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Good novel.................................................................................................................................................................................. ...... ....................... .....................................................................................
昨天莉卡納看著暈過去的斬夜，頓時覺得氣消了一大半，這時才突然發現自己沒有穿衣服，莉卡納臉上通紅，慌忙捂住自己的身體，隨後又想到斬夜已經昏了過去，這才鬆了一口氣，低頭看著斬夜光溜溜的身體，馬上臉上一紅飛快的跑回了房間，穿好衣服之後，過了好一會兒莉卡納才從羞澀中回過神來，可是腦海中卻不自覺得回想斬夜那光溜溜的樣子，莉卡納俏臉通紅一片，可是越是這樣，腦海就越不自覺的回想。
Revelar spoiler 昨天莉卡納看著暈過去的斬夜，頓時覺得氣消了一大半，這時才突然發現自己沒有穿衣服，莉卡納臉上通紅，慌忙捂住自己的身體，隨後又想到斬夜已經昏了過去，這才鬆了一口氣，低頭看著斬夜光溜溜的身體，馬上臉上一紅飛快的跑回了房間，穿好衣服之後，過了好一會兒莉卡納才從羞澀中回過神來，可是腦海中卻不自覺得回想斬夜那光溜溜的樣子，莉卡納俏臉通紅一片，可是越是這樣，腦海就越不自覺的回想。
Revelar spoiler 昨天莉卡納看著暈過去的斬夜，頓時覺得氣消了一大半，這時才突然發現自己沒有穿衣服，莉卡納臉上通紅，慌忙捂住自己的身體，隨後又想到斬夜已經昏了過去，這才鬆了一口氣，低頭看著斬夜光溜溜的身體，馬上臉上一紅飛快的跑回了房間，穿好衣服之後，過了好一會兒莉卡納才從羞澀中回過神來，可是腦海中卻不自覺得回想斬夜那光溜溜的樣子，莉卡納俏臉通紅一片，可是越是這樣，腦海就越不自覺的回想。
Revelar spoiler
Pls, more release...... Pls, more release...... Pls, more release...... Pls, more release...... more update............ dont drop it.............. it has good development, so pls dont drop it..........
One of the best one piece fan fiction #polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly
Well, it's like this since dropped novel! I will change it the moment it's updated! Unfortunately.... Good story which is short-lived! Fanfic after all, it's rare to see finished fanfic!
I freaking love this freaking novel😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P
Write more chapters please 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
Plss update more I really like your story and don't drop it Why it need more word just to write it so I will promote this website http://DoWeeklyWork.com/?userid=51570 Thanks you
It's a good novel, but to slow at update... ...can you make it little faster for the update? Your reader are not patient enough to waiting for 1 chapter each week...
please updated new chapter ... please please please please ....mooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrre eeeeeeeee chapttttttttttteeerrrrrrrrrrr
Fast update plsss the almighty author hhhhhhhh..give more chapteerrrrrr...update sssssssssssssssss... i hope u can update 2 chapter perday mr author...we wait u to comeback to bring our future luffy
dropped ? ....,..........................................??? ?????????????????????????????????? Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Well normally I do not criticize but here goes a very entertaining story I hope you do not let her fall friend , because if you continue I promise that I will drop stones c:
"Good story and background. The mc is op but it's really fun to read. Good luck and I hope you can continue it." - epic_tides What he said as i agree completely, so thanks author for giving us such a wonderful fanfiction.
I absolutely love this novel so I'm giving this a 5 star!!! and some people might not agree and say bull**** and criticise but they should know that they are reading for fun and in my opinion anything for fun and amazing to read like this novel deserves 5 star ;)
Is this story dropped?? I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!!
It's a story of a mc who will deal with yonko and the world governement to woo girls like it is normal to do that xd , if there was a thing i will add it's to take all the beauty of shokugeki no soma in his crew like that can ameliore themselves as he taste tasty food
Revelar spoiler
Good but please don't go around teaching them cultivation and givin them cultivation mantras just Hakirokushiki or sword intent is enough.i know a fanfic novel is better different from original series but havin the entire energy system change even in small number make some bad impression only the mc havin them is enough.no offense man
I know it is unfair to write a bad review only after reading the first four chapters. The story started awesome. A supreme cultivator’s soul fused with a dying earthling. But knowing that he can destroy the whole One Piece world by just regaining a small fraction of his original cultivation, why is he such a sucker for the plot? I’m sure he has more important things to do, such as getting stronger and then revenge. But it seems he is going to redo all the canon Luffy’s adventures. Dropped.
Revelar spoiler
love it<3 .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
good background.Thank you for this story author but please dont leave us hanging after tis googd story pls dont drop it.again thank you very much
this is a great series keep it up---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Author-nim I want to ask.. Are you release this story ini "wattpad" too?? I find your story release in "***.wattpad.com" by _EtramaRaizel_69
That was really great, I love how the story start and continue until now. I have high hope for u n i will support you with **. Thanks for the chapters.
Ok I have nothing to complain about i love it. I really like how you are having the mc training the crew. I have a idea for Nami instead of using science to control the wether have him teach her a dou to do so.
Bagus. Epic. Mcnya tidak menonjolkan kemampuan nya. Kalau bisa alur ceritanya tidak melenceng terlalu jauh. Karena pembaca/penyuka one piece lebih senang kalau ceritanya tetap dialur. Semangat
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Good novel.................................................................................................................................................................................. ...... ....................... .....................................................................................
昨天莉卡納看著暈過去的斬夜，頓時覺得氣消了一大半，這時才突然發現自己沒有穿衣服，莉卡納臉上通紅，慌忙捂住自己的身體，隨後又想到斬夜已經昏了過去，這才鬆了一口氣，低頭看著斬夜光溜溜的身體，馬上臉上一紅飛快的跑回了房間，穿好衣服之後，過了好一會兒莉卡納才從羞澀中回過神來，可是腦海中卻不自覺得回想斬夜那光溜溜的樣子，莉卡納俏臉通紅一片，可是越是這樣，腦海就越不自覺的回想。
Revelar spoiler 昨天莉卡納看著暈過去的斬夜，頓時覺得氣消了一大半，這時才突然發現自己沒有穿衣服，莉卡納臉上通紅，慌忙捂住自己的身體，隨後又想到斬夜已經昏了過去，這才鬆了一口氣，低頭看著斬夜光溜溜的身體，馬上臉上一紅飛快的跑回了房間，穿好衣服之後，過了好一會兒莉卡納才從羞澀中回過神來，可是腦海中卻不自覺得回想斬夜那光溜溜的樣子，莉卡納俏臉通紅一片，可是越是這樣，腦海就越不自覺的回想。
Revelar spoiler 昨天莉卡納看著暈過去的斬夜，頓時覺得氣消了一大半，這時才突然發現自己沒有穿衣服，莉卡納臉上通紅，慌忙捂住自己的身體，隨後又想到斬夜已經昏了過去，這才鬆了一口氣，低頭看著斬夜光溜溜的身體，馬上臉上一紅飛快的跑回了房間，穿好衣服之後，過了好一會兒莉卡納才從羞澀中回過神來，可是腦海中卻不自覺得回想斬夜那光溜溜的樣子，莉卡納俏臉通紅一片，可是越是這樣，腦海就越不自覺的回想。
Revelar spoiler Pls, more release...... Pls, more release...... Pls, more release...... Pls, more release...... more update............ dont drop it.............. it has good development, so pls dont drop it..........
One of the best one piece fan fiction #polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly#polysphere #playgendary #art #poly
Well, it's like this since dropped novel! I will change it the moment it's updated! Unfortunately.... Good story which is short-lived! Fanfic after all, it's rare to see finished fanfic!
I freaking love this freaking novel😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:O:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P:-P
Write more chapters please 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭
Plss update more I really like your story and don't drop it Why it need more word just to write it so I will promote this website http://DoWeeklyWork.com/?userid=51570 Thanks you
It's a good novel, but to slow at update... ...can you make it little faster for the update? Your reader are not patient enough to waiting for 1 chapter each week...
please updated new chapter ... please please please please ....mooooooooooooooorrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrre eeeeeeeee chapttttttttttteeerrrrrrrrrrr
Fast update plsss the almighty author hhhhhhhh..give more chapteerrrrrr...update sssssssssssssssss... i hope u can update 2 chapter perday mr author...we wait u to comeback to bring our future luffy
dropped ? ....,..........................................??? ?????????????????????????????????? Hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm
Well normally I do not criticize but here goes a very entertaining story I hope you do not let her fall friend , because if you continue I promise that I will drop stones c:
"Good story and background. The mc is op but it's really fun to read. Good luck and I hope you can continue it." - epic_tides What he said as i agree completely, so thanks author for giving us such a wonderful fanfiction.
I absolutely love this novel so I'm giving this a 5 star!!! and some people might not agree and say bull**** and criticise but they should know that they are reading for fun and in my opinion anything for fun and amazing to read like this novel deserves 5 star ;)
Is this story dropped?? I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!! I LOVE THIS STORY!!
It's a story of a mc who will deal with yonko and the world governement to woo girls like it is normal to do that xd , if there was a thing i will add it's to take all the beauty of shokugeki no soma in his crew like that can ameliore themselves as he taste tasty food
Revelar spoiler Good but please don't go around teaching them cultivation and givin them cultivation mantras just Hakirokushiki or sword intent is enough.i know a fanfic novel is better different from original series but havin the entire energy system change even in small number make some bad impression only the mc havin them is enough.no offense man
I know it is unfair to write a bad review only after reading the first four chapters. The story started awesome. A supreme cultivator’s soul fused with a dying earthling. But knowing that he can destroy the whole One Piece world by just regaining a small fraction of his original cultivation, why is he such a sucker for the plot? I’m sure he has more important things to do, such as getting stronger and then revenge. But it seems he is going to redo all the canon Luffy’s adventures. Dropped.
Revelar spoiler love it<3 .....................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
good background.Thank you for this story author but please dont leave us hanging after tis googd story pls dont drop it.again thank you very much
this is a great series keep it up---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
Author-nim I want to ask.. Are you release this story ini "wattpad" too?? I find your story release in "***.wattpad.com" by _EtramaRaizel_69
That was really great, I love how the story start and continue until now. I have high hope for u n i will support you with **. Thanks for the chapters.
Ok I have nothing to complain about i love it. I really like how you are having the mc training the crew. I have a idea for Nami instead of using science to control the wether have him teach her a dou to do so.
Bagus. Epic. Mcnya tidak menonjolkan kemampuan nya. Kalau bisa alur ceritanya tidak melenceng terlalu jauh. Karena pembaca/penyuka one piece lebih senang kalau ceritanya tetap dialur. Semangat