤗😊🤗😊😊😴😴😊😋😅😋🤗😋🤗😋🤗😋🤗😋🤗😋🤗😋🤗😍🤗😍🤗😊🤗😍🤗😊😍🤗😍🤗😍😅😋🤗😋🤗😋🤗😋🤗😋🤗😋🤗😋😅😋🤗😍

LV 4

Luciel

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