Alright. I found this chapter a little lacking. The element of surprise is there at the end, but the tension that was supposed to be there as he was searching for the meaning of his life was a little lacking. Could have done a better job there. And the anger that he had expressed that he was helpless could have been done in a much better manner. The emotion was shown very slightly, whilst helplessness and anger should have been stressed more there. A good read. Keep it up!
A really well penned chapter. Way to go The blending of the imminent danger and his situation was perfect. And the ending cliffhanger is neither too rushed nor too lacking. It's a perfect drop, in my opinion. To the next chapter
Okay, my thoughts on the first chapter. It has been well paced, the beginning and the mystery surrounding the perpetrators have been portrayed well. Will need some fixing of Grammar and a re-read will allow you to find some omitted words in some paragraphs that your eyes might have missed. All in all, an extremely good start.
So, to begin my review, I would love to point out here that this author has made this book into a work of art. The artist 'BrewingFantasies', has always been a master at mixing some adult elements into the story seamlessly, and they seem to have done it again, only this time taking it up a notch, further indulging me, the reader, into the depths of this world, the character, the tension of the situation, every word has been strung carefully together, woven as smooth as a fabric of silk. I hope the author can keep this up! Great work, keep more coming! P.S.: For anyone considering reading, definitely do!
A well done job indeed
"Jack Brown and Sarah Robinson are the winners of this competition", read the paper. After having a close look at Mitchell's face, he resembled the old man he had knocked into yesterday. Once more, he had a smile as he thought of the perfect disguise Mitchell wore.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
Kind of, yeah. You'll find a lot of similarities, but there will be differences as well. Be ready
"If this was a murder then, how did the culprit escape without opening the window and the door? It was locked from the inside", he thought as he looked back at the question. He was now sure that it was murder, as he felt the bumps were slightly different, meaning that the quantity of liquid that were in those cups were different.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
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He sat down and pulled out his phone, looking into who the man was and why he had gone missing. 'I will still anyhow take credit for Jack's work. Just let him do all the groundwork. We'll let him know that this man could be a potential person of interest', he thought as he typed a message and sent it to him.
My Holmes System
Fantasy · Tales_Within_Me
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original MMORPG: Quantum Nexus
Leonard Smith, known as "Lee," leads the professional gaming team, the 'Extremists,' in the virtual reality game 'Legends.' After a devastating defeat by their rivals, the 'Predacons,' Lee and his team are forced into early retirement. Disillusioned, Lee receives a message from his mentor, urging him to join the highly anticipated game, 'Quantum Nexus.' Unaware of the lurking dangers, Lee enters Quantum Nexus to reclaim his honor and uncover hidden truths, as he battles against those who seek his downfall. Quantum Nexus becomes the ultimate arena for Lee's redemption as he fights to protect the integrity of the virtual world he once called home. Will he emerge victorious or fall victim to those who conspire against him?5 Chs 2 Sammlungen
- original
C.L.A.R.A
Lucas Davidson, a brilliant scientist, created the project 'Clara'. When creating her, he found out the plans that they had for his own project, which he believed would lead to the doom of humanity, thus making an escape from the facility. Twenty three years later, his project humanoid 'Clara', has grown and the people find them again. Deciding to end his life in order to save the world, he sacrifices and urges her to go on a journey, to find her purpose, to become human. Deciding to meet with a person whom her father had trusted, she embarks on the journey, vowing revenge against the people that pushed her father to death, and finding the reasons why she was hidden away. This is a journey filled with hate, anger, revenge, blood, discovery, but most of all, her journey to become an android that could be human8 Chs 4 Sammlungen
- original
My Holmes System
It's been 50 years since the death of the Legendary Detective, Sherlock Holmes. The Holmes family and the Watson family have come to a decision to unlock the house 221B Baker Street. Sherlock has made a test, and only the first two participants who pass will be allowed to stay in it. Jack Brown, an ordinary detective who is fascinated by Sherlock's methods of investigations, decides to take the test and succeeds in getting into the house. That night, something bizarre happens to him, and from that moment, everything changes. [Congratulations! You have been chosen to be the Holder of Holmes System] [You have met up with Sherlock Holmes and received his blessing. Scanning host to see compatibility] [Scan Complete. Host is 100% compatible] [Beginning to integrate into host's body] [Integrating… Integration done]40 Chs 79 Sammlungen
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System: Inherited
4.62
Lucas Heart, a prince of the Heart Kingdom, has set out to explore the world outside. He is famously known as the 'Eunuch Mage', as he could never use magic. This has always made him quite depressed, and he trained himself in all kinds of combats, to make up for it. When he experiences a near-death experience, something weird happens to him. [Checking DNA] [DNA has been verified] [Host has been identified as a direct descendant] [Initiating Awakening] Lucas is stunned, and he doesn't know what this is. Follow him on his journey as he learns more about himself and the system, unlocking his past and grows stronger.214 Chs 4.8k Sammlungen
From what I have read here, the book is extremely good A totally refreshing Idea with the way Vampires and Hunters have been portrayed in this novel. It isn't exactly reincarnation either, since Chris underwent an experiment of some sorts with his own free will. Kudos to that point. For the people that are wondering if the book is worth a read, I would definitely say it is, due to the way it is penned and strung along together. Though I also have a hunch that the readers would want more, so for the binge readers, I suggest you be patient. The pacing of the story is neither too fast nor too slow for me. There might be people who will prefer a little slower or faster, but I feel the blending is a good mix, taking us between fast and slow, keeping the shifting barely noticeable. All in all, a good book to read, and looking forward to more chapters in the future!
Chalice Of Blood
Urban · THE_WORDSMITH