it broke my immersion.
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Fantasy · LazyPath
a boy from.. not a from boy.....
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Fantasy · LazyPath
why is it like this?I spaced it out to make it readable.
And, "Hiro... I'm in love with someone else"
Fantasy · TurtleMaster6319
I think it would be better if you did something to indicate the past.something like:a few hours agoorflashback you know, to make it flow
And, "Hiro... I'm in love with someone else"
Fantasy · TurtleMaster6319
* he felt more than/then that....sorry, my English is good😄
Heartbroken. That was an understatement, because he felt even more that that, he felt betrayed, set up, even sabotaged, and all by the very one woman he loves.
Fantasy · TurtleMaster6319
to me, he seems stupid.
Was he possibly thinking playing stupid would fool her mother? She knew he wasn't that stupid... or at least, she thought him not to be?
Fantasy · Czzi
This reminds me of Gira Gira by Ado
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Fantasy · Blazuku
what's his age?
Archie woke up in his bed, gasping for air. Sunlight was breaching his curtains, alerting him that it was morning. He quickly threw off his bedsheets to look at his destroyed leg, but to his surprise, his leg was fine. Archie looked at his side, noticing that he wasn't bleeding anymore. Hell, it appeared to have never started bleeding in the first place. 'System, tell me everything you know about Night Terrors.' Archie commanded the system in his mind. A pale blue text box appeared in the centre of his vision.
Fantasy · ShadowAmeratsu
honestly I hope he gets hit by a dose of reality and matures.
If his Mother was truly gone, along with most of humanity itself, he knew what she would want from him: to use what little strength he had to help others. Even if he wasn't much of a hero himself, it was simply the torch left to him.
Fantasy · DelzGB
them legs!🥴
"Huh?" As soon as he stepped out of the room, his expressions twisted as he felt that there was no ground beneath them.
My Beautiful Disciples, I'm really not the Main Character!
Fantasy · Revonne