Cetotris

Cetotris

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Just a simple internet addict, using the time to read and write stories. You can also find me on Wattpad: @Cetotris

2022-01-26 Beigetreten Global
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Cetotris
Cetotris
10 months ago
Commented

Thank you for the increadible story. While it is unfortunate that we won’t get to read the newer arcs, it is also understandable.

Cetotris
Cetotris
1 years ago
Commented

I mean, you have a point. But it’s not that bad, we are still reading it after all. If you want to remake it, here are some ideas. Make the colour drain smaller. Like only one country sized. Wait a year after the quirk accident to let her be kidnapped. Or else, it would be suspicious. Her kidnappers think they kidnapped a 4/5 year old, they will either try to be nice or give her pain when she doesn’t listen for the loyalty. And she will likely have a direct ‘parent’ for that, since she is too young to be by herself. As I said, she is 4/5. Even if she had a powerful quirk, she would never be allowed a choice or meet anyone important. As for character development, mc might get a bit more childish over the years, because she can act like a child and it is normal and after the kidnapping turn colder. I’m not quite sure in which direction you wanted to bring the story, but I’m sure it will be good. I personally would have continued reading and If even if you drop or remake it, I hope you still have fun writing things. Btw, don’t worry. I had the same problem with my first story.

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Cetotris
Cetotris
1 years ago
Commented

Idk compared to experience the torture that is 8mprel down, maybe death is merciful. Well if you ignore that they could escape in a few months time thanks to Luffy.

I remember being a bit more... Lenient with others.

One Piece: Reborn as Enel

One Piece: Reborn as Enel

Anime & Comics · VeganMaster

Cetotris
Cetotris
2 years ago
Replied to Butterblock

You‘re right, but I think there would be more than enough people that stopped when they were strong enough and settled down by making money through teaching or medicine. Though their village was certainlytoo small to have someone like that.

Cetotris
Cetotris
2 years ago
Replied to Butterblock

I don’t really think that’s much of a problem considering that medicine should be quite advanced with the help of cultivators, which significantly reduces chances of dying that early as most cases of death were illness or war at that time.

Cetotris
Cetotris
2 years ago
Commented

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With a small smile, Ito slowly took out a scroll and with a small puff, white smoke escaped into the surroundings as a 2nd him appeared.

Kunoichi of Iwagakure

Kunoichi of Iwagakure

Anime & Comics · Cetotris

Cetotris
Cetotris
2 years ago
Commented

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It was a puppet that looked very lifelike and could even pass as Kurai's twin because of their great resemblance, with only some things like hair color and clothing being different.

Kunoichi of Iwagakure

Kunoichi of Iwagakure

Anime & Comics · Cetotris

Cetotris
Cetotris
2 years ago
Replied to Cetotris

I think, that this is the most fitting soundtrack for this scene.

Cetotris
Cetotris
2 years ago
Commented

Yeah, I’m not so sure about that either now.

Since it is like this, I will probably skip through those 3 years in a single, short, chapter before getting to the war arc. Before that, however, I have a plan to make at least one more important story part directly after they return home. I have not decided which ending to choose but it will likely be different than the original one.

Kunoichi of Iwagakure

Kunoichi of Iwagakure

Anime & Comics · Cetotris

Cetotris
Cetotris
2 years ago
Commented

all the people going for tiger... fox is way better

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  • Kunoichi of Iwagakure original

    Kunoichi of Iwagakure

    Anime & Comics DARK TRAGEDY ANIME BETRAYAL NARUTO KILLER FASTPACED NOROMANCE

    Abgeschlossen

    "Am I free? Am I allowed to live as myself?" "Naturally, you are human!" "But... How?" Before the start of the 2nd shinobi world war, Nozomi was born. However, she was only known as codename Kurai. The reason for her birth was a duo to the mistrust Iwagakure had towards the other nations, which resulted in the crossbreeding of multiple bloodlines from all around, not only in the land of earth but also in other countries. After the first Tsuchikage died, Iwagakure continued to abduct members of major clans under the order of the second Tsuchikage, whose bloodlines they deemed useful. This resulted in the mysterious disappearance of shinobi between the first and second shinobi world war. The results were a small squad of deadly assassins who had inherited different abilities, depending on how much they had won in the Gene lottery. Nozomi wasn't the strongest in any way, but she was the one that survived the longest. Follow her story while she battles her rival, adopts children, gets betrayed, and betrays while dealing with an identity crisis and guilt. ------- This is an OC story and any character not from the OG Naruto belongs to me. Disclaimer: I own neither the cover nor Naruto and if you are the owner of the cover and want it down, please contact me.

    25 Chs 191 Sammlungen

  • Puppet's leash original

    Puppet's leash

    Fantasy R18 SYSTEM MAGIC BEAUTY YURI

    Cilia is only one of millions of chosen ones, used by the Gods to entertain themselves, while all others were thrown away like trash. However her wish to live a relaxing life, is but a dream as she is forced to choose, become the enemy of her race and sacrificing her family or to be free. What is her future going to look like and how will she continue or will she just be used until she is but a mere puppet. –––– This Novel is basically dropped. If it will ever be continued it will be made completely anew. THIS IS A TEMPORARY COVER! I don’t have any rights, if it’s yours and you want it taken down, tell me.

    22 Chs 170 Sammlungen