Either use name or Old man Both together feel weird
"Mr. Kenny, I guess you're still breathing, old man," Damon replied, slowly turning back.
Fantasy · Alexcj
Roasted or raw?
The man would be someone's next meal if he was discovered hiding here. Damon knew it was of no use; he would eventually die of infection or starvation.
Fantasy · Alexcj
dying on spot rather than killing on spot
"I need to avoid those cracked pavements; I don't want to end up with broken bones in a ditch like Leonardo." Leonardo was a graceful soul. Because he neglected the precautions of the pavement, he ended up in a ditch with fractured ribs that punctured his heart, killing him on the spot.
Fantasy · Alexcj
I think, In this scenario its more of a phenomenon
However, all that went down the drain when the Void came to Earth. Purple dark clouds enveloped the sky, plunging Earth into complete darkness.
Fantasy · Alexcj
Overall a good start, Though I suggest you to read your work after writing, you could easily stop some mistakes while reading out loud. That would be very helpful for your writing. Anyway thank you for the chapter
Yum
When the rat was cooked thoroughly, Damon started to chomp down his hard work. Savoring each bite with the smell of burnt flesh in the air, he swallowed in satisfaction.
Fantasy · Alexcj
lol
The dead rat was unable to respond because it was, well, dead.
Fantasy · Alexcj
Living bravely is better than being a coward, His mother and father would not want him to follow their footstep so soon.
In fact, all the feelings of regret and sorrow would be vanquished with one clean cut to the throat.
Fantasy · Alexcj
I assume child here is, Damon you said previously, So use Damon name only
"Daddy!" the child shouted, petrified at the sight. But the sound of a headless body collapsing to the ground, blood gushing out from the neck like a fountain, painted the floor red.
Fantasy · Alexcj
Thank you for the chapter
The Cursed Grimoire
Fantasy · Alexcj