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2 more fruits. Thunder fruit and vampire fruit. The thunder fruit is op. If it’s perception or speed and power it fits perfectly and it’s flexible for usage. Vampire fruit isn’t known much so you can make the user with high HP points easier to heal yourself through blood of others and you can store blood into the space of dark fruit. You can keep your peak state for longer and recover yourself faster. Though the 2 fruit combo ultimately belongs to your choice. I just think a combo of dark fruit which restraints other and thunder fruit for speed attacks and vampire for long battle and fast recovery

The translation is good when you read a lot of Chinese fanfic they have a lot of good idea and interesting stories but the translation can be annoying. So this story was way too smooth to think it was that.

Is this a translation? If so what’s the name/link for the original.

What is the raw title for the og fanfic

The story can use a system or a contract devil fruit. You trade anything from lifespan,talent,devil fruit and you can also remove the defect of the devil fruit. You can be a lunarian clan that is small and hidden. The timeline could be early just like this fanfic that is before canon starts. You could try to show how if someone not from the one piece world abuses a devil fruit with creativity. For example the more more fruit that can increase talent/comprenshion/understanding. Cube fruit where I read one mc used it to break down the people and creatures he kills into power or devil fruit factor or skills. Basically a way to use a devil fruit in a broken way with understanding and creativity. He can also try to take the lunarian settlement Sky island. The way the lunarian race is showed in one piece didn’t bring it justice. You can try to view of that point or you can do the opposite and the mc is a celestial dragon and focus on political and power play.

If you are going to write another fanfic with similar setting to this fanfic I would recommend one piece. It could have higher creativity and power scaling is more wide than naruto. It has more of kingdom building and action which might be more unique and can make the fanfic long lasting.

I wanted to know would the physique of the ninjas the go to the one piece world get stronger through training and eating sea kings in that world. Would that mean they would have something similar to sage body? Like more chakra and more vitality. Would they mix two power systems like chakra and Haki to become stronger or would they be able to awake the mangkeyo easier because they have stronger bodies and more chakra.

I doesn’t matter if there is a filler chapter as long as it gives you time to set a solid story rather than rushed and loose. I wanted to ask will you take the route of the mc staying on the earth and the planet survives or do they go to another planet? Also just a suggestion, try not to push the magical aspect too far into the story so I doesn’t lose its core. Basically only the mc and a few characters can use above human level things so it will feel unique and reasonable when he does outlandish shit.

If the naruto arc can be written in detail with no rushing maybe you try to release two chapters or you can make each chapter longer or something of that sort. At the end of the day it’s better to write your story rather than changing it from comments that will destroy its essence and the core creation of the story you write.