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if the author writes some kind of fanfiction, I recommend not including the multiverse. Forces and abilities from other worlds do not allow you to feel the atmosphere of the world and greatly spoil the balance. And calling characters from anime, manga or movies completely spoils the novel. (English is not my native language)
The grammar is not that bad, the story seems to be interesting, but it's really hard, almost impossible to read it. Why? The author notes in every second paragraph - they are breaking the immersion and flow of this fanfic.
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
I only liked 1st chapter.. about rest it gets Creepy would be a good word as you read chps.. On ch2 author fked low key , no 12yr interaction , and made him too Op for 12 yr old.... On CH3 mc starts bootlicking nieli even when he doesn't gain anything. rest chps are forced plot development.. so I dropped 😖😖😖
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Hate the MC I was promised an OP MC. Do you even know what that means. He is a scaredy cat who is cocky infront of weaker oponnents. Hate him even Nei lie himself is more OP than him in the original.
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That was great If this could continue until he goes through the Naruto, Bleach and DBZ worlds, and maybe the strongest system, then the story would be epic :) Hope this still continues considering how awesome it’s been so far!!!
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To the author I know it's tough to put your thoughts to paper and I also know it is even harder to put up with all the TROLLS THAT THINK THEY HAVE A SAY IN WHAT YOU ARE WRITING!!!!!!!! But I want say thank you for the story you are making and good for you in showing your work!!!!
It's a good novel but the thing with his wife reincarnating along him is a little bad but the main problem is his little sister I mean like every novel has a little sister or an older one who do nothing while mc is the only one taking the burden if there was a brother younger or older he would at strive to shoulder the mc's burden
Latest chapter truly evoke a lot of drama... Although I have to say that LongTian is too harsh on XiaQingYue... First, they are in the wrong here. Then killing without batting an eye is more common than breathing in ATGverse. Also he is punishing her with future stuff that he could easily change with a little nudge here and there like always. In case you need example, his first original Tales of Demon and God world? Hello?.. That is one prime example of him changing fate of ENTIRE WORLD by nudging fate to the right person earlier and smoothen their path... Hitting QingYue is so not you, author mate.. You are the one who write this story, this fanfic of world hopping so you could change their fate, and you just decide to attack QingYue in the first minute? She's a naive little arrogant girl who thought she's the strognest in the town for god sake.. And you are dimension master!! You can alter everyone fate, even knowing about ATG world in and out yet you hit the girl? Come on mate, where is your usual magic of "I'm going to change their fate to better one"?... You had work your magic in TODAG, Martial Universe, and here you suddenly rage like that? I know you can do better mate.. I am writing this here is not to throwing brick at your face, but to remind you that the maim reason you going around world is to amass power and to change the fate of people I'm that universe... Hope you understand what saying here is in good will...
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<3 More please !! Translation/writing excellent. Story also well written, not overly OP just want more. Also like the not too fast and not too slow plot development.
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Honestly, the pacing of the story is ****, the plot half assed at best yet it’s not frustrating or boring to read so read it if you’ve got nothing better to do
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-the story starts okay but a lot of problem occur 1st the story is a little bit fast forward that i think its not showing much character conversation 2nd at the last chapter today (which is 12/26/19) is a little bit weird i mean travelling to another world? Its like the god of the novel is having fun watching their progress but gotten bored at the middle 3rd the opportunities is a too much heaven defying. (on the scale of original novel mc's luck) that his advances is too fast so fight scene is boring -update is slow (and were fine waiting for it) -i have no problem on 1 wife policy of this mc -i dont even know how he apply haki and one piece's sword style on this novel (welp haki and soul cultivation is same but i dont know about op'sword style) -this novel would have a lot of potential if the auther is not fast forwarding and constantly give the opportunities in his travelling [ SOME PROBLEMS MIGHT BE WRONG ON THIS LIST OR I JUST FORGOTTEN THE STORY ]
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I love this story for having no Harem! Being able to read such a fanfiction is true happiness. All stories having Mc's having harems, it's annoying. I'm loving it so far, keep it up. Thank You,
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if the author writes some kind of fanfiction, I recommend not including the multiverse. Forces and abilities from other worlds do not allow you to feel the atmosphere of the world and greatly spoil the balance. And calling characters from anime, manga or movies completely spoils the novel. (English is not my native language)
The grammar is not that bad, the story seems to be interesting, but it's really hard, almost impossible to read it. Why? The author notes in every second paragraph - they are breaking the immersion and flow of this fanfic.
This book is amazing, keep going! Can't stop reading. Can't wait to see more. Do you have any social media that I can follow so I can know when you gonna update?
I only liked 1st chapter.. about rest it gets Creepy would be a good word as you read chps.. On ch2 author fked low key , no 12yr interaction , and made him too Op for 12 yr old.... On CH3 mc starts bootlicking nieli even when he doesn't gain anything. rest chps are forced plot development.. so I dropped 😖😖😖
Revelar spoiler Hate the MC I was promised an OP MC. Do you even know what that means. He is a scaredy cat who is cocky infront of weaker oponnents. Hate him even Nei lie himself is more OP than him in the original.
Hey there! Good day for writing! If you wanted to see whether you can get paid by distributing the current work or getting financial support by writing new work, you might want to contact geekyteddyyo@gmail.com. A brief introduction, some sample chapters or links will be appreciated when reaching out.
That was great If this could continue until he goes through the Naruto, Bleach and DBZ worlds, and maybe the strongest system, then the story would be epic :) Hope this still continues considering how awesome it’s been so far!!!
Dropped it and I will make your luck like s*** for the next 30 Years old 6ljxoudjpxogz9yfgigicifirjdurjfudicurjfigififovifgirigkfigksugkrigjdigkcivkvpb
I am the exp of my Holy Scripture Review. Webnovel is my body, exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless reviews. Unknown to sleep, nor known to reality. I have withstood Cliff-Kun to create many reviews. Yet, these hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray ... Unlimited Exp Works!
I am the exp of my Holy Scripture Review. Webnovel is my body, exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless reviews. Unknown to sleep, nor known to reality. I have withstood Cliff-Kun to create many reviews. Yet, these hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray ... Unlimited Exp Works!
To the author I know it's tough to put your thoughts to paper and I also know it is even harder to put up with all the TROLLS THAT THINK THEY HAVE A SAY IN WHAT YOU ARE WRITING!!!!!!!! But I want say thank you for the story you are making and good for you in showing your work!!!!
It's a good novel but the thing with his wife reincarnating along him is a little bad but the main problem is his little sister I mean like every novel has a little sister or an older one who do nothing while mc is the only one taking the burden if there was a brother younger or older he would at strive to shoulder the mc's burden
Latest chapter truly evoke a lot of drama... Although I have to say that LongTian is too harsh on XiaQingYue... First, they are in the wrong here. Then killing without batting an eye is more common than breathing in ATGverse. Also he is punishing her with future stuff that he could easily change with a little nudge here and there like always. In case you need example, his first original Tales of Demon and God world? Hello?.. That is one prime example of him changing fate of ENTIRE WORLD by nudging fate to the right person earlier and smoothen their path... Hitting QingYue is so not you, author mate.. You are the one who write this story, this fanfic of world hopping so you could change their fate, and you just decide to attack QingYue in the first minute? She's a naive little arrogant girl who thought she's the strognest in the town for god sake.. And you are dimension master!! You can alter everyone fate, even knowing about ATG world in and out yet you hit the girl? Come on mate, where is your usual magic of "I'm going to change their fate to better one"?... You had work your magic in TODAG, Martial Universe, and here you suddenly rage like that? I know you can do better mate.. I am writing this here is not to throwing brick at your face, but to remind you that the maim reason you going around world is to amass power and to change the fate of people I'm that universe... Hope you understand what saying here is in good will...
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Revelar spoiler <3 More please !! Translation/writing excellent. Story also well written, not overly OP just want more. Also like the not too fast and not too slow plot development.
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Honestly, the pacing of the story is ****, the plot half assed at best yet it’s not frustrating or boring to read so read it if you’ve got nothing better to do
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-the story starts okay but a lot of problem occur 1st the story is a little bit fast forward that i think its not showing much character conversation 2nd at the last chapter today (which is 12/26/19) is a little bit weird i mean travelling to another world? Its like the god of the novel is having fun watching their progress but gotten bored at the middle 3rd the opportunities is a too much heaven defying. (on the scale of original novel mc's luck) that his advances is too fast so fight scene is boring -update is slow (and were fine waiting for it) -i have no problem on 1 wife policy of this mc -i dont even know how he apply haki and one piece's sword style on this novel (welp haki and soul cultivation is same but i dont know about op'sword style) -this novel would have a lot of potential if the auther is not fast forwarding and constantly give the opportunities in his travelling [ SOME PROBLEMS MIGHT BE WRONG ON THIS LIST OR I JUST FORGOTTEN THE STORY ]
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Revelar spoiler I love this story for having no Harem! Being able to read such a fanfiction is true happiness. All stories having Mc's having harems, it's annoying. I'm loving it so far, keep it up. Thank You,
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It was enough to pass the time.......... .............................................................. ................................................