I mean, you have a point. But it’s not that bad, we are still reading it after all. If you want to remake it, here are some ideas. Make the colour drain smaller. Like only one country sized. Wait a year after the quirk accident to let her be kidnapped. Or else, it would be suspicious. Her kidnappers think they kidnapped a 4/5 year old, they will either try to be nice or give her pain when she doesn’t listen for the loyalty. And she will likely have a direct ‘parent’ for that, since she is too young to be by herself. As I said, she is 4/5. Even if she had a powerful quirk, she would never be allowed a choice or meet anyone important. As for character development, mc might get a bit more childish over the years, because she can act like a child and it is normal and after the kidnapping turn colder. I’m not quite sure in which direction you wanted to bring the story, but I’m sure it will be good. I personally would have continued reading and If even if you drop or remake it, I hope you still have fun writing things. Btw, don’t worry. I had the same problem with my first story.
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Idk compared to experience the torture that is 8mprel down, maybe death is merciful. Well if you ignore that they could escape in a few months time thanks to Luffy.
I remember being a bit more... Lenient with others.
Anime & Comics · VeganMaster
You‘re right, but I think there would be more than enough people that stopped when they were strong enough and settled down by making money through teaching or medicine. Though their village was certainlytoo small to have someone like that.
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Fantasy · Dreyerboys
I don’t really think that’s much of a problem considering that medicine should be quite advanced with the help of cultivators, which significantly reduces chances of dying that early as most cases of death were illness or war at that time.
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Fantasy · Dreyerboys
With a small smile, Ito slowly took out a scroll and with a small puff, white smoke escaped into the surroundings as a 2nd him appeared.
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
It was a puppet that looked very lifelike and could even pass as Kurai's twin because of their great resemblance, with only some things like hair color and clothing being different.
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
I think, that this is the most fitting soundtrack for this scene.
Yeah, I’m not so sure about that either now.
Since it is like this, I will probably skip through those 3 years in a single, short, chapter before getting to the war arc. Before that, however, I have a plan to make at least one more important story part directly after they return home. I have not decided which ending to choose but it will likely be different than the original one.
Anime & Comics · Cetotris
all the people going for tiger... fox is way better
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Thank you for the increadible story. While it is unfortunate that we won’t get to read the newer arcs, it is also understandable.
One Piece: Reincarnated as Vivi
Anime & Comics · Krio_Genix