One of the worst chapters, grammar-wise. I wanted to check how bad it was and it was every other paragraph. The story is fun, but those mistakes seem to be getting worse with each chapter.
writing logic error. you described the attacker with an axe but he shot the bull with a gun. should have mentioned it in the previous paragraph.
The gauge was packed with special types of sharp nails and the moment it burst, the bull's head was filled with small holes as blood gushed out.
Cursed Immortality
Fantasy · Wahi
* and, he first took a shot ... a bit messy sentence that could be rewritten as: and he was the first one to take a shot at the...
The attack with an axe was ready for this and he first took a shot at the bull's right eye, 'Boom!'
Cursed Immortality
Fantasy · Wahi
attack => attacker
The attack with an axe was ready for this and he first took a shot at the bull's right eye, 'Boom!'
Cursed Immortality
Fantasy · Wahi
* pierce => pierced
However, before the bull could charge, gunshots rang from a distance and one of them pierce into its left eye!
Cursed Immortality
Fantasy · Wahi
*while lower => while lowering black => block
The Tiger Bull instantly notices the attackers and stands straight while lower his head. It was taking a charging stance to black the attacker with an axe and shotgun.
Cursed Immortality
Fantasy · Wahi
This chapter feels like 100 chapters squeezed into one. I would LOVE to read about all those events as they unfold, instead of very fast backstory speedrun. I recognize the author wants to tell a different take, but I see HUGE story potential here that got skipped over.
*wound not wood
Jacob noticed the wood on his left shoulder, which was like he was stabled by a thick drill!
Cursed Immortality
Fantasy · Wahi
Let's start with positives. A really interesting and unusual world that is full of intriguing elements. MC is not naive and horny, which is very refreshing. The "system" is brutal but believable, for a world of magic that is. now the bad. Grammar. oh the grammar has been murdered, buried, dug up and shot again. Numerous typos, both in regular words and names. It really feels like an automatic translation at times. Conclusion: If you are willing to ignore grammar errors, the story is really captivating and unusual.
first chapter, but it's really well written and interesting right from the first paragraph!
The Runic Alchemist
Fantasy · GlaringError