pranav_solanki

reading new chapter

The author is just getting constructive criticism which can help him in improving this fanfiction

it's not just about the canon characters even mc who know the future is dumb as rock he thinks having bigger dragon means being invincible despite knowing vaghar the so called strong and biggest dragon was killed by caraxes which was half of it's size so in the dragon battle the size is not the sole factor also many dragons makes no difference when he gets posined or stabbed in neck so showing off all of power and attitude to his enemies in their territory is most stupid thing I ever seen

I think in the recent chapter mc forgot all about the manner and just think that he the biggest dragon so the world will bow to him and the most frustrating part is that there are no consequences of mc action . he being rude to king , queen and to his father . constantly fighting with is bride and her family . all mc does is fight , fight and he does not think how his actions will have impact on image or In his allies . he also just ignores his allies in staring of this arc we have mention about stark coming with him to see the tourney then there no mention of them again the entire arc like the never existed

as said earlier the author keeps on ignoring the wider world and power that Lord and common people possess like the Hightower biggest is not army of 2000 but their close connection with the faith the order of maester which is them one of the most influential house in the westros damage that faith and maester cannot be same as dragon but it's more dangerous than that because it's raises an entire kingdom religion and all the scholar against u just as they did against the aneays and meagor therefore the mc comment about alicent being weak is most stupid things mc ever told in this story

I think this story and mc character are well developed but the world building is absolutely pathetic it's all about the mc and his family this make story a lifeless story . bcuz the westros is not just about mc and it's family There are more things in the world like Lord, common people, being the most powerful, faith does not make u a great ruler or king like meagor the cureal despite being one the most powerful Targaryen he has to constantly face the rebellions till his death . and in this story mc openly released dragon fire on heir and killed a night in the tourney like eating a breakfast make look impulsive and spoiled prince who clearly has no idea how the people will take his actions as the next coming of the meagor the crueal

author u need to increase the length of your story and u need add more pov of other lords ,kingdom (like Lannister martell and Lord of essos)and what they think about. and how he has brought changes in the canon story this will be more helping in understanding the power and impact that mc has in the world he also can learn magic and go conquer in essos rather than just waiting here in westos for dance of dragon . in my opinion mc is already powerful enough to stop the dance of dragon from happening by simply killing all them he don't need to wait for them to grow up and fight them